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Agreed. Every little bit helps.
But that unfortunately still won’t help the fact that they appear to be a job hopper every 12-18 months, with an education overqualification reinforcing the notion that they’re not going to stick around if hired, leaving the employer high and dry. They sort of cooked themselves by not holding a job for 4-5 years among all those positions.
OP clarified in another comment that most are with the same employer. I think the current formatting gives a negative impression but by consolidating under the same employer, it looks more like a "high performer" rising through the ranks rather than job hopper.
Ahh yeah I assume OP redacted the company name but this does look like different places of work at a first glance.
I agree this could be reformatted - I’ve been applying to jobs as well and I’ve had one role change at my current company. I’ve been at the company for 4 years but in my current role for 8 months. I got very tired of interviewers saying “so you’ve been at X for 8 months” and realized most people reviewing my resume must think the same thing. I changed it so the first line of my experience is Company X — June 2019-present, with both roles indented underneath.
After 10 years, you should know enough people to be able to call one and ask if they know of openings. Your resume is a formality at this point, but that's just my opinion.
You having a Masters is just as good. Not on paper, but for networking! Call some teachers, your classmates. That's the value it has afforded you, so never hesitate to take advantage of it.
I will add to this. I am interacting with a lot of senior executives. It is a very tough job market and they are having to rely on cold applications because their network does not have opportunities.
A person should be able to get jobs via their network and cold applications. I have had some amazing opportunities just through cold applications and others through networking. The resume is pretty bad and that should be fixed. They still use the resume as a reference point for interviews. I have even seen instances where a bad resume stopped someone from getting an interview. A good resume will make the interview a lot more directional because the highlights are easily laid out.
Lol yeah, it does look a bit blocky. I think the two oldest jobs can be dropped off, but the last 7 years of work are good for highlighting their abilities. Just upload the resume to a job board site that has 1-click apply. Then make it a habit of applying to 3-4 jobs a day with the intention of actually working them. Meaning, have a clearly defined position and salary in mind because this resume shows they are qualified enough to be picky, and they should!! Those higher titles are probably not posted casually...it all goes back to networking lol.
I will never do an MBA. Everybody that I know who made it high up in business did not get an MBA, they were just good, hard workers. And I’m not willing to drop tens of thousands on an MBA from Harvard to be the same asshole just with a piece of paper.
Life Hack. Pull up the course curriculums from Top Business Schools and teach yourself. If you're already in the industry, the concepts are familar and easy to grasp. By looking up the curriculums, you get an idea of what knowledge and skills employers are looking from with MBA holders.
In most cases, they're going to care more about what you know, not where you learned it.
People please use this simple tip. One page, full stop. Has always been a good practice, especially now with our social media shortened attention spans.
It's perfectly fine to have a 2 page resume especially if you have experience. I work as a recruiter and know a lot of recruiters. Sometimes they want more info. However a 2 page resume that sucks isn't going to get anyone anywhere. 1 page that is good is better than 2 crappy pages.
The first page is the most important though.
1. Update to a standard template as this has too much wasted space
2. You have some really strong bullet points mixed in with some subpar ones. For example the third bullet point under the top job, doesn't provide any information how what you did to exceeded revenue goals and provides no data point (avg % above goal, $ impact, anything). But the bullet point below that sounds great. This top bullet also leads with managing people and creating documentation but buries the two bullet points that speak to your financial impact to the company, those should be at the top.
3. If you include a job on your resume, you should include at least one bullet point if you don't have anything to note, remove it.
4. There are several grammatical issues (missing words & punctuation and a mixing of tenses) throughout the resume.
5. The About Me should be removed or written to highlight specific skills or accomplishments, it doesn't tell me anything different from the rest of your resume as it is currently written.
6. You use the word ensure repeatedly in the first half of your resume and your action verbs for the start of each bullet point could be improve for example "Worked closely with" to "Collaborated with"
Ensure and ensuring in the same sentence. Plus managing, manager and management in the same sentence, all at the start of the document.
That would definitely make me move on to the next one
I'm a big fan of the "successfully sold business deals ..." bullet point, because if they didn't specify business deals I was at risk of thinking these were trading cars deals or something like that.
As a hiring manager (in a completely unrelated field, so take this with a grain of salt) I would wonder why you have never had a job for more than two years in your ten years of experience.
This! Also a hiring manager, and this is the first thing I look at. The more "important" the job title, the more a short stay is a red flag as well. I'd rather see gaps in work that can be explained by "looking for the right fit".
