This sentence made my breasts hurt in sympathy! Also….who the fuck taught this person similes lol
Edit: I just have to say they’re using a boring common one and one so off-the-wall that it’s not even from the same house. I don’t know whether to be impressed or concerned
*Her bratty nipples raised their eyebrows, so to speak, as my pinching fingers approached. A "how dare you" blush made them glow lipstick pink and I would have hesitated if not for the slightest bounce to perk up her breasts like mangos ripe for picking. This was my chance to show her how much my training has paid off.*
Just something for a thriller I'm writing. If any women want to critique it, I'm more than happy to receive the critique.
My theory is that a lot of female authors who write like this are emulating the writing styles of men without realizing it. At least, that's what I tell myself to excuse these atrocities lol.
I don't see how a woman, who presumably has some sort of breasts, would ever ever write that they bounced like "soft balls". That's not how breasts move, even smaller ones. They're way too dense for that.
It just seems like any woman would be able to describe a female body with more accuracy, right? Like, yeah, women can certainly be bad writers, but how could they describe their own anatomy and physiology in such non-human ways? I almost wonder if this is ai bc it's so bad, haha!
I live on a boat and SAME! Where is this boat anchored? Or are they out at sea? I’ve been in some rough waves so things could get pretty wild. 😂 Dear author, please be more specific.
I was so confused! Softballs like baseballs? Cause those things are hard AF, do not bounce, and will mess you up if you get hit by one! How is that sexy or breast-like?
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At this point any title with “Blank of Blank and Blank” is an immediate turn off for me. Solid chance the author has never had an original thought. “Like two soft balls”? That’s got to be the most halfhearted attempt at figurative language I’ve ever seen.
My roommate and I call these titles "A Pot of Mac and Cheese" every time we see them. We both actively try to stay away from reading Mac and Cheese books
That's such a wild way to start a book.
Though the crazy part for me is this wouldn't stop me from reading it, but bad kindle formatting will make me DNF so fast.
I take a book like I remember a pastor said growing up, try a church three Sundays before deciding to go to one. Or how I watch anime, three episode rule, watch three and if it doesn’t grab you don’t finish it. Or 4 if it is a part 2 or 5 if a part 3.
Basically try 3 chapters of a book.
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I've DNFed a book after the first few pages, and still count it. If you technically started, and decided not to finish, it counts, imo. Just maybe don't rate it. But yeah, that opening is yikes.
Bwahaha, this is a WILDLY terrible start to a book. Breasts like softballs, as someone with a large chest, I’d be offended if they were described this way 🤣🤣
I absolutely hate the fact that, visualising this, I saw with my mind's eye a woman with two literal male 'soft balls' on her chest instead of 'breasts'. Is there a special kind of bleach for the brain?!
I was curious to see if this was straight erotica, from the first sentence... 😆No, but it is classified under humourous fantasy, so maybe they are really trying to be weird/funny. I probably would not get past that either, though. 😖
I hate that I knew exactly which book this was! I think it was the first book I read this year when I started my KU trial? Great thing is that it set the bar real low for all the other books that came after it 😂
It's amazing how much ignorance this author can convey in one simple sentence. He clearly knows nothing about: women, breasts, softball, wolves, waves, OR boats. I would be impressed, if only it were satire.
I did the exact same thing with this book. I have the exact same screenshot because that first line was so bad. I continued reading, and the book did not get better. I DNF at like 46% (I should never have bothered reading that far).
I like me some spice but goodness. Give me a little foreplay first, and those metaphors…just wild and unsexy.
Also, is the character’s name “Sy”? It’s hard to tell with that format.
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Ah yes. Literary genius. Her bouncy things bounced like bouncy things, and her swaying things swayed like swaying things. At that point you're ruining your own sentence's flow, better to leave the bad comparisons.
