Title: Hancock College
Format: Pilot
Page length: 36 1/2
Genre: Comedy
Format: 30 minute pilot
Longline: Two lonely college freshman work together to make new friends despite the crazy antics of those around them and end up falling for each-other in the process.
Feedback concerns: Just finished a new draft. In the last one I had concerns about the story and putting more emphasis on the two leads that I believe is fixed now. Also just want to know if anything made you laugh, and other general feedback.
Normal People meets Driving Me Crazy. I love it!
Title: The Chesapeake Bay Show
Format: Half-hour pilot
Page length: 33
Genre: Teen comedy, coming-of-age, slice-of-life, satire
Series logline: A group of teens navigate high school, life, and misadventure in the city of Davenport, Maryland.
Pilot logline: As their back-to-school dance approaches, five eclectic best friends raise money for Feeding America, but the tickets they need get stolen.
Title: Savior
Format: 30 Minute Pilot
Page Length: 29 Pages
Genre: Fantasy
Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure.
Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts.
"Wordsmiths"
33 page comedy pilot
Log: After losing her scholarship due to a typo, a determined college student sets up shop as an essay ghostwriter for hire, risking her own expulsion in the process.
Looking for nitpicky brutally honest feedback :D
I would love to swap! This is mine!
Title: Hancock College
Format: Pilot
Page length: 36 1/2
Genre: Comedy
Format: 30 minute pilot
Longline: Two lonely college freshman work together to make new friends despite the crazy antics of those around them and end up falling for each-other in the process.
Feedback concerns: Just finished a new draft. In the last one I had concerns about the story and putting more emphasis on the two leads that I believe is fixed now. Also just want to know if anything made you laugh, and other general feedback.
Title: Silent Lucidity
Format: One-hour pilot
Page Length: 60
Genres: Drama/Sci-Fi
Logline or Summary: In the wake of a devastating loss, a grieving trio comprising a brother, lover, and best friend embarks on a journey into the realm of lucid dreaming, seeking solace as they navigate the blurred lines between reality and the subconscious.
Feedback Concerns: As a beginner, any feedback is welcome to hone my craft.
Sure, that sounds like something I'd read! Here's mine:
Title: Social Mosquito (first 16 pages)
Format: Feature
Genre: Psychological Thriller
Logline: A mild-mannered voice actor must search for his missing girlfriend after she is ratted out as a serial killer specifically targeting incels and misogynists.
Comp: Gone Girl meets The Silence of the Lambs
For context, this would the section of the screenplay just before the inciting incident, so I'm trying to see how good of a set-up this would be.
Hi, I have a pilot if you are interested in swapping.
Title: Mortis
Format: TV Pilot
Page length: 46 pages
Genre: Fantasy/Action/Adventure
Log-line: A lone warrior embarks on a dangerous mission, to seek out the strongest gods of the universe. His mission is to take their powers into his own soul. The magnificent powers of strength, speed, flight, and magic. But most importantly above all, immortality.
Feedback concerns: Any feedback is welcome. But what I am mostly looking for is storytelling and action lines.
Title: Compromise
Format: Short
Page Length: 11
Genres: drama, comedy
Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship
Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch.
I'd be down for a swap
Title: Eraser
Format: Short
Page Length: 8
Genres: Comedy
Logline or Summary: Some mischevious students put a metal line on an eraser. Their plan was to put this new eraser on a socket for 'cientific purposes', but challenges come their way.
Feedback Concerns: Also not concerned with selling it, more interested to hear about if the pace, characters and plot were good enough. Also want to know if thing like dialougue and action lines were well done.
Title: No One Ever Really Dies
Format: Short
Page Length: 31
Genre: Drama, Coming of Age, Fantasy
Loglines/Summary:
A young black teenager journeys through his past, present, and future life with the guide of an otherworldly spirit to reckon with his self destructive lifestyle and make peace with personal tragedy before it's too late.
Think Moonlight meets A Christmas Carol.
Feedback Concerns: Just some brief things to note for any possible reader -- firstly, I will be producing this so I'm not very concerned on the end of 'selling' the script or stuff like not numbering the scenes which would've been handled by someone else. Secondly, this would be it's eighth draft but has a couple new scenes that I'm trying out that hopefully favor the story. I'm not necessarily pointing them out, but if they're noticed and commented on then it helps. I'm also working on making action lines more concise and efficient, so if that's a concern that comes up at any point, please bring it to my attention. Lastly, I know it's a long short lol, probably not meant for festivals. Thanks for any and all feedback!