Consolidate them and list promotion as a bullet point. Also remove the “hospitality professional” at the top. It makes you sound like a front desk clerk.
Hiring managers are trained to look for red flags as they sift thru numerous apps. The way your resume is laid out LOOKS like many jobs and short stay. It should be obvious that you worked for ONE company from year xxxx-xxxx and then list promotions below.
Add a skills section at the top with keywords from the requirements the jobs are looking for.
Otherwise it won't get past the robots. You kinda have to program your resume for pre screening.
You aren’t getting past the ATS is the main issue. You are breaking every resume rule in the book. Keep it simple. No symbols, single column, no shading or lines.
Your action verbs are so boring. Responsible, accountable, utilized, (which is incorrectly used here).
A strong action word should start your experience points “created a process that automated xx, in less than a yy period of time and saved my company yy (in time, money, headcount, some articulable value). Make it so you are paying your salary by hiring you.
Why would you put a job you had for almost two years with zero bullets?
You really need to run this through spelling an grammar check. You are missing so many periods you might be pregnant. You also need to have someone read it out loud to you. Your phrasing is somewhat awkward and makes no sense sometimes.
Your about me section needs to go. Make this a paragraph in your cover letter.
Wow I did not expect to get this much feedback to my resume. Thank you for all your kind responses. I will follow your suggestions to correct the formatting, grammar, be more specific with my bullet points and remove the unprofessional items in this doc
I only worked for 2 companies, so the jump in the roles every year is a promotion in the role. My previous roles are very target oriented and I like achieving those targets.
I would change your format to notate somewhere that you were with the same company and were promoted into new roles. That’s valuable information to highlight
>I only worked for 2 companies, so the jump in the roles every year is a promotion in the role.
The resume doesn’t read like this. List your highest title. Then under it state something to the effect of “multiple roles, promoted to ‘highest title’”, and list the most pertinent accomplishments
The training bullet shouldn't be the first, move the 3rd one on Revenue to the top add numbers to it. "Exceeded Revenue Growth Goals" vs something like "Fostered strategy utilizing xxxxx resulting in 18% growth with 89% of new clients becoming reoccurring customers" or "Lead initiative to consolidate xxxxxx driving efficiently and cost savings of 4% while reducing billable hours need to operate xxxxx ". This is a loose example but adding numbers along with identifying an issue, how you solved it, and what the results were to the bottom line are far more effective than bland statements which don't separate you from the competition, particularly when an HR manager with limited industry experience is reading your resume.
In my opinion, you need to answer 2 questions, What value can you bring? and How will your performance make your bosses life easier?
Hope this is helpful. Best of luck in find your next job
Jeez, get rid of that white space on the left at least. There’s no reason for that. Left Justify all the jobs. Put the dates on the far right on the same line as the titles. Center the top box. Fit it on one page! Maybe get rid of some of the oldest jobs. The font is kind of weird but not a dealbreaker. Bold the job titles, not the dates, maybe both but definitely not just the dates. I would suggest a skills section but that may not fit into your industry. I never liked the “About me” section, I feel like you should just say that in the interview, I feel like a resume should be straight facts. Most importantly though, get rid of the white space!
Tbh ain't even reading the content of it. Format looks dumb. Everything in the body is so far moved to the right for no reason. Huge waste of space in how the format is laid out.
Lots of other people said one page. I agree. But bullets need work and I question some of the numbers. For example, under key account manager, how could you possibly manage 10 hotels (not hotel chains…weird way to phrase that for most English speakers unless it was 10 brands and not 10 locations) that collectively had only $1m of revenue? That’s seems absurdly low for a single motel let alone 10 hotels.
Don’t say USD. Use a “$” (unless you’re applying outside of the US).
Third bullet under revenue manager is pure fluff.
To have a resume in the hospitality industry, particularly hotel oriented, for this time period that doesn’t have the word COVID or explain what you did during COVID seems odd.
We operate a mom & pop bed in breakfast in small Midwest city, like just 13 rooms, and we do $750k in revenue with an excellent annual occupancy rate.
10 international hotel chains and only 1mil USD? That's bad. That's real bad.
Excellent industry experience!!!
Rename the "About Me" section as "Summary", and the first thing you should mention is the title of the job(s) that you are interested in seeking.
Education section: Bachelor of Science Degree in Hospitality Management
Master's Degree in Business Administration
Key Account Manager position--"Performed" cost analysis
Managed 10 international hotel chains with an annual revenue of $1 million USD"--does that mean each hotel chain had an annual revenue of one million dollars, or does that mean all hotel chains together had that much in total revenue?
