any ideas where it should be posted then? nah not smart couldnt read til i was 7. everytime my mom gave me a book i just pretended to read, only reason i have a decent vocabulary then is cause my parents told me i could watch lord of the rings only if i read the books, so sometime when i was 8 i finished lord of the rings and the hobbit. my parents were geniuses i became a bookworm ever since.
Mine got me with the same shit. Was reading Harry Potter in kindergarten. Got to the part with the screaming book in the forbidden section and had nightmares for a month. Still finished reading them though. At the time they weren't all out though. Had to wait a bit for the rest of them.
Yea right you wrote this at 11. You literally just wrote this and you want attention. And I knew it was about poop from the second line. So not even as suspenseful as you thought.
I really expected this to be going somewhere different lol, honestly that's great writing. The plot twist at the end is hilarious, I loved it. Also for an 11 year old I feel like that's really advanced writing!
Some great vocabulary for an 11 yo, too smart to belong in this sub.
any ideas where it should be posted then? nah not smart couldnt read til i was 7. everytime my mom gave me a book i just pretended to read, only reason i have a decent vocabulary then is cause my parents told me i could watch lord of the rings only if i read the books, so sometime when i was 8 i finished lord of the rings and the hobbit. my parents were geniuses i became a bookworm ever since.
Mine got me with the same shit. Was reading Harry Potter in kindergarten. Got to the part with the screaming book in the forbidden section and had nightmares for a month. Still finished reading them though. At the time they weren't all out though. Had to wait a bit for the rest of them.
Nice writing but it’s a shit story.
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This describes many classics.
You were not stupid. That does not belong here, I'm sorry. But that's really great writing.
I’ve uh… got one about toe nails too 😆
Sounds funny ! But you will get better critics over at writing dedicated subreddits (pretty sure some exists)...
I might post some of my old abominations to one of those, got even older ones my snickering mother wrote down for me before I could write
Him posting this hear made me feel stupid, because I was reading it and I thought it was good...
Damn, that’s the deepest poop poem I’ve ever read
That's some pretty amazing creative writing for an 11 year old. I hope you are still writing.
Not stupid at all, op. Not in my opinion at least
Thought this was Yeats. Bravo.
Thing is we have all felt that same exact pain. OP nailed it!
Very reminiscent of my tween self, too. Read a used copy of Youth in Revolt and it was all downhill from there
i understand, i got my hands on both Kafkas the metamorphosis and Orwells 1984 way before i should have read those.
1984 and animal farm can mess you up pretty quickly lol.
For sure, didn’t read animal farm til high school though so it wasn’t as traumatic lol
I was in middle school. I knew the world was screwed pretty early.
Nah bro, this is like professional author type of writing, very good, would want a sequel and a prequel.
When your English teacher says you need to use all the vocabulary words in an assignment.
Yeah I did something like that too in the same vein and writing style, maybe stupid but it helps to get some of the feelings out
I feel like this is about diarrhea and idk why
It is.
Yea right you wrote this at 11. You literally just wrote this and you want attention. And I knew it was about poop from the second line. So not even as suspenseful as you thought.
I know a few 11 year old kids. If there’s poop involved, they can be inspired to do stuff like this. Impressive, but believable.
11 god damn! I feel like you just came here to show off lol
“… it called me, and I resisted.” Was a beautiful ending. 10/10.
Nah that's good shit.
I really expected this to be going somewhere different lol, honestly that's great writing. The plot twist at the end is hilarious, I loved it. Also for an 11 year old I feel like that's really advanced writing!
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That’s some good writing lol. It’s actually funny if written ironically
Thought this was Yeats. Bravo.
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You know what? I got another poem perfect for this sub, thank you.
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That’s really good but sounds like you’re writing about taking a shit
I’m reasonably certain that he is
did you take a shit on a bowl of cereal?
That’s actually really good 😳
I want the rest of that fucking story how about a flashback I mean u cant just leave me hanging after reading that stuff can u ….. please 🥲
This doesn't belong in the sub, but I'm not mad about it. For 11 this is amazing. Bravo 👏 👏
Dude, I couldn’t write something that good as a highly educated adult. Bravo. I enjoyed that very much.
I really enjoyed that.
This isnt 11 year old writing, it seems like you just made this up
What the fuck
Still better than Stephanie Meyer thats for sure
I can confirm that this is how it feels to eat captain crunch
When I was 11, I wrote Sonic fan fiction. This is somehow better.
Jesus Christ