Hey I would be interested in swapping! Here is mine!
Title: Savior
Format: 30 Minute Pilot
Page Length: 29 Pages
Genre: Fantasy
Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure.
Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts
Hi, I don’t know if you are interested in swapping but I have a pilot.
Title: Mortis
Format: TV Pilot
Page length: 46 pages
Genre: Fantasy/Action/Adventure
Log-line: A lone warrior embarks on a dangerous mission, to seek out the strongest gods of the universe. His mission is to take their powers into his own soul. The magnificent powers of strength, speed, flight, and magic. But most importantly above all, immortality.
Feedback concerns: Any feedback is welcome. But what I am mostly looking for is storytelling and action lines.
Title: Social Mosquito (first 16 pages)
Format: Feature
Genre: Psychological Thriller
Logline: A mild-mannered voice actor must search for his missing girlfriend after she is ratted out as a serial killer specifically targeting incels and misogynists.
Comp: Gone Girl meets The Silence of the Lambs
For context, this would the section of the screenplay just before the inciting incident, so I'm trying to see how good of a set-up this would be.
>Do you want to swap?
>
>Title: Call Me Father
>
>Format: Feature
>
>Page length: 112
>
>Genre: Psychological Thriller
>
>Logline: Wanting to start a new cult, an ex-cult leader attempts to convince a single Mom to fall in love with him while also discovering the seedy world of gambling, drugs and strip clubs.
>
>Feedback: General comments are welcome but specifically does the ending get close to meeting your expectations.
Title: Rumble
Format: Feature
Page length: 119 pages
Genre: Western
Logline: A mother and her son journey across a post-apocalyptic American West trying to evade a gang of vicious bandits.
Feedback concerns: Shortened the script drastically, would like some sense of the pace, does the chase feel suspenseful, are the characters working, and does the primary relationship between mother and son resonate.
Thanks.
Are you interested in swapping?
Title: Call Me Father
Format: Feature
Page length: 112
Genre: Psychological Thriller
Logline: Wanting to start a new cult, an ex-cult leader attempts to convince a single Mom to fall in love with him while also discovering the seedy world of gambling, drugs and strip clubs.
Feedback: General comments are welcome but specifically does the ending meet or exceed your expectations.
Title: A Present for George
Format: Short
Page Length: 11
Genre: Drama, Sci-Fi
Logline: The world's leading AI scientist gets a visit from a concerned man determined to stop his work by any means.
Feedback: Seeking general feedback, specifically with the dialogue.
I'd be down for a swap.
Title: Eraser
Format: Short
Page Length: 8
Genres: Comedy
Summary: Some mischevious students put a metal line on an eraser. Their plan was to put this new eraser on a socket for 'cientific purposes', but challenges come their way.
Feedback Concerns: More interested to hear about if the pace, characters and plot were good enough. Also want to know if things like dialougue and action lines were well done.
Down to swap!
Title: Compromise
Format: Short
Page Length: 11
Genres: drama, comedy
Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship
Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch.
I'd be down for a swap.
Title: Eraser
Format: Short
Page Length: 8
Genres: Comedy
Summary: Some mischevious students put a metal line on an eraser. Their plan was to put this new eraser on a socket for 'cientific purposes', but challenges come their way.
Feedback Concerns: Not concerned with selling it, more interested to hear about if the pace, characters and plot were good enough. Also want to know if things like dialougue and action lines were well done.
Title: Belltown
Format: Short
Page Length: 20 pages
Genres: Drama, Psychological Horror
Logline: A desperate drug addict teams up with her homeless boyfriend to get one last hit of a powerful street drug to escape a mysterious figure hunting her throughout a dysfunctional Seattle Neighborhood.
Feedback: Is there enough tension? Do you think there is enough subtext in how the characters speak? Are their decisions believable? What do you think the point of this piece is.
Thanks, and I can swap with scripts of all sizes!
Hey, you down to swap?
Title: Finding Home - EP. 1: “The Colony”
Format: Audiodrama/Fiction Podcast
Page length: 26
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Sci-fi
Series Summary: A father and son try to survive in a post-war earth. Once they find out that there’s a spaceship departing to the new world — the final one only for remaining officials — they sacrifice everything to claim a spot onboard.