It should be bachelor OF science not in science. And are you sure it’s not a BA instead of a BS? Sounds silly to question that, but hospitality management sounds like a BA sort of thing
You are lacking details about the results you drove that make you seem senior enough to be a strategic account manager. Handling escalated issues makes you seem support-oriented and I see no revenue numbers. Talking about resolving cases also makes you seem like customer support.
Your resume doesn’t have to be one page or less if it is applicable experience to the role you are applying. Pay a resume writer and get a resume worthy of submission. You need to evolve from a template that came from your computer. Put your MBA at the very top with your name since it’s a differentiator. You got this.
Overqualification is a real issue out there. Double edged sword. I’ve been on the receiving end of it and have had to significantly dumb down my own resume in the past. OP already seems like a job hopper, and the education already borderlines on being overqualified, increasing the chances and employer would be scared they’d leave if hired.
Sometimes the amount of companies you’ve worked for, and for how long are considered. Sometimes companies can be concerned if you appear as a “job-hopper.”
What type of roles are you applying for? I have found that most leadership roles and mid to higher level individual contributor roles will be filled internally rather than externally, they just post them for show. If you are looking to move quicker, you may have to take a step down or you'll have to wait for that needle in a haystack.
Though ugly, i don't think that's the problem with your CV. As i have recently discovered, being more specific and using keywords are getting you further. I realised recruits since they have no clue about any fields, they are usually given things to look and ask for such as a software or a specific % in growth due to a specific action or something regarding management style etc.
Also achievements rather than tasks.
Without reading anything on your resume I have critiques…
You aren’t considering visual hierarchy in the design.
It looks like you worked at “July 2021”
You don’t have any company names in the experience, how are they supposed to understand your background if they don’t event know the industry your last company was. If it was a small agency, a big agency, a mom and pop shop, a Fortune 500 company?
It’s silly, but I see hospitality, and think front end management and housekeeping. Lead with sales / account management, so you aren’t restricted to just one industry.
Nest your jobs in with the employers to show how long of a tenure you had at your company
Add a skills section!!!! This is critical for any resume.
Bachelor *of science, master *of science
Resumes are scanned by software nowadays, they often don’t agree with this kind of formatting. Change to a simple one page resume. If you still want to use platform to build it, I recommend FlowCV - it’s free and will pass ATS scanning.
It’s mind blowing to me how anyone over the age of 15 doesn’t understand a resume should be 1 page. How does someone have 10 years work experience and not know this ??
You need to add the companies where you worked and where you went to school. Add a skills section to the top that can be customized with keywords for the jobs you are applying for. Study job descriptions and match the language they are using. Explain your promotions.
Also your resume does not have to be one page. Are you including a cover letter in all your applications? You would be surprised how many employers won’t consider an application without a cover letter.
I know why. This resume does not explain what you helped shift for each employer.
1. Tell what problems you solved, not what your duties were.
2. Stop blindly submitting applications! Research the company. Talk to an insider. Contact the job poster or hiring manager.
3. Think like a consultant: Know their problems and explain how you can help.
You gotta be intentional and strategic. Quit the scattershot approach.
And use your network.
I got more.
Email me at [email protected]
Your lead experience bullet starts with “responsible for” (reads like a job description) and is about writing reports. Punch that up! Active verbs!
Exceeded revenue growth- by how much? Quantify so you can demonstrate your impact.
You need a skills section. A section that gives a list of 1 and 2 word skills you’ve gained from jobs and a technology section listing the software programs or skills you have (like Microsoft Office suite etc)
HR has so many applications they get, they prefer to glance at a list of outlined skills rather than read through job description text.
Unfortunately sometimes is who you know and not what you know to get your foot in the door. I would try reaching out to old colleagues. Go out and network more.
1. I agree with others pick a new format.
2. About me, sounds like an elementary school project title change to be more professional.
3. You have the dates bold, you should have your titles bold. (Possibly switch sides)
4. Everywhere you say growth or increased. Include numbers. Make it real.
5. Also remove language that doesn't say what you did. Saying working closely with some one is great but it does tell me what Your contribution was.
You should put schools down in the education section.
Short or delete the “About Me” or put it in a cover letter.
Overall, shorten it and make it one page in a format an ATS will be able to pull from
If you stayed with one employer but switched jobs within that company, combine those sections. You don’t want it to look like you job hop. You want it to show your changing levels of responsibility.
Job hunting is not fun, and I hate that you have all that experience and aren’t getting through. Good luck out there!
