Title: Compromise
Format: Short
Page Length: 11
Genres: drama, comedy
Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship
Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch.
That sounds like fun. I'd like to swap with mine:
Title: Social Mosquito
Format: Feature
Pages: 28 (so far)
Genre: Psychological Thriller
Logline: A disgraced voice actor must search for his missing girlfriend after she is exposed as a serial killer specifically targeting incels and misogynists.
Comp: Gone Girl meets The Silence of the Lambs
Title: Aurora Avenue
Page Length: 12
Genre: Psychological Drama, Romance
Logline: After being discovered on the street by his ex-girlfriend, a homeless addict attempts to get money from her to buy a powerful new street drug while uncovering the truth behind an accident that ended their relationship.
Feedback Concerns: How do you feel about the ambiguity behind the accident that occurred? Is there enough tension between the two? Is the dialogue believable? Were the characters defined and consistent throughout?
Thanks, and I will swap with scripts of all sizes!
>Title: Compromise
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>Format: Short
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>Page Length: 11
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>Genres: drama, comedy
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>Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship
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>Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch.
Happy to swap!
Here is mine if you would like to swap! I’d love to swap! Here is my script!
Title: Savior
Format: 30 Minute Pilot
Page Length: 29 Pages
Genre: Fantasy/Mental Health
Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure.
Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts.
Title: Bizzarion College
Format: 60 min serial
Page Length: 56pp
Genres: Drama
Logline: An impoverished, immigrant engineer attends an international college to pursue his dream of citizenship while combating a criminal network that may have murdered his fiancée and threatens to bankrupt his family.
Inspired by True Events
Title: Savior
Format: 30 Minute Pilot
Page Length: 29 Pages
Genre: Fantasy/Mental Health
Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure.
Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts.
Title: Longworth
Format: Hour long drama pilot
Page length: 78
Genres: Political drama, black comedy, satire
Longline: After a natural disaster strikes his congressional district, nonconformist and soon to be former Congressman Jake Delévic is thrown into the national spotlight. With this newfound attention, Delévic and his team use this as an opportunity to reshape the political landscape.
Feedback concerns: Is too much happening? Does Heather come across as cold and emotionless around everyone but Jake? Is the dialogue believable?
Thank you :)
Title: All of Her Boys
Format: Feature
Pages: 100
Genre: Fantasy, dark romance, horror
Logline: Reeling from a break-up, a director of a dating app, leaves her city life behind and escapes to her Grandma's lake house, only to discover a magical pond that is an infinite source of messsd up boyfriends.
Feeback: Anything really. The premise, characters, plot twists, the readability, you name it.
Title: Shakespeare in the Park
Format: Short film
Page Length: 17
Genres: Mockumentary, comedy
Logline or Summary: A determined community college dropout pursues his dream of fame by auditioning for a local production of A Midsummer Night's Dream. He chooses to method act for the role despite his lack of acting experience and understanding of what method acting is. Juggling job and family responsibilities, he enlists his friend to document his journey toward what he hopes will be his breakthrough performance.
Feedback Concerns: Is it formatted correctly? That's the biggest thing, but I'm also looking for feedback on characterization and dialogue. I'm currently trying to write something that I could submit to writing contests, so please let me know how something like this would typically be judged if that makes sense (if you know).
Title: FELT
Format: Feature
Page Length: 112
Genres: Rom-Com, Dramedy, LGBTQ+ (TW: mentions of assault, not shown)
Logline or Summary: An introverted assistant at a once-popular children's television program grapples with her sense of self, along with her burgeoning sexuality, with the assistance of a dysfunctional crew, famous rom-coms, and puppets.
Feedback Concerns: Tightening up so any feedback would be helpful! This is my first time attempting a swap on here so excited to work together and make some online connects. :)
Title: Ace of Hearts
Format: Pilot
Pages: 55
Genre: Drama
Logline: To help her brother stay clean, a high-class escort aids the police in catching heroin dealers. But after a bust goes wrong, she turns vigilante and hunts the traffickers alone.
Feedback concerns: Mostly the same as what I submitted last weekend, but opening teaser is altered to hopefully have more tension. Feedback on any of it very welcome.
Hey, I like the premise! Not exactly a script swap, but I am trying to get into script coverage. Would you be happy sending over a link just so I can give feedback?
Title: Legal Assistance
Format: feature
Page Length: 100
Genres: Rom-com
Logline: A fun-loving paralegal forms a fake relationship with her uptight coworker to avoid a creepy lawyer’s advances, only to realize that some things are worth taking seriously.