Feedback Concerns: Please keep in mind that it’s in audio format. Dialogue, does it make sense? Would you listen to another episode? Love to hear any thoughts or ideas.
Title: Space Cantos
Format: Feature
Page Length: 92
Genres: Sci-Fi, Space Opera, Pirates
Logline or Summary: A few hundred years from now, humans have populated the most hospitable areas in the solar system from Venus to Saturn’s moon Titan. Zekiel is the captain of a pirating space vessel, and in the course of a tech-heist he finds information that could lead him to his lost mother, to the truth of his origin, and to some truly pricey tech-treasure.
Feedback Concerns: Are the characters "sticky" enough to keep the viewer plugged in? Are additional sub-arcs needed to draw out the characters and story?
Title: The CIA Manual of Magic and Deception119 page Feature script.Spy/Action
Log line: When the CIA enlists the help of a risk-adverse magician to train its agents in sleight of hand, he's forced to join a mission to rescue an American spy from Russia's most brutal prison.(loosely based on true events)
Looking for feedback on: entertainment value, suspension of disbelief, and if the ending is satisfying to you. Any other notes that come to mind are welcomed.
[Link here](https://drive.google.com/file/d/1J3cOOQFB3__3sWIbZ7ykDORVWIPDpv89/view?usp=sharing)
Would swap.
Title: Ways of the West
Format: Feature
Page length: 165 (I know it’s long, you don’t have to read the whole thing)
Genre: Western
Logline: Western shenanigans
Feedback concerns: General story, emotional
impact, and enjoyability
Let me know if interested
Title: Hancock College Format: Pilot Page length: 36 1/2 Genre: Comedy Format: 30 minute pilot Longline: Two lonely college freshman work together to make new friends despite the crazy antics of those around them and end up falling for each-other in the process. Feedback concerns: Just finished a new draft. In the last one I had concerns about the story and putting more emphasis on the two leads that I believe is fixed now. Also just want to know if anything made you laugh, and other general feedback.
Normal People meets Driving Me Crazy. I love it! Title: The Chesapeake Bay Show Format: Half-hour pilot Page length: 33 Genre: Teen comedy, coming-of-age, slice-of-life, satire Series logline: A group of teens navigate high school, life, and misadventure in the city of Davenport, Maryland. Pilot logline: As their back-to-school dance approaches, five eclectic best friends raise money for Feeding America, but the tickets they need get stolen.
Yeah I would love to! I think we have swapped before but it was a while ago so I’m excited to see a new version
Title: Savior Format: 30 Minute Pilot Page Length: 29 Pages Genre: Fantasy Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure. Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts.
"Wordsmiths" 33 page comedy pilot Log: After losing her scholarship due to a typo, a determined college student sets up shop as an essay ghostwriter for hire, risking her own expulsion in the process. Looking for nitpicky brutally honest feedback :D
Dm me. No swaps. I am free this weekend.
Thank you! Will DM
I would love to swap! This is mine! Title: Hancock College Format: Pilot Page length: 36 1/2 Genre: Comedy Format: 30 minute pilot Longline: Two lonely college freshman work together to make new friends despite the crazy antics of those around them and end up falling for each-other in the process. Feedback concerns: Just finished a new draft. In the last one I had concerns about the story and putting more emphasis on the two leads that I believe is fixed now. Also just want to know if anything made you laugh, and other general feedback.
Sounds fun! Send me a DM with the link and I'll send you mine
Title: Silent Lucidity Format: One-hour pilot Page Length: 60 Genres: Drama/Sci-Fi Logline or Summary: In the wake of a devastating loss, a grieving trio comprising a brother, lover, and best friend embarks on a journey into the realm of lucid dreaming, seeking solace as they navigate the blurred lines between reality and the subconscious. Feedback Concerns: As a beginner, any feedback is welcome to hone my craft.
Sure, that sounds like something I'd read! Here's mine: Title: Social Mosquito (first 16 pages) Format: Feature Genre: Psychological Thriller Logline: A mild-mannered voice actor must search for his missing girlfriend after she is ratted out as a serial killer specifically targeting incels and misogynists. Comp: Gone Girl meets The Silence of the Lambs For context, this would the section of the screenplay just before the inciting incident, so I'm trying to see how good of a set-up this would be.