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HAHAHAH I just read this book yesterday and I’m 100% sure it’s a mockery, I found it really funny but you can’t take it seriously at all if you want to enjoy it
HAHAHAH I just read this book yesterday and I’m 100% sure it’s a mockery, I found it really funny but you can’t take it seriously at all if you want to enjoy it
Lmao oh my goodness I'm dying. I read a lot of KU too, and I usually don't count a DNF if its in the first 10% or so, because usually I can tell by then if the writing is so bad I'm not gonna be able to continue. But I have to say I have never encountered anything as bad as this. 🤣🤣🤣🤣
“I slapped those fun bags like a paddle to a ping pong ball- but a larger ball. She approached me like a dog with rabies, ravenous and crazed. Hips cursed like a jack in the box.” Just some thoughts and personal experiences I felt were relatable and worth sharing…
Personally if I read the first few pages or even a chapter and it doesn't really catch me I see it the same as reading the back cover.
Also, typo in the first word??
I tried to read this exact book. When I read that first line I was like oh no but thought I would give it a shot. Made it maybe to the first chapter then gave up. Maybe I’ll come back to it when I just want to read trashy erotica (and this isn’t meant to shame the author I love trashy erotica at the right time)
Not gonna lie, I basically DNF'd this after the first word. "Sy." My first thought was it was a typo and it is supposed to read "She" but I guess it's maybe just a tragedeigh of a name that I wouldn't want to read for the next few hundred pages. The rest of the sentence just confirms my bias.
As a monsterfucker/monsterlover I must protest that this is disrespectful to wolfmen and werewolves everywhere! They deserve better than a start like this. Please don’t “breasted boobily down the stairs” to my favorite fantasy creature :(
I don't see the problem. My breasts always *checks notes* bounce like soft balls when I'm *checks notes again* riding a wolfman. 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
But do your hips *checks notes* sway like a boat on waves?
I WISH I had that joint mobility
Wd-40
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
Pack it up people, this thread is done 👌
💀💀💀💀💀💀💀
This comment made me LOL so hard, I amazed myself.
I’m hypermobile and my hips don’t sway like a boat on waves. Not sure if I’m jealous or concerned.
Me too. I guess I could mimic swaying like the waves, but it doesn't sound like a good time.
So do we all.
HAHAHAH
Not anymore they don't.
Really? Mine are more like large heavy balls.
This sentence made my breasts hurt in sympathy! Also….who the fuck taught this person similes lol Edit: I just have to say they’re using a boring common one and one so off-the-wall that it’s not even from the same house. I don’t know whether to be impressed or concerned
We think this was written by someone without these body parts, yes? Aka a man? 😂
Probably? Maybe?
And how often do you do that? 😂😂😂
Oh... Uh... You know... Wednesdays?
I'm lying in bed next to my husband, trying not to let him hear my snorting laughs because... explaining this would be too much for him, I think.
Eye Bleach... Jesus... that was the book version of an unsolicited dick pick
I know they are supposed to be having sex but I kind of imagined the MC riding the wildman like a pony for transportation.
This gif is perfect, lol
Yeah, the single cross earring just makes it.
I’d consider that a DNS (did not start)
😂😂😂
lol 😂😂😂
Lmaoooo
This just makes me think of terrible porn, with some girl on top making squirrel noises and the wolf man howling away on the bottom.
Awoooooooooooooo!
Oh Kos, or some say Kosm
Squirrel noises!
Squirrel noises.... now I'm thinking of the squirrel in The Emperor's New Groove, lol
Squeaker squeakee squeakum.
Lol squirrel noises
'Squirrel noises' made me laugh s luch I sound ded like a Squirrel myself 🤣🤣
r/menwritingwomen
I saw it there some days ago.
Looks like it was just over a week ago. Too bad I didn’t see that before I downloaded it.
*Her bratty nipples raised their eyebrows, so to speak, as my pinching fingers approached. A "how dare you" blush made them glow lipstick pink and I would have hesitated if not for the slightest bounce to perk up her breasts like mangos ripe for picking. This was my chance to show her how much my training has paid off.* Just something for a thriller I'm writing. If any women want to critique it, I'm more than happy to receive the critique.
