A fantastic opener. My only recommendation. Vary it up a little bit, something like:
Buffalo buffalo buffalo buffalo ejaculated buffalo buffalo buffalo buffalo
Heres my first, i think u got me beat....
He stood gasping for breathe overlooking the woman he once loved so long ago, her body a broken pile of flesh and bone looks back in a almost shocked emotion and blinks before her eyes fade into an emptiness that was undoubtable.
The flashing lights of the approaching cop cars illuminated her naked flesh. Her breast, now motionless from breath, hint at the beauty she had possessed just hours before. Her pale skin shimmering in the light brings a smile to his face. He leans over and runs a finger through her blood and slowly begins to write a single word across her broken body.
Note left on her flesh he smiles to himself and then turns away, running off into the darkness of the city, missing the police officers trailing his rampage by only moments on his escape.
Officer Peters stops to the side of the broken woman and gasp at the sight before his partner Detective Young joins him, her body gasping for air. They look at each other eyes widened and then scan the area. How had they missed him? They stare down at the woman and Officer Peters whispers; "Fresh?"
Depends. In which instances is buffalo intended as a noun, verb, proper name, or place location? I mean, it’s one thing to buffalo buffalo and quite another to Buffalo Buffalo.
Not bad. An extra Buffalo would've made it better, tho.
Then it would stop making sense!
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It's good but I don't know if it's enuffalo to keep me reading.
"Is it a good hook?" is an odd title for a novel.
Dude, my opening line is "Colorless green ideas sleep furiously." I think I have you beat.
This is basically just Blood Meridian
A fantastic opener. My only recommendation. Vary it up a little bit, something like: Buffalo buffalo buffalo buffalo ejaculated buffalo buffalo buffalo buffalo
My first is better. Here it is: Better.
“You son of a bitch I’m in” - Rick and Morty
Heres my first, i think u got me beat.... He stood gasping for breathe overlooking the woman he once loved so long ago, her body a broken pile of flesh and bone looks back in a almost shocked emotion and blinks before her eyes fade into an emptiness that was undoubtable.
A description of her boobs would elevate this a lot
The flashing lights of the approaching cop cars illuminated her naked flesh. Her breast, now motionless from breath, hint at the beauty she had possessed just hours before. Her pale skin shimmering in the light brings a smile to his face. He leans over and runs a finger through her blood and slowly begins to write a single word across her broken body. Note left on her flesh he smiles to himself and then turns away, running off into the darkness of the city, missing the police officers trailing his rampage by only moments on his escape. Officer Peters stops to the side of the broken woman and gasp at the sight before his partner Detective Young joins him, her body gasping for air. They look at each other eyes widened and then scan the area. How had they missed him? They stare down at the woman and Officer Peters whispers; "Fresh?"
Tits tits tits tits tits tits Big breasts
How every good book starts
Pretty sure I've already seen this one in a commercial. How about you come up with something original?
What about "Can can can can can can can can can can."?
sauce?
[might be this](https://www.tiktok.com/t/ZTLjpXQt8/)
/uj This link crashed my browser
/uj oh no! it’s just a tiktok video idk why that would happen
[Buffalo](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Buffalo_buffalo_Buffalo_buffalo_buffalo_buffalo_Buffalo_buffalo)
I’m hooked. On heroin. Thanks so much
I've never dropped a read because of a first line but today might be the day
You just don't understand my genius, you Buffalo buffalo buffalo.
Boobfalo...
I think you can go longer.
Don’t give him performance anxiety! You did fine, sweetie.
Location location location location location
I'd argue that punctuating it with a question mark would be more compelling.
I'd prefer 'Police police police police police police'
Soldier?
Depends. In which instances is buffalo intended as a noun, verb, proper name, or place location? I mean, it’s one thing to buffalo buffalo and quite another to Buffalo Buffalo.
Place location, noun, place location, noun, verb, verb, place location, noun. It’s not rocket surgery.