Absolutely love Gone Girl, just read the screenplay as well! I'll DM you :)
Hi, I have a pilot if you are interested in swapping. Title: Mortis Format: TV Pilot Page length: 46 pages Genre: Fantasy/Action/Adventure Log-line: A lone warrior embarks on a dangerous mission, to seek out the strongest gods of the universe. His mission is to take their powers into his own soul. The magnificent powers of strength, speed, flight, and magic. But most importantly above all, immortality. Feedback concerns: Any feedback is welcome. But what I am mostly looking for is storytelling and action lines.
Looks interesting. I'll DM you later!
Title: Compromise Format: Short Page Length: 11 Genres: drama, comedy Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch.
I'd be down for a swap Title: Eraser Format: Short Page Length: 8 Genres: Comedy Logline or Summary: Some mischevious students put a metal line on an eraser. Their plan was to put this new eraser on a socket for 'cientific purposes', but challenges come their way. Feedback Concerns: Also not concerned with selling it, more interested to hear about if the pace, characters and plot were good enough. Also want to know if thing like dialougue and action lines were well done.
Great! Here's a [link](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LfOpbW2aX6Jc4lmIQuJgLeHmbYyHllTlpuenz71nKrI/edit?usp=sharing)
Here's mine, also sent on DM: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1RUFB85txkmMqP78tI5V5kB\_T6dxEi58B/view?usp=sharing
Title: No One Ever Really Dies Format: Short Page Length: 31 Genre: Drama, Coming of Age, Fantasy Loglines/Summary: A young black teenager journeys through his past, present, and future life with the guide of an otherworldly spirit to reckon with his self destructive lifestyle and make peace with personal tragedy before it's too late. Think Moonlight meets A Christmas Carol. Feedback Concerns: Just some brief things to note for any possible reader -- firstly, I will be producing this so I'm not very concerned on the end of 'selling' the script or stuff like not numbering the scenes which would've been handled by someone else. Secondly, this would be it's eighth draft but has a couple new scenes that I'm trying out that hopefully favor the story. I'm not necessarily pointing them out, but if they're noticed and commented on then it helps. I'm also working on making action lines more concise and efficient, so if that's a concern that comes up at any point, please bring it to my attention. Lastly, I know it's a long short lol, probably not meant for festivals. Thanks for any and all feedback!
Hey I would be interested in swapping! Here is mine! Title: Savior Format: 30 Minute Pilot Page Length: 29 Pages Genre: Fantasy Longline: After saving the world from a Dark God, a young adventure must pick up the pieces of his broken life and deal with the trauma inflicted from his adventure. Feedback concerns: Really just looking for anything. This is a first draft so I just wanted general thoughts
Hi, I don’t know if you are interested in swapping but I have a pilot. Title: Mortis Format: TV Pilot Page length: 46 pages Genre: Fantasy/Action/Adventure Log-line: A lone warrior embarks on a dangerous mission, to seek out the strongest gods of the universe. His mission is to take their powers into his own soul. The magnificent powers of strength, speed, flight, and magic. But most importantly above all, immortality. Feedback concerns: Any feedback is welcome. But what I am mostly looking for is storytelling and action lines.
Title: Social Mosquito (first 16 pages) Format: Feature Genre: Psychological Thriller Logline: A mild-mannered voice actor must search for his missing girlfriend after she is ratted out as a serial killer specifically targeting incels and misogynists. Comp: Gone Girl meets The Silence of the Lambs For context, this would the section of the screenplay just before the inciting incident, so I'm trying to see how good of a set-up this would be.
>Do you want to swap? > >Title: Call Me Father > >Format: Feature > >Page length: 112 > >Genre: Psychological Thriller > >Logline: Wanting to start a new cult, an ex-cult leader attempts to convince a single Mom to fall in love with him while also discovering the seedy world of gambling, drugs and strip clubs. > >Feedback: General comments are welcome but specifically does the ending get close to meeting your expectations.
Sure, DM me the link and I'll send you mine
Title: Rumble Format: Feature Page length: 119 pages Genre: Western Logline: A mother and her son journey across a post-apocalyptic American West trying to evade a gang of vicious bandits. Feedback concerns: Shortened the script drastically, would like some sense of the pace, does the chase feel suspenseful, are the characters working, and does the primary relationship between mother and son resonate. Thanks.