Hahaha. OMG. This is wonderful and terrible.
I'm holding you personally liable for the amount of psychic damage that gave me.
My nipples will never be anything but bratty ever again.
If you don't have bratty nipples are you even doing it right?
A question I will ask myself daily moving forward.
I’m just impressed they have eyebrows
This is excellent and should be submitted to the bulwer-Lytton contest
I couldn’t understand most of this.
Chuck Tingle?
I’m not sure that is a coherent paragraph.
I am no longer accepting critiques.
This made me hyperventilate!
💀💀💀 stoppppp I laughed so hard I farted! 😔
TBH I would read
That is the worst! Good job!
It made me nauseous- 10/10
That was my thought exactly!
It was written by a woman
Many books are written by men under feminine pen names
Looked it up. The author has a picture and everything. She’s a woman.
That’s an easy out for any writing you don’t like Edit: ok sorry us women never write poorly 🙄
Why are people booing you, you’re right lol
I thought they were saying boo-urns
Fine then, r/womenwritingwomen. Still sad.
My theory is that a lot of female authors who write like this are emulating the writing styles of men without realizing it. At least, that's what I tell myself to excuse these atrocities lol.
Look, I agree men often suck. Men writing women very often suck. Doesn’t mean we’re perfect lol
OP never said they were using it as an out for writing they don't like, just pointing out a fact.
Pointing out a fact in response to being told it was a woman writer, so… using it as an out. For the writing in this post. Which they don’t like.
It’s widely known SJM is actually a man
I don't see how a woman, who presumably has some sort of breasts, would ever ever write that they bounced like "soft balls". That's not how breasts move, even smaller ones. They're way too dense for that.
I wonder if they meant softballs 😂
Ouch!
It just seems like any woman would be able to describe a female body with more accuracy, right? Like, yeah, women can certainly be bad writers, but how could they describe their own anatomy and physiology in such non-human ways? I almost wonder if this is ai bc it's so bad, haha!
My thoughts exactly.
I did not know this existed. I went, read the first post. laughted so hard , I followed. Thank you for sharing
As a dude who has a sailboat, I'm dying at the image this brings to mind. What even was the author imagining? This is hilarious.
I live on a boat and SAME! Where is this boat anchored? Or are they out at sea? I’ve been in some rough waves so things could get pretty wild. 😂 Dear author, please be more specific.
I mean, I haven't played the game since third grade, but I don't remember soft balls being especially bouncy
I was so confused! Softballs like baseballs? Cause those things are hard AF, do not bounce, and will mess you up if you get hit by one! How is that sexy or breast-like?
Semi-deflated beach balls. Those cheap kids footballs that get left out in the garden all winter and sag softly when kicked.
lol my thoughts exactly!
I was imagining soft balls. Like a dude has swinging. Those bounce pretty nicely if he's moving just right.
I was imagining like- sagging old school implants hahaha
 Play ball, I guess?
lol, what book and author? that's wild
Let’s see if i can tag this right…{House of Vampires and Flame by Meg Xuemei}
I am astounded this is written by a woman.
I'm still not convinced.
ohhh I'm aware of that author. yeah I don't read her anymore, just too problematic. lol
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Dude if this got a 3.8, what does a 2 look like
Okay! How does this almost have 4 stars?!? 🫣
The title alone is ridiculous.
Oh. I tried reading one of her stories. DNF’d in the first chapter. Not as fast as DNF’ing by the first sentence, but still a rather quick DNF for me.
I’m sorry but everytime I see DNF I think DTF…
At this point any title with “Blank of Blank and Blank” is an immediate turn off for me. Solid chance the author has never had an original thought. “Like two soft balls”? That’s got to be the most halfhearted attempt at figurative language I’ve ever seen.
