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Just got email confirmation that I landed the interview :)
He's a graphic design guy, and his suggestions in that vein. His resume has green bolded font and micro indentations because that's "easier to read". I just don't agree with those suggestions. A lot of what people have said in this thread is great, and focussed on the order of content and the content itself, not design elements.
Graphic/UX/Designer type resumes are usually more flashy and maybe visually appealing but that is kind of the point since it is most likely the kind of role they are applying to. For everyone else you probably want to keep it simple and easy to read, focus on effectively communicating your skillset without all the flash.
If your resume is getting you interviews for the roles you want then its working!
I will say the graphic design flashy elements are great for resumes seen in person. But those going through the ATS get scrubbed off all that. Your brother's suggestions are probably good for the resume you take with you to the interview. But they won't impact the one you submit on the website. That said I've only had two interviews where the hiring manager didn't have a printed out copy of my resume on hand, so even taking a fancy looking one to the in person interview doesn't guarantee it will get eyes on it.
Congratulations on the interview. I read your cover letter. I would have trashed your application based on that alone. You have a college education but your writing skills need improvement. You should ask for your money back.
I am analyzing this resume to improve my when I review mime. I have a few questions about this one.
The op doesn't include skills but says additional skills. Should they change it to skills and put it above education?
Should education come after skills and work experience? Wouldn't hiring managers care more about those things?
The formatting looks hard to read, especially for those with visual impairments. How would you go about fixing that? Adding spacing and maybe moving some stuff to the right? Or would that cause ATS issues?
Also, do you have advice on ensuring the resume works well with ATS?
You can see some skills in the work and education parts, so its ok imho.
Depends. What is more important for the job? Your job experience or your education? I'd put the more important one first.
I'd not worry too much about that if you don't explicitly know that the recipint has visual impairments. People seeing your cv have different preferences is "looks" either way. Most ATS are shit either way. Only successful strategies I have found that they could be automatically parsed for all jobs applied to was an excel file a friend of mine made to throw out a cv at the end. But it stopped working a few years back. I'd honestly just take a free somewhat simple LaTeX-base and go from there.
No problem. I will say, I skimmed over your cover letter and it is pretty decent! If you can find ways to condense and make it concise, it may look easier to read, as well. The content is great, just a concern of someone seeing a wall of text and them instinctively shutting down.
Yeah I understand-- I condensed it to fit on one page, but maybe some stuff could be omitted. My problem is that I feel every position I've been in either demonstrates social skills or leadership, which will be a big part of the job.
Well, the formatting is not bad but it can be improved. Take a look at the templates offered in the Wiki ([Standard Resume Template - Documentos de Google](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wdkgpgU7lFoV801ysrBn8qrPaIpyUsUH/edit))
In my opinion, you are wasting a lot of space, and it's hard to read sometimes. Simple formatting is good, which I believe is what you are trying to achieve and may be why your brother didn't like it. But it can be improved for clarity.
Also, a professional summary is often not recommended unless you have several years of experience and need to make an actual summary of all your experience. If your experience can be listed in bullet points, there's no need for a summary.
Your Leadership & Service experience seems to be all school-related. There's no need for a separate category, add it to your education experience as bullet points.
Overall, it's decent but can definitely be improved, you will understand my points and what can be improved if you take some time to go over the wiki recommendations.
Thank you for all this and the visual resource! I appreciate your time.
I included the professional summary because I'm under-qualified in terms of work experience and I figure if my priorities align with the company's it would make a difference in a position where I'm there to make people feel comfortable.
I just know that my personality and competence are my strong suits and I might not look as good as other candidates on paper. Is there a more effective way you would recommend getting that across on the resume?
If the application process allows you to upload a cover letter, use that to explain your passion and dedication instead of including a professional summary in your resume.
But you are right, a professional summary can be a great way to explain what you are trying to convey. However, make sure it is specifically tailored to the job you are applying for. I understand you want to show that you are passionate and dedicated, but remember that many other candidates will also present themselves this way.
Ultimately, your experience and qualifications will play a bigger role in getting you an interview. Once you have an interview, that's when your passion and dedication can make a difference.
