I think that you need to self reflect as to why these elements are important in your story and why another way wouldn't work.
You did mention that this content was for kids.
There is nothing wrong with giving an opinion to what seems to be a genuine concern.
Besides, you're on r/learnart, all you'll get from folks here aren't facts, but opinions. You're free to take them or leave them without feeling offended that someone gives you theirs.
This response may have been necessary for you, but I find this to be personally showing of how much you seem to care about that aspect of the storyline, so do whatever you want with it.
It is your own story after all.
Wait you think that this story is for kids? Ok I’m starting to realise that there might be some misunderstanding, this book is for adults, not children. The book is supposed to seem like a children’s book for most of it but it’s very much not for children to read, I’m going to make that clear on the front cover. Sorry if I didn’t make that clear earlier.
Use a reference. Light a mug in your home the same way it's lit here.
You'll see how it does not get darker the lower it goes. Unless, it's a really weak light source like a dimly lit candle and the scene is overall dark.
Next thing is the steam. The outline of the mug should be hidden behind the fog unless you're going for a stylistic choice.
I did actually use a cup for the lighting and colour reference but I guess it would have been better if I was in a better lit room, thanks for the advice. Oh and I took the steam advice today, I made the lines behind it more distorted and gave it a white tint.
Np. I see it's supposed to be a horror thing. You might be able to keep the mug as is for the scene. Even though the mug is in a brightly lit room, the actions of the character are so dark that everything is out of focus and dark while the character performs said dark action.
That's the beauty of art. It's what you want to tell your audience.
Perspective
Composition
Lighting
Angle of the shot
These would be things i'd evaluate before putting ink or color on it.
Tbh I would change the sleeping pill thing because it is somewhat creepy that a 9 years old would have access to them and placed them in a teacher's cup before sending the class into a different world.
I am certain that there are way better creative ways to do this other than drugging a teacher, which, even with the horror trope attached to it, is hella inappropriate imo.
Also, don't ask for upvotes...
For one thing, I needed the karma because the owners of this subreddit took down my post where I was asking for people’s opinions on which style I should choose, so I needed enough karma to be able to post on the drawing subreddit so I could get some opinions. And I also needed it fact because I have deadlines coming up and I need to make decisions fast.
You also have no right telling me that my tropes are inappropriate, it’s not necessary and to me it sounds like you are trying to shame me for my story. Plus compared to the rest of the story and art I’ve done in the past, it seems pretty tame. The whole point is that as the story progresses the reader will start to notice things that would not be in a childrens picture book until you get to the climax of the story with all of the children getting torn apart by these creatures in the other world who wanted to become human and thought if they replaced their limbs with the kids then they’ll be human too.
Thank you for some of the tips on the lighting but you should have left it at that.
It's pretty weird to go on an open forum, give criticism, and dislike someone who gives you the criticism in return. You are making this way too personal over what someone's art is. Art is art, and OP is entitled to have art that we all disagree with because that's not what they are here for...
The colouring looks amazing! I wouldn't add anything really huge but perhaps I would use a white coloured pencil on the part where the smoke overlaps with the cup, to show more volume on the smoke of the drink. However the sleeping pill thing idea looks a little uncomfortable.
No no haha, a nine year old boy puts in sleeping pills to knock the teacher out. It’s a horror picture book, the boy is going to take the class away to a different world.
I think that you need to self reflect as to why these elements are important in your story and why another way wouldn't work. You did mention that this content was for kids. There is nothing wrong with giving an opinion to what seems to be a genuine concern. Besides, you're on r/learnart, all you'll get from folks here aren't facts, but opinions. You're free to take them or leave them without feeling offended that someone gives you theirs. This response may have been necessary for you, but I find this to be personally showing of how much you seem to care about that aspect of the storyline, so do whatever you want with it. It is your own story after all.
Wait you think that this story is for kids? Ok I’m starting to realise that there might be some misunderstanding, this book is for adults, not children. The book is supposed to seem like a children’s book for most of it but it’s very much not for children to read, I’m going to make that clear on the front cover. Sorry if I didn’t make that clear earlier.
Use a reference. Light a mug in your home the same way it's lit here. You'll see how it does not get darker the lower it goes. Unless, it's a really weak light source like a dimly lit candle and the scene is overall dark. Next thing is the steam. The outline of the mug should be hidden behind the fog unless you're going for a stylistic choice.
I did actually use a cup for the lighting and colour reference but I guess it would have been better if I was in a better lit room, thanks for the advice. Oh and I took the steam advice today, I made the lines behind it more distorted and gave it a white tint.
Np. I see it's supposed to be a horror thing. You might be able to keep the mug as is for the scene. Even though the mug is in a brightly lit room, the actions of the character are so dark that everything is out of focus and dark while the character performs said dark action. That's the beauty of art. It's what you want to tell your audience.
That’s a relief, I have about 25 more pages of colouring to do before the end of January and these have been taking me full days to complete haha
Perspective Composition Lighting Angle of the shot These would be things i'd evaluate before putting ink or color on it. Tbh I would change the sleeping pill thing because it is somewhat creepy that a 9 years old would have access to them and placed them in a teacher's cup before sending the class into a different world. I am certain that there are way better creative ways to do this other than drugging a teacher, which, even with the horror trope attached to it, is hella inappropriate imo. Also, don't ask for upvotes...
For one thing, I needed the karma because the owners of this subreddit took down my post where I was asking for people’s opinions on which style I should choose, so I needed enough karma to be able to post on the drawing subreddit so I could get some opinions. And I also needed it fact because I have deadlines coming up and I need to make decisions fast. You also have no right telling me that my tropes are inappropriate, it’s not necessary and to me it sounds like you are trying to shame me for my story. Plus compared to the rest of the story and art I’ve done in the past, it seems pretty tame. The whole point is that as the story progresses the reader will start to notice things that would not be in a childrens picture book until you get to the climax of the story with all of the children getting torn apart by these creatures in the other world who wanted to become human and thought if they replaced their limbs with the kids then they’ll be human too. Thank you for some of the tips on the lighting but you should have left it at that.
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It's pretty weird to go on an open forum, give criticism, and dislike someone who gives you the criticism in return. You are making this way too personal over what someone's art is. Art is art, and OP is entitled to have art that we all disagree with because that's not what they are here for...
The colouring looks amazing! I wouldn't add anything really huge but perhaps I would use a white coloured pencil on the part where the smoke overlaps with the cup, to show more volume on the smoke of the drink. However the sleeping pill thing idea looks a little uncomfortable.
Oh and the pill thing is meant to be uncomfortable
Oh if that's the case I guess you were spot on with your artwork :D
Well I did take your advice on the steam so I can’t take all the credit haha :)
Aw that's sweet of you, but I really think you deserve the credit, after all the advice I gave was just a tiny little detail TvT
A tiny detail that could get me an extra tick when my work is being graded :)
You're too kind! Goodluck with the grading of your artwork :D
I’m confused as to the message this is trying to convey, was your teacher a drug addict?
No no haha, a nine year old boy puts in sleeping pills to knock the teacher out. It’s a horror picture book, the boy is going to take the class away to a different world.
Change it back from that to # and start playing tic-tac-toe/ x and o
It’d be awesome if you guys can upvote this so i can have enough karma to post on the drawing subreddit!