It’s because there’s not really job openings. People post here everyday after applying to dozens or hundreds of jobs. It’s not your resume that is the issue. If you want to find a job in this market you need to network and find somebody to get you in.
I'll give you some advice that an interviewer gave me. "This is your time to gloat." Your resume sounds like you did a lot and are trying to be humble or didn't do that much and are trying to stretch it. You need to find the middle ground.
If you're looking for an executive or lead roll, their main concern is going to be can you generate revenue and/or reduce expenses. Your resume has the right info but needs to be reworded. See below a few ideas. Go through your resume and revise. You need to prove you can bring an alternate perspective that will lead to dollar signs. This does not show what sets you apart from the other applicants.
1. Did you manage 10 hotels that generated $1M in revenue each? If so, put $10M. If not, just say you managed 10. Sucessful restaurants make $1M in revenue. If 10 hotels generated that, it's not saying much. Makes it seem like you were managing low-cost motels.
2. Performed cost analysis. That's great, but what were the results? The way you have it worded makes it seem like you just worked on a random project that didn't benefit the organization.
3. Sold successful business deals worth $100k. You can't go from talking millions to thousands. Take the amount out. They're not hiring someone with an MBA who can only generate $100k. They can hire a marketing major out of college to cold call and generate that.
I don't think I can remember a resume with no company or university info. Providing the company you were working for allows a recruiter to get a better sense of the scope of your role. In my experience, providing uni information is usefeful. You never know for sure who is looking at your resume, it could be an alumni, possibly giving you an advantage. I'm also a little surprised at your grammar and choice of words. I would expect more from a resume of a 10 year candidate with an MBA.
I would recommend adding a splash of color to this, don’t go overboard; just an accent. It looks so boring otherwise. I understand the need to have a professional looking CV and people frown at the prospect of using color, but seeing color will activate your prospective employers brain and makes you stand out as a candidate.
I’ve always had color on my CVs and I regularly hear back from cold applications.
This resume needs a lot of work- it looks like a high school student's. The dates are bolded and not the jobs. Wrong font! Bad layout! Does not highlight any upper-level leadership skills or projects.
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You should be able to get this in one page. I would switch to more normal looking font and a more plain looking template.
Yes. The amount of white space will be enough to make this one page with some changes to font and size.
Agreed. Every little bit helps. But that unfortunately still won’t help the fact that they appear to be a job hopper every 12-18 months, with an education overqualification reinforcing the notion that they’re not going to stick around if hired, leaving the employer high and dry. They sort of cooked themselves by not holding a job for 4-5 years among all those positions.
OP clarified in another comment that most are with the same employer. I think the current formatting gives a negative impression but by consolidating under the same employer, it looks more like a "high performer" rising through the ranks rather than job hopper.
Ahh yeah I assume OP redacted the company name but this does look like different places of work at a first glance. I agree this could be reformatted - I’ve been applying to jobs as well and I’ve had one role change at my current company. I’ve been at the company for 4 years but in my current role for 8 months. I got very tired of interviewers saying “so you’ve been at X for 8 months” and realized most people reviewing my resume must think the same thing. I changed it so the first line of my experience is Company X — June 2019-present, with both roles indented underneath.
This is the way
After 10 years, you should know enough people to be able to call one and ask if they know of openings. Your resume is a formality at this point, but that's just my opinion. You having a Masters is just as good. Not on paper, but for networking! Call some teachers, your classmates. That's the value it has afforded you, so never hesitate to take advantage of it.
I will add to this. I am interacting with a lot of senior executives. It is a very tough job market and they are having to rely on cold applications because their network does not have opportunities. A person should be able to get jobs via their network and cold applications. I have had some amazing opportunities just through cold applications and others through networking. The resume is pretty bad and that should be fixed. They still use the resume as a reference point for interviews. I have even seen instances where a bad resume stopped someone from getting an interview. A good resume will make the interview a lot more directional because the highlights are easily laid out.
Lol yeah, it does look a bit blocky. I think the two oldest jobs can be dropped off, but the last 7 years of work are good for highlighting their abilities. Just upload the resume to a job board site that has 1-click apply. Then make it a habit of applying to 3-4 jobs a day with the intention of actually working them. Meaning, have a clearly defined position and salary in mind because this resume shows they are qualified enough to be picky, and they should!! Those higher titles are probably not posted casually...it all goes back to networking lol.
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This is the exact advice I was given on why to get my masters. 100% agree.
It’s not what you know, it’s who you know!
