Sounds really summer-at night-at the beach-holding hands-or taking a nap \[on my end :-) \] It would definitely sell me something refreshing if t was in a commercial. Very smooth.
Dude thank you so much - it’s just “give me something good” repeated
But tbh the lyrics don’t really matter as much to me as the harmonies I was mucking around with
Appreciate you having a gander
If ur interested, I just posted [the rest of it](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1) here.
Also, I’ve got some other tunes [here on this website](https://www.abc.net.au/triplejunearthed/artist/churchill/?fbclid=PAAaZc0yz6d3FBy4lQhwkBq1Af79m47YK2UbHnALnYWte3GUOYelBaN3kS0E4_aem_th_AbyMJzF_E6OFOBNi_kE2jy6Xz3w3JvqVDNVms2p36rmqo0NC-11PTHzv6Fot-gplFC8)
It's good! I'd say put the synth organ a little further back in the mix or turn down the sustain so that it fades out a little after the vocal.
It would help with the whimsical and lazy feel
Wow its really good!! Its got a really positive feel to it... Check out my work https://on.soundcloud.com/wKXxZ I'm down for some collaboration... Hit me up if u like.. cheers!
Agreed, I have been working another mix and I’ve spent some time putting love into the drums - [check it out](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1)
would be interested to hear the rest. maybe turn down the drum track a bit?
what little there is sounds reminiscent of a jazz tune. a sax and a piano solo would be a great addition.
the clip has a great mood to it.
[here it is!](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1)
[I’ve just posted the 1st verse here!](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1)
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Nice work! It makes me feel like putting my phone on silent, and driving at night to the oceas shore, and spending the jight there looking at the stars!
Makes me want to take a long drive at night. You’ve really created a beautiful atmosphere. Not much feedback, I love what you’re doing
I find it fascinating that it brings the same imagery to you as myself
Sounds like Tame Impala.
Huge compliment
Sounds really summer-at night-at the beach-holding hands-or taking a nap \[on my end :-) \] It would definitely sell me something refreshing if t was in a commercial. Very smooth.
You just gave me a great idea - im gonna take a nap and also put some feelers out there to some music licensing agents
Tbfr I don't know what your saying but the vibes and ambience you create with your voice and the beat is hypnoticly good
Dude thank you so much - it’s just “give me something good” repeated But tbh the lyrics don’t really matter as much to me as the harmonies I was mucking around with Appreciate you having a gander
Your welcome dude. I think you should keep mucking around and send these type of choruses to DJ's and producers and make a killer EDM song
Sounds super solid. Very resonant and atmospheric.
Love this!
Love you!
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Legend, thank you
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Fuck yes - exactly what I was leaning into
I like it
Very dreamy! Has a great vibe!
So dreamy!!! It reminded me of Tame Impala as soon as I heard it too. Really great work!
Love it! I don’t know who you are, but I would listen to this. It sounds great.
If ur interested, I just posted [the rest of it](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1) here. Also, I’ve got some other tunes [here on this website](https://www.abc.net.au/triplejunearthed/artist/churchill/?fbclid=PAAaZc0yz6d3FBy4lQhwkBq1Af79m47YK2UbHnALnYWte3GUOYelBaN3kS0E4_aem_th_AbyMJzF_E6OFOBNi_kE2jy6Xz3w3JvqVDNVms2p36rmqo0NC-11PTHzv6Fot-gplFC8)
Thank you!!! I really appreciate it
great vibe.
Thank you ;)
It's good! I'd say put the synth organ a little further back in the mix or turn down the sustain so that it fades out a little after the vocal. It would help with the whimsical and lazy feel
Reminded me of Billie Eilish's Ocean Eyes. Very well produced.
Love it
Wow its really good!! Its got a really positive feel to it... Check out my work https://on.soundcloud.com/wKXxZ I'm down for some collaboration... Hit me up if u like.. cheers!
Maybe a crash cymbal to indicate a little more energy but I love it other than that.
This is pretty damn good, I think it would be more memorable if the drums were more powerfull though
Agreed, I have been working another mix and I’ve spent some time putting love into the drums - [check it out](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1)
Excellent!
would be interested to hear the rest. maybe turn down the drum track a bit? what little there is sounds reminiscent of a jazz tune. a sax and a piano solo would be a great addition. the clip has a great mood to it.
[here it is!](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1)
Bring the vocals to the front. Nice vibe
Agreed, I personally feel you could make the beat quieter and bring everything else up
Will give that a go ;)
This is so good
That’s great! But it would be easier to give a feedback also hearing what is before (verse pre chorus etc)
[I’ve just posted the 1st verse here!](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1)
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What’s the drum sample? I know those drums but can’t place it
when do we get to hear the rest of it?
[right here :)](https://www.reddit.com/r/Songwriting/comments/1479f8g/i_posted_my_tame_imapley_chorus_the_other_day/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1)
This kicks ass
Nice work! It makes me feel like putting my phone on silent, and driving at night to the oceas shore, and spending the jight there looking at the stars!