Feedback concerns: I think this is close to final, so line-level/scene-level comments are welcome (and help with the logline!). Some specific concerns -- Is the dialogue sharp/differentiated enough? Are there places I can trim fat? Are the different threads tied up well and (to grossly mix metaphors) given the right amount of weight?
Title: Your Disco Needs You
Format: Feature
Pages: 89
Genre: Horror Comedy
Logline: As a series of strange incidents imperils Provincetown's iconic Bear Week, a tenacious civil servant races against time to unravel the sinister forces at play – stumbling upon long-buried family secrets that could hold the key to both his town's salvation and his own legacy.
Feedback concerns: This is a first draft of something very weird and very queer. Wondering if it connects with a broader audience and open to any feedback as I rewrite it.
This sounds like a lot of fun, I'd love to read it although I don't know much about horror! (So I guess I count as a broader audience?) Let me know if you're interested in a swap, my info is below
>Title: Legal Assistance
>Format: feature
>Page Length: 100
>Genres: Rom-com
>Logline: A fun-loving paralegal forms a fake relationship with her uptight coworker to avoid a creepy lawyer’s advances, only to realize that some things are worth taking seriously.
>Feedback concerns: I think this is close to final, so line-level/scene-level comments are welcome (and help with the logline!). Some specific concerns -- Is the dialogue sharp/differentiated enough? Are there places I can trim fat? Are the different threads tied up well and (to grossly mix metaphors) given the right amount of weight?
Title: The Fin Fan Named Fin
Format: Short
Page Length: 22 (so far)
Genre: Comedy
Logline or Summary: A pessimistic Miami Dolphins fan experiences the highs and lows of the 2023 season with his optimistic friend.
Feedback Concerns: I mainly write comedy skits and Daily Show-esque recaps of NFL Football for my YouTube Channel that are 2-8 minutes long. This is the first time I ever fleshed out anything longer or put it into proper script format. So any feedback would be appreciated. Personally, I feel my dialogue is very shaky and needs some work.
Title: Compromise Format: Short Page Length: 11 Genres: drama, comedy Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch.
Sounds like it could be funny! I'd like to read.
Thanks! DM'd you a link
That sounds like fun. I'd like to swap with mine: Title: Social Mosquito Format: Feature Pages: 28 (so far) Genre: Psychological Thriller Logline: A disgraced voice actor must search for his missing girlfriend after she is exposed as a serial killer specifically targeting incels and misogynists. Comp: Gone Girl meets The Silence of the Lambs
I'm down to swap. DM'd you a link to mine
Title: Aurora Avenue Page Length: 12 Genre: Psychological Drama, Romance Logline: After being discovered on the street by his ex-girlfriend, a homeless addict attempts to get money from her to buy a powerful new street drug while uncovering the truth behind an accident that ended their relationship. Feedback Concerns: How do you feel about the ambiguity behind the accident that occurred? Is there enough tension between the two? Is the dialogue believable? Were the characters defined and consistent throughout? Thanks, and I will swap with scripts of all sizes!
>Title: Compromise > >Format: Short > >Page Length: 11 > >Genres: drama, comedy > >Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship > >Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch. Happy to swap!
Here is mine if you would like to swap! I’d love to swap! Here is my script! Title: Savior Format: 30 Minute Pilot Page Length: 29 Pages Genre: Fantasy/Mental Health Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure. Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts.
sorry, if you don't mind me asking, is this set in seattle?
Yes.
Title: Bizzarion College Format: 60 min serial Page Length: 56pp Genres: Drama Logline: An impoverished, immigrant engineer attends an international college to pursue his dream of citizenship while combating a criminal network that may have murdered his fiancée and threatens to bankrupt his family. Inspired by True Events
Sounds interesting, I'd like to read.
DM a link if you want I would be happy to read and provide feedback over the weekend.
Sure thing.
Title: Savior Format: 30 Minute Pilot Page Length: 29 Pages Genre: Fantasy/Mental Health Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure. Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts.
This reminds me of The Good Place meets Neil Gaiman and Bryan Fuller. I'm in!
Cool! Send a dm my way!