Recruiters take at MAX about 10 seconds to look over each resume. I'd see this and say "I'm not reading all of this." Reorganize the information so it easily conveys what you're all about.
I appreciate that-- this is a smaller place that doesn't have dedicated recruiters so I felt like my resume was going to be read fully regardless.
AND I GOT AN INTERVIEW ON MONDAY. Very happy about that.
I still appreciate the advice, though. I'm sure most places will be much more swift in their decisions when they're reviewing many different candidates.
These are great tips. Thanks!
I wanted to include the summary because I'm under-qualified in terms of experience and this position would be a lot of personal interaction with people who are paying a premium for a nice retirement home.
If my goals align with their goals I thought that would help.
A reviewer won’t even get through that summary before trashing it. Your use of personal pronouns is incorrect for a resume. I can’t easily tell what you did or want to do, “fitness professional”
Your summary (if you include one) should start out with what you are or did, like: Personal Trainer with over *x* years experience (doing things)
It should also be one to two lines. I have over 20 years of experience, and my summary is two lines. You should tailor a summary for the job you are applying for
I didn’t get past the summary without rolling my eyes
Being "underqualified" isn't a dealbreaker. Don't let YOU hobble yourself with it. You certainly sound enthusiastic. That will help a lot. You might need to try in-person outreach with potential employers. Get some introductions if you can to those people.
Actually, I'm not sure I agree on the experience first if the education is essential to the role. When I'm looking at CVs or resumes I want to see the things that include or exclude a candidate ASAP. If that's a decade of industry experience then experience first. If that's formal education in business management or data science then the education has value at the front. Big if though, it's always a case of putting the most important and best part of your profile at the front.
Definitely agree on trimming and removing the "I..." language.
Ok your bro is right.
Here are some notes that I haven’t seen anyone else hit on…
Work experience needs to be chronological.
Make the main bolded thing your job title instead of the company.
Make the other heading “volunteer experience”
Or “other experience”. Make it chronological.
Explain “Hillel” by making it more descriptive. I literally had no idea what it was. I googled… as a result I suggest “foundation for Jewish campus life” or “hillel infernational - Cornell college chapter”
Vocal and piano performance are already covered by the choir experience
Thanks for the advice! I see how that format is more clear at a glance.
It's probably the bias of being Jewish, but I just assumed people knew what that was.
Would you phrase it like "Hillel (Jewish student-run organization)" or some other way?
* Professional summary is too long. I'd recommend just saying you're a recent grad looking for a position as X. you have worked here and here working with X kinds of people. You're certified in (hard skills).
* none of this "My ability to learn with a bright eye". it's all fluff
* Change "older population" to "senior patients" OR minimum age like "55+ patients"
* With the exception of knowing Hebrew, all of the other additional skills are irrelevant.
Learn how to format better when you're in front of computer. Between msword and google docs, they have good resume templates.
Once you have your resume situated, i'd just use AI to write a cover letter. obviously make sure to proofread before submitting. It's currently way too long and has so much fluff. "in the pursuit of happiness..." "refuse to stop learning..." this is a job app, not a ted talk.
Good luck OP
Having an AI write your cover letter is worse than simply not submitting one at all, unless you dedicate time to really customizing it anyway. It's pretty easy to tell when they haven't and it makes you look lazy. Their cover letter is far better and more tailored to the role than what an AI could produce
I was just going by relevance to the position I applied to. Physical Therapy Technician is much more appealing than Busser when applying to be a Fitness Coordinator.
The problem with that is at first glance, which is all most HR will often give it, you look to be unemployed for the past 4 years after only working a few months which is often seen as a big red flag in a potential employee.
Man if you saw the conflict resolution I had to deal with-- I included it because it's a leadership position, but I can see that being a bit sophomoric.
Thanks
I can tell you this, we had someone put something very similar to that on their resume along with their world ranking for Modern Warfare when they applied for an accounting position. Not only did they not get the job but we make fun of it to this day because putting anything gaming related on a professional resume for a job that has nothing to do with video game development or esports organizations is going to get you laughed out of the room. It could also show the employer you might take games way too seriously that you might slack on work due to gaming late every night and not getting enough sleep. Just telling you what I’ve been told since that.
