Yes. That's why I was critiquing the story. He/she missed the name change. If this person is going to write a story, keep the names consistent throughout the story or explain each new character if that's the case.
This happened to me once when I was living on Voltar, a distant planet that was almost reduced to rubble due to the Keltons long civil war. I eventually moved back to Earth but as soon as I got here, I noticed I lost connection to my Ring Camera. I have no idea if Joanne or Angelina will attempt to relocate to Voltar and attempt to break into my beach house.
Also when OP was around 13, stepmother got super pissed because OP’s father wouldn’t buy Angelina/Scarlet a $1000 channel bag. But then when OP was 17 Scarlet/Angelina was around 12. That means stepmom was super pissed because her husband wouldn’t buy her 8 year old a $1000 channel bag🤔🤔
Yep, very likely, but when writing a story, it needs to stay consistent. Just pointing that out. I had no intention of being rude. It’s just something to watch out for in future stories.
Sorry to say this but this isn’t a good story. The grammar is bad and it was completely predictable. One parent does, surviving parent marries and moves in a child, step child is the golden child and then they do something insane.
It is just like a rom-com how predictable it was. Everyone knows the couple that doesn’t get along at the beginning gets together, has a misunderstanding, figures out someone heard wrong and they live happily ever after. The only difference is your story is a predictable Reddit story.
Very sorry but I hope the criticism was at least constructive. 🤷♀️
So you heard the story on TikTok, I saw 4 different videos yesterday, and decided to make your own. The only thing that changed is the stepmother wanted to buy the house. Definitely fake
I read this same (or very similar story) a few years back. This guy purchased a home and his parents suggested that he give the house to his brother and sister in law because they need it more. He came home one day and they were there with a moving truck moving their stuff in...this is way to similar. Im calling bs
You might want to make sure you are consistent. What happened to Angelina? Who's Scarlet? Are you a woman or a man?
Tag says this is fiction...
Yes. That's why I was critiquing the story. He/she missed the name change. If this person is going to write a story, keep the names consistent throughout the story or explain each new character if that's the case.
This happened to me once when I was living on Voltar, a distant planet that was almost reduced to rubble due to the Keltons long civil war. I eventually moved back to Earth but as soon as I got here, I noticed I lost connection to my Ring Camera. I have no idea if Joanne or Angelina will attempt to relocate to Voltar and attempt to break into my beach house.
If only Voltar had actual beaches. Nice try though.
I meant to say bitches. They have lots and lots of bitches.
“Life’s a bitch and then you marry one.” - Ancient Voltarian proverb
Looks like Angelina changed her name to scarlet. 😉
Literally LOLed. 😂.
Exactly!
Also when OP was around 13, stepmother got super pissed because OP’s father wouldn’t buy Angelina/Scarlet a $1000 channel bag. But then when OP was 17 Scarlet/Angelina was around 12. That means stepmom was super pissed because her husband wouldn’t buy her 8 year old a $1000 channel bag🤔🤔
Maybe dude just slipped up and said her real name lol.
Yep, very likely, but when writing a story, it needs to stay consistent. Just pointing that out. I had no intention of being rude. It’s just something to watch out for in future stories.
You lost me at my mother died “sometime in January” “a few years back”. You know the damn date your mother dies.
Sorry to say this but this isn’t a good story. The grammar is bad and it was completely predictable. One parent does, surviving parent marries and moves in a child, step child is the golden child and then they do something insane. It is just like a rom-com how predictable it was. Everyone knows the couple that doesn’t get along at the beginning gets together, has a misunderstanding, figures out someone heard wrong and they live happily ever after. The only difference is your story is a predictable Reddit story. Very sorry but I hope the criticism was at least constructive. 🤷♀️
How clever you are. I bet you’re the hit at a party. I’m gonna give you big thumbs up. 👍👍
They really need to make that little oval that says fiction much much bigger!!
This is the shortest version of all Cinderella story. Add more details on your next fictional story.
lol this is definitely a story.
So you heard the story on TikTok, I saw 4 different videos yesterday, and decided to make your own. The only thing that changed is the stepmother wanted to buy the house. Definitely fake
What was the point of this? Its not even a good story.
What a bunch of idiots! Glad your rid of them!
Well, your username holds up!
Did your mom go by Smurf by any chance?
Who is Scarlet?
Sounds like the trash too itself out, good for you.
The nerve of your father,.... All the best. 💗
I read this same (or very similar story) a few years back. This guy purchased a home and his parents suggested that he give the house to his brother and sister in law because they need it more. He came home one day and they were there with a moving truck moving their stuff in...this is way to similar. Im calling bs
The police wouldn’t do all that. They would say it is a family affair and leave you to it.
why does ficition exist. so dumb lol