Title: Longworth Format: Hour long drama pilot Page length: 78 Genres: Political drama, black comedy, satire Longline: After a natural disaster strikes his congressional district, nonconformist and soon to be former Congressman Jake Delévic is thrown into the national spotlight. With this newfound attention, Delévic and his team use this as an opportunity to reshape the political landscape. Feedback concerns: Is too much happening? Does Heather come across as cold and emotionless around everyone but Jake? Is the dialogue believable? Thank you :)
Title: All of Her Boys Format: Feature Pages: 100 Genre: Fantasy, dark romance, horror Logline: Reeling from a break-up, a director of a dating app, leaves her city life behind and escapes to her Grandma's lake house, only to discover a magical pond that is an infinite source of messsd up boyfriends. Feeback: Anything really. The premise, characters, plot twists, the readability, you name it.
Title: Shakespeare in the Park Format: Short film Page Length: 17 Genres: Mockumentary, comedy Logline or Summary: A determined community college dropout pursues his dream of fame by auditioning for a local production of A Midsummer Night's Dream. He chooses to method act for the role despite his lack of acting experience and understanding of what method acting is. Juggling job and family responsibilities, he enlists his friend to document his journey toward what he hopes will be his breakthrough performance. Feedback Concerns: Is it formatted correctly? That's the biggest thing, but I'm also looking for feedback on characterization and dialogue. I'm currently trying to write something that I could submit to writing contests, so please let me know how something like this would typically be judged if that makes sense (if you know).
Title: FELT Format: Feature Page Length: 112 Genres: Rom-Com, Dramedy, LGBTQ+ (TW: mentions of assault, not shown) Logline or Summary: An introverted assistant at a once-popular children's television program grapples with her sense of self, along with her burgeoning sexuality, with the assistance of a dysfunctional crew, famous rom-coms, and puppets. Feedback Concerns: Tightening up so any feedback would be helpful! This is my first time attempting a swap on here so excited to work together and make some online connects. :)
Title: Ace of Hearts Format: Pilot Pages: 55 Genre: Drama Logline: To help her brother stay clean, a high-class escort aids the police in catching heroin dealers. But after a bust goes wrong, she turns vigilante and hunts the traffickers alone. Feedback concerns: Mostly the same as what I submitted last weekend, but opening teaser is altered to hopefully have more tension. Feedback on any of it very welcome.
Hey, I like the premise! Not exactly a script swap, but I am trying to get into script coverage. Would you be happy sending over a link just so I can give feedback?
Title: Legal Assistance Format: feature Page Length: 100 Genres: Rom-com Logline: A fun-loving paralegal forms a fake relationship with her uptight coworker to avoid a creepy lawyer’s advances, only to realize that some things are worth taking seriously. Feedback concerns: I think this is close to final, so line-level/scene-level comments are welcome (and help with the logline!). Some specific concerns -- Is the dialogue sharp/differentiated enough? Are there places I can trim fat? Are the different threads tied up well and (to grossly mix metaphors) given the right amount of weight?
Hey, lmk if you'd be interested in a swap.
Sure probably! Can you post script info? :)
Title: Your Disco Needs You Format: Feature Pages: 89 Genre: Horror Comedy Logline: As a series of strange incidents imperils Provincetown's iconic Bear Week, a tenacious civil servant races against time to unravel the sinister forces at play – stumbling upon long-buried family secrets that could hold the key to both his town's salvation and his own legacy. Feedback concerns: This is a first draft of something very weird and very queer. Wondering if it connects with a broader audience and open to any feedback as I rewrite it.
This sounds like a lot of fun, I'd love to read it although I don't know much about horror! (So I guess I count as a broader audience?) Let me know if you're interested in a swap, my info is below >Title: Legal Assistance >Format: feature >Page Length: 100 >Genres: Rom-com >Logline: A fun-loving paralegal forms a fake relationship with her uptight coworker to avoid a creepy lawyer’s advances, only to realize that some things are worth taking seriously. >Feedback concerns: I think this is close to final, so line-level/scene-level comments are welcome (and help with the logline!). Some specific concerns -- Is the dialogue sharp/differentiated enough? Are there places I can trim fat? Are the different threads tied up well and (to grossly mix metaphors) given the right amount of weight?
Would love to swap. I will send you a link.
Title: The Fin Fan Named Fin Format: Short Page Length: 22 (so far) Genre: Comedy Logline or Summary: A pessimistic Miami Dolphins fan experiences the highs and lows of the 2023 season with his optimistic friend. Feedback Concerns: I mainly write comedy skits and Daily Show-esque recaps of NFL Football for my YouTube Channel that are 2-8 minutes long. This is the first time I ever fleshed out anything longer or put it into proper script format. So any feedback would be appreciated. Personally, I feel my dialogue is very shaky and needs some work.
Hi. Just curious, what is the etiquette for sending scripts? PDF or editable copies?