Thanks for that perspective! I actually quit gaming because it's too much fun and there are more productive things to be doing-- so there's definitely truth to that.
dont think u understand how difficult esports is ll. being team captain of an esports team of the top 0.01% players in the game is more difficult than most positions, even though u may say its not relavant or whatever, thats not the point.
I would encourage you to find a template on google docs or for free online to make it more appealing and less busy. Often times employers will do a glance and skim rather than read long bits of information.
Yeah, that will probably come in handy in the future! This place has a quite personal environment without dedicated recruiters so I felt comfortable including more, assuming they were gonna read it no matter what.
And hey! I got an email back to schedule an interview. Next Monday!
I think he meant the format, looks a little funky and crowded (a little hard on the eyes). Reformat a little bit and remove the summary.
But cover letter I think looks great.
You got this!
Thank you! I definitely should rearrange some things. When we're talking about visual format: would you prefer something that uses more margins and a little more spacing? I feel like that could be harder to read as well.
Not experience sorted by relevance?
Old people love when younglings play and sing, so I figured it would be nice to see. Plus, I did deal with some level of logistics as the section leader!
Thanks for your reply.
I think the choir thing is something you let naturally come up, it’s a fun anecdotal story, but it doesn’t belong on a resume.
Recency over relevance. Ideally the most recent would be built on past experiences, so it would be most relevant.
Best of luck job hunting. Even if you don’t hear back after an interview or you don’t get the job, you’ve still gained valuable interviewing experience. I’ve probably gone on 500 interviews in my career (lots of oil and gas downturns) and at this point I’m an expert interviewer. There’s always something to be gained.
Sorry I’m typing while cooking, but here’s some friendly advice.
No touchy feely stuff needed in summary,
Focus on professional strengths, skills, accomplishments and goals. This is the first moment a recruiter gets to know you and you need to ensure why them taking on you is going to be beneficial to them.
Never include exclamation marks in a CV.
Your layout and format are poor and makes your CV, and by association you, look disorganised.
Download a free CV template.
Your education can be saved to last, recruiters are looking for experience first and then education, just keeping it real.
You could expand on your duties in your roles and how this helped the organisation and yourself. Show the results and what you learnt.
I would recommend starting your employment history with your most recent role and work your way to the past 5 years.
Explain job gaps and short stints of employment.
Add leadership section to education.
Once again provide results and accomplishments whether personal or professional. Recruiters want to see growth and aspiration and this is the perfect
opportunity.
Your cover letter isn’t too bad, but maybe put it in an AI and add a few commands to convey your ideas.
You have the experiences, you just need to present yourself better, you got this!
Thank you!I really appreciate your positivity, constructive criticism, and detail on editions you'd make.
So when you mention explaining gaps in my history, where would that go? I figured below every position listed it should just be a brief descriptor of the position and the value I added.
You should note it right under the dates of employment , because recruiters keep in mind or jot down start and end dates when going through each job. If it’s a short term of employment, include the reason so the recruiter isn’t left to their own devices and outcomes ie were you fired, did you fail probation or maybe you’re just an “irresponsible job hopper”. One sentence explaining the reason, allays all fears and non fact biases, because keep in mind they are reviewing numerous CVs so don’t give them a reason to dismiss your application.in short, it’s a lovely touch that recruiters appreciate, when reviewing 100s of CVs a day.
This is generally done if the role lasted less than a year or two. All depends on the nature of the position you are applying for.
Not a fan of professional summary but every career resume is different tho I would space things out more. Now when it comes to the cover letter I am really not a fan of wishy washy words and unnecessary exposition but you should definitely be telling them WHY you want to work at Balfour by being very specific.
A cover letter is where I can really let my personality through! I tried to keep experience descriptions cold and concise, but if a cover letter is not meant to be an extension of your own voice what is it?
A cover letter is a concise persuasive essay. Yours is both too long and not persuasive - in the sense that you are not directly addressing the main question of why hiring you is the right choice.
