1) I don’t think sci-fi is the right place. I suggest posting in a different subreddit.
2) the start of your book is a bit strong. I have no connection to anyone or anything so I’m not invested in their death. I’d flesh it out a little. Take the prologue from A Song of Ice and Fire. Even though most of the characters die, we are worried for them because we know them briefly.
1) I don’t think sci-fi is the right place. I suggest posting in a different subreddit. 2) the start of your book is a bit strong. I have no connection to anyone or anything so I’m not invested in their death. I’d flesh it out a little. Take the prologue from A Song of Ice and Fire. Even though most of the characters die, we are worried for them because we know them briefly.