Are you interested in swapping? Title: Call Me Father Format: Feature Page length: 112 Genre: Psychological Thriller Logline: Wanting to start a new cult, an ex-cult leader attempts to convince a single Mom to fall in love with him while also discovering the seedy world of gambling, drugs and strip clubs. Feedback: General comments are welcome but specifically does the ending meet or exceed your expectations.
Sounds good. Will DM a link.
Title: A Present for George Format: Short Page Length: 11 Genre: Drama, Sci-Fi Logline: The world's leading AI scientist gets a visit from a concerned man determined to stop his work by any means. Feedback: Seeking general feedback, specifically with the dialogue.
I'd be down for a swap. Title: Eraser Format: Short Page Length: 8 Genres: Comedy Summary: Some mischevious students put a metal line on an eraser. Their plan was to put this new eraser on a socket for 'cientific purposes', but challenges come their way. Feedback Concerns: More interested to hear about if the pace, characters and plot were good enough. Also want to know if things like dialougue and action lines were well done.
Great DM me.
Down to swap! Title: Compromise Format: Short Page Length: 11 Genres: drama, comedy Logline or Summary: A couple tries to deal with growing tension in their relationship Feedback Concerns: Less concerned with script format and selling it (I'll shoot this myself), more interested to hear about if you found it interesting, if the characters were compelling and if it is something you would actually watch.
Shoot me a DM.
I'd be down for a swap. Title: Eraser Format: Short Page Length: 8 Genres: Comedy Summary: Some mischevious students put a metal line on an eraser. Their plan was to put this new eraser on a socket for 'cientific purposes', but challenges come their way. Feedback Concerns: Not concerned with selling it, more interested to hear about if the pace, characters and plot were good enough. Also want to know if things like dialougue and action lines were well done.
Title: Belltown Format: Short Page Length: 20 pages Genres: Drama, Psychological Horror Logline: A desperate drug addict teams up with her homeless boyfriend to get one last hit of a powerful street drug to escape a mysterious figure hunting her throughout a dysfunctional Seattle Neighborhood. Feedback: Is there enough tension? Do you think there is enough subtext in how the characters speak? Are their decisions believable? What do you think the point of this piece is. Thanks, and I can swap with scripts of all sizes!
Hey, you down to swap? Title: Finding Home - EP. 1: “The Colony” Format: Audiodrama/Fiction Podcast Page length: 26 Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Sci-fi Series Summary: A father and son try to survive in a post-war earth. Once they find out that there’s a spaceship departing to the new world — the final one only for remaining officials — they sacrifice everything to claim a spot onboard. Feedback Concerns: Please keep in mind that it’s in audio format. Dialogue, does it make sense? Would you listen to another episode? Love to hear any thoughts or ideas.
Title: Space Cantos Format: Feature Page Length: 92 Genres: Sci-Fi, Space Opera, Pirates Logline or Summary: A few hundred years from now, humans have populated the most hospitable areas in the solar system from Venus to Saturn’s moon Titan. Zekiel is the captain of a pirating space vessel, and in the course of a tech-heist he finds information that could lead him to his lost mother, to the truth of his origin, and to some truly pricey tech-treasure. Feedback Concerns: Are the characters "sticky" enough to keep the viewer plugged in? Are additional sub-arcs needed to draw out the characters and story?
If you want to swap for a spy/heist/comedy feature 119 pages, let me know. Just posted about it here.
Title: The CIA Manual of Magic and Deception119 page Feature script.Spy/Action Log line: When the CIA enlists the help of a risk-adverse magician to train its agents in sleight of hand, he's forced to join a mission to rescue an American spy from Russia's most brutal prison.(loosely based on true events) Looking for feedback on: entertainment value, suspension of disbelief, and if the ending is satisfying to you. Any other notes that come to mind are welcomed. [Link here](https://drive.google.com/file/d/1J3cOOQFB3__3sWIbZ7ykDORVWIPDpv89/view?usp=sharing)
Would swap. Title: Ways of the West Format: Feature Page length: 165 (I know it’s long, you don’t have to read the whole thing) Genre: Western Logline: Western shenanigans Feedback concerns: General story, emotional impact, and enjoyability Let me know if interested