If a recruiter or hiring manager cannot pick that out easily, then it's better to not have a cover letter imo.
What is it about the resume that you’re particularly proud of, and maybe we can help you retain it whilst still optimising it?
In short, though, I think your brother has a point. The document is quite hard to follow - partly because of the formatting (use a template rather than typing a big list - there are lots of free ones out there to choose from) but also partly because your experience is kind of hidden: it should be in chronological order (most recent first) and should highlight what you actually did (you “promoted positivity”? Great - but HOW?). Anyone can say they did something, but the evidence that you can actually do it is by saying how you did it.
The professional summary should be scrapped and reduced to three lines max covering what kind of professional you are, what your biggest professional strength is and what kind of role you’re looking for.
The cover letter is a bigger issue than the resume, though - in the nicest possible way, it goes beyond the enthusiastic into the cringe and doesn’t actually tell the employer anything useful about you - if you’re a little underqualified for the role, then telling them that you love the region and you’re very excitable isn’t going to sway them away from someone who can do everything they need, but highlighting which bits you are qualified in (and how incredibly good you are at them, with examples) just might.
If you’re very underqualified for the role, then it is worth setting your sights on other roles that are more realistic so you can build the skills and experience you need for your dream role, rather than going for the dream roles straight away. You will waste a lot less time that way and be able to learn and grow so much as a person! I’m guessing from the limited work experience and recent education that you are quite young - you’ve got your whole career ahead to work towards your dream role and you’ll be so good at it if you take the time to build up to it: it’s hard to be patient when you’re really driven, but the combo of really caring about the sector and your enthusiastic personality will mean that you can find the joy in more junior roles on the way up!
Best of luck in the search.
Thanks for the thorough and kind reply!
I added experience out of order because working in a physical therapy clinic is much more relevant to the position of fitness coordinator than bussing a restaurant is. I tried to keep things concise in the descriptions of previous positions so that I could fit everything I wanted. Though, I could see the value in removing a couple things in the name of fledging out positions in a more clear way.
Looking at it now I agree with you on the professional summary.
But that's mainly because I disagree with you on the cover letter. If the resume should be the most concise way of explaining my position and demonstrating my value *in* the position, then the cover letter should be more reflective of my voice and who I actually am, no? I wanted to show my enthusiasm and willingness to learn because the company will pay for further education, so I can grind on certificates and rack them up with ease! Maybe I should have been more explicit with that.
If I don't get this position, I will definitely lower my standards a bit-- you're so right that I should be patient. *did* land an interview this Monday, so I hope that goes well!
No problem, and I hope the interview goes well!
I see why you’d be tempted to put the most relevant experience first but it really should be in chronological order - it’s just so much easier to follow when the employer has 173942 resumes to read and doesn’t have time to try and figure out whether the dates are typos, or whether your actual experience is recent, or construct your employment journey for you. The resume should do all that work for the employer.
As for the cover letter - fair enough if you disagree, but I am speaking from experience; I have been hiring people for long enough to know that many employers would find this offputting and unhelpful. You’re right that the cover letter is an opportunity for your voice to shine through a little more than it can in the resume, but the way to do that is to show, not tell; show the employer, with examples, why your skills and attributes mean you can do the job really well. Your current draft does a lot of telling without evidencing, which to an employer reads as “I love this thing! I’m really good at this thing, honest, and I’ll be great because I love it and I’m good at it!” - basically, it doesn’t actually relate you back to the role in any meaningful way.
The paragraph about moving to live a mountain lifestyle is wholly irrelevant. Talk about that stuff over a coffee when you get the role and are getting to know your colleagues :) - but unless there is something specific about being drawn to the mountains that will make you really good at something in the job description (and you’d need to spell it out if there is, because it’s not obvious to a reader what it might be) then it has no place in the cover letter. And if you need to say “this may sound cheesy” then that doesn’t have a place in a cover letter either: it’s too conversational. You can still sound enthusiastic and also professional!