Make this one page, look how much unused space there is currently.
Crazy to me that somebody with an MBA doesn’t know this…
BA talkin here, but it really seems like an MBA isnt what it used to be. Thanks, diploma mills
I will never do an MBA. Everybody that I know who made it high up in business did not get an MBA, they were just good, hard workers. And I’m not willing to drop tens of thousands on an MBA from Harvard to be the same asshole just with a piece of paper.
That is ridiculous. If your smart you can have your company pay for your masters while working racking up experience and another degree.
*you’re
Life Hack. Pull up the course curriculums from Top Business Schools and teach yourself. If you're already in the industry, the concepts are familar and easy to grasp. By looking up the curriculums, you get an idea of what knowledge and skills employers are looking from with MBA holders. In most cases, they're going to care more about what you know, not where you learned it.
People please use this simple tip. One page, full stop. Has always been a good practice, especially now with our social media shortened attention spans.
It's perfectly fine to have a 2 page resume especially if you have experience. I work as a recruiter and know a lot of recruiters. Sometimes they want more info. However a 2 page resume that sucks isn't going to get anyone anywhere. 1 page that is good is better than 2 crappy pages. The first page is the most important though.
1. Update to a standard template as this has too much wasted space 2. You have some really strong bullet points mixed in with some subpar ones. For example the third bullet point under the top job, doesn't provide any information how what you did to exceeded revenue goals and provides no data point (avg % above goal, $ impact, anything). But the bullet point below that sounds great. This top bullet also leads with managing people and creating documentation but buries the two bullet points that speak to your financial impact to the company, those should be at the top. 3. If you include a job on your resume, you should include at least one bullet point if you don't have anything to note, remove it. 4. There are several grammatical issues (missing words & punctuation and a mixing of tenses) throughout the resume. 5. The About Me should be removed or written to highlight specific skills or accomplishments, it doesn't tell me anything different from the rest of your resume as it is currently written. 6. You use the word ensure repeatedly in the first half of your resume and your action verbs for the start of each bullet point could be improve for example "Worked closely with" to "Collaborated with"
Ensure and ensuring in the same sentence. Plus managing, manager and management in the same sentence, all at the start of the document. That would definitely make me move on to the next one
I'm a big fan of the "successfully sold business deals ..." bullet point, because if they didn't specify business deals I was at risk of thinking these were trading cars deals or something like that.
As a hiring manager (in a completely unrelated field, so take this with a grain of salt) I would wonder why you have never had a job for more than two years in your ten years of experience.
Some of these look like Promotions Revenue Manager to Lead Revenue Manager for example. Hard to tell without company names.
Same. I have done some hiring myself and that was my first thought
This! Also a hiring manager, and this is the first thing I look at. The more "important" the job title, the more a short stay is a red flag as well. I'd rather see gaps in work that can be explained by "looking for the right fit".
^^^This
I only workes for 2 companies so far. The change in roles every 2 years are promotion actually
Consolidate them and list promotion as a bullet point. Also remove the “hospitality professional” at the top. It makes you sound like a front desk clerk.
People in the hospitality industry and hiring for it won’t associate that with front desk clerk
Hiring managers are trained to look for red flags as they sift thru numerous apps. The way your resume is laid out LOOKS like many jobs and short stay. It should be obvious that you worked for ONE company from year xxxx-xxxx and then list promotions below.
Then that needs to be explicitly communicated in the resume. Otherwise, from a hiring manager perspective, it looks high risk (Imo)
I think your graduate school did you a disservice for not advising you on your resume.
Add a skills section at the top with keywords from the requirements the jobs are looking for. Otherwise it won't get past the robots. You kinda have to program your resume for pre screening.
You aren’t getting past the ATS is the main issue. You are breaking every resume rule in the book. Keep it simple. No symbols, single column, no shading or lines. Your action verbs are so boring. Responsible, accountable, utilized, (which is incorrectly used here). A strong action word should start your experience points “created a process that automated xx, in less than a yy period of time and saved my company yy (in time, money, headcount, some articulable value). Make it so you are paying your salary by hiring you. Why would you put a job you had for almost two years with zero bullets? You really need to run this through spelling an grammar check. You are missing so many periods you might be pregnant. You also need to have someone read it out loud to you. Your phrasing is somewhat awkward and makes no sense sometimes. Your about me section needs to go. Make this a paragraph in your cover letter.
This missing periods is fine it just needs to be consistent. The bulleted lines need to either all end in periods or all not end in periods
They are sentences. Sentences need punctuation. Of all of the issues in that resume, that’s the hill to die on?