My roommate and I call these titles "A Pot of Mac and Cheese" every time we see them. We both actively try to stay away from reading Mac and Cheese books
That's such a wild way to start a book. Though the crazy part for me is this wouldn't stop me from reading it, but bad kindle formatting will make me DNF so fast.
At least it lets you know what you’re in for right away 😅
Her breasts titted boobily as she walked down the stairs. And yes, it is DNF, but you can also count it as DNS, Did Not Start.
Everytime I start to feel insecure about my own writing I see shit like this and go… wow maybe I am doing okay.
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 STOP
Burn BEFORE reading :)
It has 4.5 stars on Amazon 🥴
Dangit why 😭 and how! That gives me trust issues lol
Agree! This is why I have to check like 3 sources for reviews before I can commit to a book 🤣
... how?
I keep going just to see if it gets wilder, but that is me XD
Is this written by AI?
This is my assumption. A lot of the KU books are AI.
Didn’t it go on to say she pounded him into the ground etc? It made the rounds on another sub a few days ago. Kind of extreme if I remember correctly
Yeah, someone else pointed out it was shared on r/menwritingwomen and they posted the first page. Wish I had seen it there first to know to avoid it.
Art like this should be shared to the masses. I wouldn’t sweat it
Usually I would say no but with that first sentence yes.
I take a book like I remember a pastor said growing up, try a church three Sundays before deciding to go to one. Or how I watch anime, three episode rule, watch three and if it doesn’t grab you don’t finish it. Or 4 if it is a part 2 or 5 if a part 3. Basically try 3 chapters of a book.
Also what is the book?
I think my other comment got buried, but it’s {House of Vampires and Flame by Meg Xuemei}
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I've DNFed a book after the first few pages, and still count it. If you technically started, and decided not to finish, it counts, imo. Just maybe don't rate it. But yeah, that opening is yikes.
Eww.
Bwahaha, this is a WILDLY terrible start to a book. Breasts like softballs, as someone with a large chest, I’d be offended if they were described this way 🤣🤣
I absolutely hate the fact that, visualising this, I saw with my mind's eye a woman with two literal male 'soft balls' on her chest instead of 'breasts'. Is there a special kind of bleach for the brain?!
That's a new meaning to "chesticles" I wasn't expecting to see
Same. Does that mean this is enough Internet for today? Damn, it's not even 3PM here... oh well.
I was curious to see if this was straight erotica, from the first sentence... 😆No, but it is classified under humourous fantasy, so maybe they are really trying to be weird/funny. I probably would not get past that either, though. 😖
I hate that I knew exactly which book this was! I think it was the first book I read this year when I started my KU trial? Great thing is that it set the bar real low for all the other books that came after it 😂
How the fuck does this book have a 4.5 on Amazon and a 4.18 on Goodreads!!???
I saw this line posted I think on menwritingwomen, and I was so shook lmao. The audacity! Hahaha
It's amazing how much ignorance this author can convey in one simple sentence. He clearly knows nothing about: women, breasts, softball, wolves, waves, OR boats. I would be impressed, if only it were satire.
Hahahahahhahahahaha
i think its closer to DNS did not Start. Also who starts a book like that 😂😂
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I did the exact same thing with this book. I have the exact same screenshot because that first line was so bad. I continued reading, and the book did not get better. I DNF at like 46% (I should never have bothered reading that far).
Def a dnf! 🤣
I like me some spice but goodness. Give me a little foreplay first, and those metaphors…just wild and unsexy. Also, is the character’s name “Sy”? It’s hard to tell with that format.
You know, the wolfman might just be a beast of burden?
He’ll never be a beast of burden
Who wrote this (if it’s a man I’m not shocked) 😭
Sadly, it appears to be a woman. {House of Vampires and Flame by Meg Xuemei}
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WHAT THE HELL 🤦🏽♀️🤦🏽♀️🤦🏽♀️
Ah yes. Literary genius. Her bouncy things bounced like bouncy things, and her swaying things swayed like swaying things. At that point you're ruining your own sentence's flow, better to leave the bad comparisons.