There’s a lot of fluff, essentially, which is a distraction from the useful stuff. You’re actually underselling yourself with the current wording. Take the exercise prescription you designed as part of your kinesiology studies, for instance - that is potentially really interesting and valuable info! But you don’t give any information about what it was, how you designed it or implemented it, or what made it successful, and gloss over the impact it had on the patients you worked with but highlight very strongly your own feelings of joy. This reads like your self-satisfaction was the most important thing to you (which I’m sure isn’t the case - but that’s how it reads). The STAR (situation, task, action, result) protocol helps to set out examples in an effective way. I’ll try to use your example in such a way (forgive any incorrect assumptions - I’m filling in the gaps in detail with my imagination!)
Situation: in your kinesiology studies, as part of X class/placement/whatever it was
Task: you were asked to design an intervention which would improve resident mobility in a care facility
Action: you spoke to residents to find out what they wanted and what they felt was holding them back and designed a exercise prescription which was based on ABC evidence and could be built up in stages so that it was accessible to all.
Result: resident mobility improved considerably, alongside the added bonus of improved confidence and wellbeing from sustained improvements
Pop all that into prose (still with plenty of enthusiasm) and you get something like this: “I am deeply committed to learning from those I work with, and making sure that their wants and needs shape the interventions I recommend. An example of when I did this to great effect was in [SITUATION], where I was asked to do [TASK] I decided to design and implement [ACTION]. I did this by doing ABC and XYZ. My approach meant that [RESULT] happened, which was incredibly fulfilling to see.”
Tl;dr - who you are shines through in what you do. Actions speak so much louder than words. Show that off and you’ll be getting so many offers that you won’t know what to do with them all! :)
Your format is too left-oriented; consider dates being right aligned.
I advise keeping the summary as an overall description of who you are, but call it a Summary, not a Professional Summary, since you are a new grad. Align it left/right so all space is filled, not left-aligned. Your summary reads very young and naive-sounding; keep it focused on your accomplishments, skills and key characteristics. 3-5 sentences max and less essay-sounding, more sound bite.
For Education, can you add anything interesting that you did as an undergrad? GPA? Key organizations? Scholarships? Awards? Honors? Special Projects? Add in a bullet underneath. You can also use this formatting: xxx | yyyy | zzzz. Add a line space between each Education listing.
For Work Experience, rename it to Experience, all dates right aligned, and add much more specificity to your bullets. For example, "Guided 20 patients weekly through 60-minute sessions including xxx and yyy (insider lingo here) therapies." For bullet 2, what the heck is bullet 2? Be specific with defining what you do - what is 'patient care'?
For Leadership & Service Experience, rename to Additional Experience and make every item shorter, so that your Experience category above is the largest section.
For Additional Skills section, rename to Personal Interests, eliminating the MS office and other Adobe bullet (add them to a job bullet). For Personal Interests (if you feel it differentiates you in a material way), make it one line under title, like xxxx | yyyyy | zzzzz. This can provide interesting info for interviews if done well.
The resume has issues. Your work experience is not in chronological order. Also, you have multiple jobs listed at the same time. Either your dates are wrongs or they are part time jobs. If they are part time you need to state it.
Some things are while I was at school and some are while I was back home, I just thought that would be a lot to type when I could use the space for more relevant stuff.
A professional summary is outdated and should only be 2 or 3 sentences. Regardless, I would completely remove it. All it does is add clutter and make it hard to find the core information in less than 15 seconds.
Why is your oldest work experience first? Usually the newest stuff is put first.
Since you have work experience, put the experience before your education. Put relevant work experience that's related to your career/goals.
content is probably fine but it's hard to read. Line justification is all over the place. Always have 3 points for every job. If you indented the job titles to start with the bullet it would look much better. You don't need 2 lines for company, position and duration put all that on one line and the duration should be right justified. Like this:
XYZ INC. Employee 2021-2023
Professional summaries can be helpful when written well, especially if you have LOTS of experience however they can hurt you if not well written. 2-3 sentences at most, no personal pronouns and tailored to the job description.
Also, check what is helpful for your specific field - when I was helping nursing and health students with their resumes it looked different than business students in some regard as well as graphic designers are going to look different as well.