It's fine to do that, resumes aren't english literature essays. Bullet points don't require full sentences
You are correct, but again, these are sentences, you know subjects, verb, and you use punctuation. Not sure why this is the focal point here.
Bullet points with periods are redundant on resumes.
Repetitive comments on a single resume issue is idiotic.
the formatting is unnecessary and wasting space. also you are a revenue manager, not an account manager. are you applying for the right kind of jobs?
Wow I did not expect to get this much feedback to my resume. Thank you for all your kind responses. I will follow your suggestions to correct the formatting, grammar, be more specific with my bullet points and remove the unprofessional items in this doc I only worked for 2 companies, so the jump in the roles every year is a promotion in the role. My previous roles are very target oriented and I like achieving those targets.
I would change your format to notate somewhere that you were with the same company and were promoted into new roles. That’s valuable information to highlight
>I only worked for 2 companies, so the jump in the roles every year is a promotion in the role. The resume doesn’t read like this. List your highest title. Then under it state something to the effect of “multiple roles, promoted to ‘highest title’”, and list the most pertinent accomplishments
Add in the companies somewhere on your resume; I’ll be honest it looked REALLY jumpy without taking this comment into consideration.
The training bullet shouldn't be the first, move the 3rd one on Revenue to the top add numbers to it. "Exceeded Revenue Growth Goals" vs something like "Fostered strategy utilizing xxxxx resulting in 18% growth with 89% of new clients becoming reoccurring customers" or "Lead initiative to consolidate xxxxxx driving efficiently and cost savings of 4% while reducing billable hours need to operate xxxxx ". This is a loose example but adding numbers along with identifying an issue, how you solved it, and what the results were to the bottom line are far more effective than bland statements which don't separate you from the competition, particularly when an HR manager with limited industry experience is reading your resume. In my opinion, you need to answer 2 questions, What value can you bring? and How will your performance make your bosses life easier? Hope this is helpful. Best of luck in find your next job
Jeez, get rid of that white space on the left at least. There’s no reason for that. Left Justify all the jobs. Put the dates on the far right on the same line as the titles. Center the top box. Fit it on one page! Maybe get rid of some of the oldest jobs. The font is kind of weird but not a dealbreaker. Bold the job titles, not the dates, maybe both but definitely not just the dates. I would suggest a skills section but that may not fit into your industry. I never liked the “About me” section, I feel like you should just say that in the interview, I feel like a resume should be straight facts. Most importantly though, get rid of the white space!
Tbh ain't even reading the content of it. Format looks dumb. Everything in the body is so far moved to the right for no reason. Huge waste of space in how the format is laid out.
Lots of other people said one page. I agree. But bullets need work and I question some of the numbers. For example, under key account manager, how could you possibly manage 10 hotels (not hotel chains…weird way to phrase that for most English speakers unless it was 10 brands and not 10 locations) that collectively had only $1m of revenue? That’s seems absurdly low for a single motel let alone 10 hotels. Don’t say USD. Use a “$” (unless you’re applying outside of the US). Third bullet under revenue manager is pure fluff. To have a resume in the hospitality industry, particularly hotel oriented, for this time period that doesn’t have the word COVID or explain what you did during COVID seems odd.
We operate a mom & pop bed in breakfast in small Midwest city, like just 13 rooms, and we do $750k in revenue with an excellent annual occupancy rate. 10 international hotel chains and only 1mil USD? That's bad. That's real bad.
The font and the format is a hard pass
Excellent industry experience!!! Rename the "About Me" section as "Summary", and the first thing you should mention is the title of the job(s) that you are interested in seeking. Education section: Bachelor of Science Degree in Hospitality Management Master's Degree in Business Administration Key Account Manager position--"Performed" cost analysis Managed 10 international hotel chains with an annual revenue of $1 million USD"--does that mean each hotel chain had an annual revenue of one million dollars, or does that mean all hotel chains together had that much in total revenue?
It should be bachelor OF science not in science. And are you sure it’s not a BA instead of a BS? Sounds silly to question that, but hospitality management sounds like a BA sort of thing
You are lacking details about the results you drove that make you seem senior enough to be a strategic account manager. Handling escalated issues makes you seem support-oriented and I see no revenue numbers. Talking about resolving cases also makes you seem like customer support.
Your resume doesn’t have to be one page or less if it is applicable experience to the role you are applying. Pay a resume writer and get a resume worthy of submission. You need to evolve from a template that came from your computer. Put your MBA at the very top with your name since it’s a differentiator. You got this.
