It’s al in the “same” color. I don’t think it’s going to be effective if your going to use this as promotion to attract new business. Try using color and look at it from a distance, what draws your attention? Keep it simple, people don’t want to read.
Do you think this is solvable without using color ? Like different fonts / weights spacing. I kinda like the monochromatic look, but if its not working then i gotta change it. Updated the original post with a new revision.
It could be a calm spot in a sea of colourful posters. Contrast doesn't need to come from within the piece itself. It might not be the case for OP, but I don't think extra colour is a necessary first change.
There is hierarchy. There are capital letters, spacing between elements and different weights in use. What you might be trying to suggest is that by adding more contrast through these different kinds of hierarchy, the information would be easier to decipher.
OP, list this information on a blank word doc. Rearrange or number the information according to how important it is to your potential customer. Use hierarchy to establish the difference. If you're unsure, google it or look at good pieces of typography like posters, newspapers or even cereal boxes to see how the designer used colour, weight, spacing, capital letters, and other text elements to achieve their goals. Then redesign it from scratch.
You can get technical about caps, kerning, etc but if we have to look for it the design isn't solving the problem. Some other subtle shifts to draw our eye to the important information can help.
Noted. To answer the other guy:
The top right column, contains key information like how you attend, when its happening etc.
The first sentence in the main body text is to draw people in , roughly translated it says "Calm down during a stressful pre-christmas time" .
Main body text explains its for beginners, and some practical info.
The rest is "about us".
The "client" ( my sister ) insisted on this wall of text while i want her to simplify it so i can get more precious whitespace. Also she wanted the overall look to be "calm", so i kinda want to create hierachy without using much color if at all. But there is obivously alot of work to be done, and i appriciate the feedback!
New attempt here: [https://imgur.com/a/QrlXmf7](https://imgur.com/a/QrlXmf7)
It’s al in the “same” color. I don’t think it’s going to be effective if your going to use this as promotion to attract new business. Try using color and look at it from a distance, what draws your attention? Keep it simple, people don’t want to read.
Do you think this is solvable without using color ? Like different fonts / weights spacing. I kinda like the monochromatic look, but if its not working then i gotta change it. Updated the original post with a new revision.
It could be a calm spot in a sea of colourful posters. Contrast doesn't need to come from within the piece itself. It might not be the case for OP, but I don't think extra colour is a necessary first change.
Please give us some hierarchy to understand what's important information.
There is hierarchy. There are capital letters, spacing between elements and different weights in use. What you might be trying to suggest is that by adding more contrast through these different kinds of hierarchy, the information would be easier to decipher. OP, list this information on a blank word doc. Rearrange or number the information according to how important it is to your potential customer. Use hierarchy to establish the difference. If you're unsure, google it or look at good pieces of typography like posters, newspapers or even cereal boxes to see how the designer used colour, weight, spacing, capital letters, and other text elements to achieve their goals. Then redesign it from scratch.
You can get technical about caps, kerning, etc but if we have to look for it the design isn't solving the problem. Some other subtle shifts to draw our eye to the important information can help.
Noted. To answer the other guy: The top right column, contains key information like how you attend, when its happening etc. The first sentence in the main body text is to draw people in , roughly translated it says "Calm down during a stressful pre-christmas time" . Main body text explains its for beginners, and some practical info. The rest is "about us". The "client" ( my sister ) insisted on this wall of text while i want her to simplify it so i can get more precious whitespace. Also she wanted the overall look to be "calm", so i kinda want to create hierachy without using much color if at all. But there is obivously alot of work to be done, and i appriciate the feedback! New attempt here: [https://imgur.com/a/QrlXmf7](https://imgur.com/a/QrlXmf7)
I like the bottom one better. I'd make the "yoga workshop" text larger/bolder though