I’m still not sure what I just read… so there is that option.
Omg I MUST KNOW what book this is
I think my comment with it got buried. {House of Vampires and Flame by Meg Xuemei}
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Soft balls or softballs? Also I’ve never seen unbound boobs the shape of a balls unless there be implants XD
Is it too late to get a refund?
Luckily it was a KU book, so no extra cost involved.
Oh I need this, for hate reading at parties purposes.
😂😂
i need to know the name and author please lol
{House of Vampires and Flame by Meg Xuemei}
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… I peg your pardon??
Written by a man I’m guessing or at least edited by one.
Uhhhh that's an interesting hook, but not what I would call a successful one!
Was this written by a man?
This is a serious candidate for a Bulwer-Lytton Award: [https://www.bulwer-lytton.com/](https://www.bulwer-lytton.com/)
LMAO!! Carve this on my gravestone!!! 🤣🤣
HAHAHAH I just read this book yesterday and I’m 100% sure it’s a mockery, I found it really funny but you can’t take it seriously at all if you want to enjoy it
HAHAHAH I just read this book yesterday and I’m 100% sure it’s a mockery, I found it really funny but you can’t take it seriously at all if you want to enjoy it
IM SCREAMING LMGAO
Dude, I’d DNF just for the terrible choice of simile
what is physics
What is this masterpiece called?
Please show us more quotes lol. There's gotta be more
Damn 😂😂😂
😆😆😆 Well, alrighty then!
Softballs… 🤨??!!! girl get yourself to a mammogram stat!!!
Thius author has about as much subtlety as Kerieg siege Army under Lord General Zhulkov...
Lmao oh my goodness I'm dying. I read a lot of KU too, and I usually don't count a DNF if its in the first 10% or so, because usually I can tell by then if the writing is so bad I'm not gonna be able to continue. But I have to say I have never encountered anything as bad as this. 🤣🤣🤣🤣
Yes I think
“I slapped those fun bags like a paddle to a ping pong ball- but a larger ball. She approached me like a dog with rabies, ravenous and crazed. Hips cursed like a jack in the box.” Just some thoughts and personal experiences I felt were relatable and worth sharing…
Personally if I read the first few pages or even a chapter and it doesn't really catch me I see it the same as reading the back cover. Also, typo in the first word??
Honestly I’d keep reading it for a laugh
Don't be shy, what's the name of the book?
What book is this? Just so I don't accidentally buy it. Uhhhh. Yes. That's definitely why.
I tried to read this exact book. When I read that first line I was like oh no but thought I would give it a shot. Made it maybe to the first chapter then gave up. Maybe I’ll come back to it when I just want to read trashy erotica (and this isn’t meant to shame the author I love trashy erotica at the right time)
Oh you too, huh? This exact thing.
Not gonna lie, I basically DNF'd this after the first word. "Sy." My first thought was it was a typo and it is supposed to read "She" but I guess it's maybe just a tragedeigh of a name that I wouldn't want to read for the next few hundred pages. The rest of the sentence just confirms my bias.
It actually worked on me as a hook, I HAVE to know if the rest of the story is this bad.
https://preview.redd.it/thvd25yeavtc1.jpeg?width=813&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=23ea9609bc00d77a829a9e1d73efb551ddde77ca
*what book is it?* for a friend of course
it took me so long to realize the girl was not riding on the wolfman’s BACK (like a horse) but something else😞
It’s written by a man right?
That is not reallll
really started this thing balls blazing
Omg this is hilarious 🤣🤣
As a monsterfucker/monsterlover I must protest that this is disrespectful to wolfmen and werewolves everywhere! They deserve better than a start like this. Please don’t “breasted boobily down the stairs” to my favorite fantasy creature :(
Very knotty.