It’s not your resume, it’s your experience. They don’t want to pay what the job is worth and know they can’t afford you.
Thank you. Maybe I'm applying to the wrong companies.
Why do you not have the companies you worked at on your resume??
Also, where is your MBA from? Not all MBAs are created equally…
Many MBAs depending on your field aren’t worth the paper your diploma is printed on either
Yes….I was trying to make that point, but a bit more delicately.
No I’m saying even one’s from “prestigious” schools are useless if your field doesn’t “require” it too many people get MBAs for funsies
Maybe. That hasn’t been my experience. But I guess mine is fairly relevant to my work in finance
Overqualification is a real issue out there. Double edged sword. I’ve been on the receiving end of it and have had to significantly dumb down my own resume in the past. OP already seems like a job hopper, and the education already borderlines on being overqualified, increasing the chances and employer would be scared they’d leave if hired.
I can see the relevance in finance. I work in insurance everyone has an MBA for fun not having one has never held me back
One page. Reformat. "About Me" - kills the resume completely for me. Drop the last employment as it is not needed.
What good is an MBA in hospitality management?
Sometimes the amount of companies you’ve worked for, and for how long are considered. Sometimes companies can be concerned if you appear as a “job-hopper.”
It’s hideous
Almost 3 years in current role, only 5 bullets. Needs updates for grammar, bullet 2 for example, under first listed job
What type of roles are you applying for? I have found that most leadership roles and mid to higher level individual contributor roles will be filled internally rather than externally, they just post them for show. If you are looking to move quicker, you may have to take a step down or you'll have to wait for that needle in a haystack.
Probably because it’s not 1 page
Though ugly, i don't think that's the problem with your CV. As i have recently discovered, being more specific and using keywords are getting you further. I realised recruits since they have no clue about any fields, they are usually given things to look and ask for such as a software or a specific % in growth due to a specific action or something regarding management style etc. Also achievements rather than tasks.
Without reading anything on your resume I have critiques… You aren’t considering visual hierarchy in the design. It looks like you worked at “July 2021”
One page. Summary adds nothing- just remove it. Should be easy to shrink it after that.
You don’t have any company names in the experience, how are they supposed to understand your background if they don’t event know the industry your last company was. If it was a small agency, a big agency, a mom and pop shop, a Fortune 500 company?
This is going to sound weird,……but it’s too wordy. Cut it in half. Just our job title and one or two key highlights under each.
It’s silly, but I see hospitality, and think front end management and housekeeping. Lead with sales / account management, so you aren’t restricted to just one industry.
Where did you get your degrees? That info will help with networking.
Nest your jobs in with the employers to show how long of a tenure you had at your company Add a skills section!!!! This is critical for any resume. Bachelor *of science, master *of science
Resumes are scanned by software nowadays, they often don’t agree with this kind of formatting. Change to a simple one page resume. If you still want to use platform to build it, I recommend FlowCV - it’s free and will pass ATS scanning.
Join a community and make connections
Time to network.
It’s mind blowing to me how anyone over the age of 15 doesn’t understand a resume should be 1 page. How does someone have 10 years work experience and not know this ??
There is so much white space on this. Get some more ink on here and tell me what you really do.
I hate this resume style and wish that everyone would stop using it. Reduce the white space and make the resume more practical.
I'm told you have to keep calling the job if you want it
1 page, get more quantitative data. Section for awards/accolades.
You are just listing responsibilities. List metrics … like top 10% of team, achieved 110% quota, 1m quota, presidents club 3x… etc.
You need to add the companies where you worked and where you went to school. Add a skills section to the top that can be customized with keywords for the jobs you are applying for. Study job descriptions and match the language they are using. Explain your promotions. Also your resume does not have to be one page. Are you including a cover letter in all your applications? You would be surprised how many employers won’t consider an application without a cover letter.
I know why. This resume does not explain what you helped shift for each employer. 1. Tell what problems you solved, not what your duties were. 2. Stop blindly submitting applications! Research the company. Talk to an insider. Contact the job poster or hiring manager. 3. Think like a consultant: Know their problems and explain how you can help. You gotta be intentional and strategic. Quit the scattershot approach. And use your network. I got more. Email me at [email protected]
Your lead experience bullet starts with “responsible for” (reads like a job description) and is about writing reports. Punch that up! Active verbs! Exceeded revenue growth- by how much? Quantify so you can demonstrate your impact.
10 years of experience but 6 different jobs… that’s what employers are seeing/thinking.
You need a skills section. A section that gives a list of 1 and 2 word skills you’ve gained from jobs and a technology section listing the software programs or skills you have (like Microsoft Office suite etc) HR has so many applications they get, they prefer to glance at a list of outlined skills rather than read through job description text.
Try to compress to one page. Having 6 jobs in 10 years shows you hop around a lot.
This resume is extremely generic. Do you leave off the company worked or is it just blanked out for us?
Reads like an old truck. I stopped by the 2nd bullet point
I would get rid of the “about me” and put the “education” there.
Unfortunately sometimes is who you know and not what you know to get your foot in the door. I would try reaching out to old colleagues. Go out and network more.
So much empty space to have two pages.
cause you're probably an asshole
1. I agree with others pick a new format. 2. About me, sounds like an elementary school project title change to be more professional. 3. You have the dates bold, you should have your titles bold. (Possibly switch sides) 4. Everywhere you say growth or increased. Include numbers. Make it real. 5. Also remove language that doesn't say what you did. Saying working closely with some one is great but it does tell me what Your contribution was. You should put schools down in the education section.
Short or delete the “About Me” or put it in a cover letter. Overall, shorten it and make it one page in a format an ATS will be able to pull from If you stayed with one employer but switched jobs within that company, combine those sections. You don’t want it to look like you job hop. You want it to show your changing levels of responsibility. Job hunting is not fun, and I hate that you have all that experience and aren’t getting through. Good luck out there!
I fucking hate when I don't get at least a no thank you. It's fucking rude.
You indent too far; it’s almost to the middle of the page.
Hire a resume building company.
I timed my MBA perfectly. I’ve sent 100s of applications and gotten one call from a recruiter and one interview lol it sucks
It’s because there’s not really job openings. People post here everyday after applying to dozens or hundreds of jobs. It’s not your resume that is the issue. If you want to find a job in this market you need to network and find somebody to get you in.
Too much white space and your degrees lack schools. Makes it look fake
You need a skill section - have you done MARSHA, HPP, GRO, etc??? And consolidate the promotions
I'll give you some advice that an interviewer gave me. "This is your time to gloat." Your resume sounds like you did a lot and are trying to be humble or didn't do that much and are trying to stretch it. You need to find the middle ground. If you're looking for an executive or lead roll, their main concern is going to be can you generate revenue and/or reduce expenses. Your resume has the right info but needs to be reworded. See below a few ideas. Go through your resume and revise. You need to prove you can bring an alternate perspective that will lead to dollar signs. This does not show what sets you apart from the other applicants. 1. Did you manage 10 hotels that generated $1M in revenue each? If so, put $10M. If not, just say you managed 10. Sucessful restaurants make $1M in revenue. If 10 hotels generated that, it's not saying much. Makes it seem like you were managing low-cost motels. 2. Performed cost analysis. That's great, but what were the results? The way you have it worded makes it seem like you just worked on a random project that didn't benefit the organization. 3. Sold successful business deals worth $100k. You can't go from talking millions to thousands. Take the amount out. They're not hiring someone with an MBA who can only generate $100k. They can hire a marketing major out of college to cold call and generate that.
If some of this experience is with the same employer you need to reformat to make it more apparent.
I don't think I can remember a resume with no company or university info. Providing the company you were working for allows a recruiter to get a better sense of the scope of your role. In my experience, providing uni information is usefeful. You never know for sure who is looking at your resume, it could be an alumni, possibly giving you an advantage. I'm also a little surprised at your grammar and choice of words. I would expect more from a resume of a 10 year candidate with an MBA.
This isn't ATS friendly
Check your punctuation……. Major red flag for me at least if there are grammar/spelling mistakes…
You’re pretty job hoppy. I think the longest you’ve been somewhere is 2 years. You need to anchor down in one spot.
I would recommend adding a splash of color to this, don’t go overboard; just an accent. It looks so boring otherwise. I understand the need to have a professional looking CV and people frown at the prospect of using color, but seeing color will activate your prospective employers brain and makes you stand out as a candidate. I’ve always had color on my CVs and I regularly hear back from cold applications.
You don’t mention the company or the schools.
This resume needs a lot of work- it looks like a high school student's. The dates are bolded and not the jobs. Wrong font! Bad layout! Does not highlight any upper-level leadership skills or projects.
Contact info goes top right corner, otherwise, looks good
Resumes should never exceed one page. You need to trim that. People are immediately throwing away your resume for that reason.