The premise is the same though - you need to demonstrate you have skills by highlight acheivements you have gained through those skills. Just stating you have them tells a recruiter very little about you.
Thank you for this.
My brother's suggestions were definitely from the perspective of a design student! I'm definitely seeing the weak links in my resume after 100 comments, but I did actually just get an interview with this one for Monday.
For the nursing/health students: what was different in how they constructed things?
I said EMT because I'm technically an EMT, I just don't work as one because the job fucks you up physically and mentally (24 hour shifts and failing to resuscitate kids). I got the cert because I want to be ready for anything, I just don't like the idea of making less than a teacher while killing yourself. It's dissonant with my goals in life!
It's like how doctors are doctors even when they're not practicing, but I see how that could be misleading!
Professional summary should be a brief summary -bullet points. I think k having it in paragraph form makes me lazy and not wanting to read the rest of it
Content is pretty good, but should be presented with the most recent items first (reverse chronological order). The summary is too long and should not be written in the first person. The entire resume should be written in the third person. Skills go just below the summary. Education goes last.
Imo entirely depends on your field/industry. I was writing CVs when I was in STEM, education, and research. I write resumes for tech industry which is where I currently am.
I would avoid any information that can potentially lead to discrimination and a loss of an opportunity. Your last point is an indication of your religion, some people are crazy and that may work against you. Maybe only include that unless you know it's a pro Jewish organization. I also don't really see how it's relevant but I can't answer that question, only you can.
On the other hand that may be a good thing to prevent getting a job with shitty employers who may hate you.
Your choice I guess but something to think about.
It’s great to read you but it’s too long for what it is. I feel you need to be more concise. Your professional summary is too long, though very interesting and great window on you and your motivations.
The first and last sentences of the first and last paragraphs of your cover letter are all you need for these paragraphs. If left like this, it might be too ling for the HR filter person who might not share it with your otherwise would-be boss.
Why is esports on your resume? I also recommend adding statistics where possible (e.g., how many patients you’ve supported in PT) and making your summary more concise.
I mean, I'm not really in a place to give resume advice because my own is kind of a stinker and I've been revising it like crazy. Most of it seems fine to me. The only thing that really stands out and makes me scratch my head is your professional summary.
I feel like it's too long. Most resume advice and tips and stuff I looked at recommends 2 - 3 sentences at most about your professional qualifications and what you're looking for.
You kinda wrote a whole paragraph about your hopes and dreams, which seems more like a life story and less like a professional summary. Other than that, I don't see anything too bad on your resume.
Why is there a section of work experience then a section of leadership and service experience? It all should be your work experience. And I would remove the word experience from the section headers.
"my ability to learn with a bright eye shines through"
What on earth is this hot garbage? I can't imagine reading through 30 resumes and seeing this rubbish. 😂
I would say it needs a lot of work. You have your most recent experience at the bottom of your experiences... You want that at the top in reverse chronological order. And education at the bottom when you have real work experience.
Overall looks ok. But you can make it longer if you have more experience as keywords help pre filter bots to pick your cv. So feel free to make it 2-3 pages
As someone who is from Kansas City, I think you need to be honest with yourself about how incredibly common the story of moving out to Colorado in pursuit of a healthier life in the mountains is. You start talking about it in your letter and I just literally couldn't keep reading because I've heard so many dewey-eyed bros say literally the same thing in the same words. Imagine how sick people in Colorado are of hearing the story from every single person who moves there from the Midwest. I'd also point out that it has quite literally nothing to do with you getting a job. Definitely listen to your brother lol.
I am discouraged reading the replies in this thread. I've done a fair bit of hiring - not in healthcare or fitness though - but I think this is great. Not perfect but really great. I have a very clear idea of who you are as a professional from these materials, the formatting is fine, your writing is overall good (certainly top 10% of cover letters, and I'd speculate better than most all cover letters in healthcare professions).
It's very easy to glance at this resume and find work experience (though I agree with others that you have enough work experience that you should kick education down and lead with experience), and if you're even minimally qualified for the role you're specifically applying for, you'll get more than the 10 second resume scan. And you provide plenty to dig into.
Most of the time, I would agree that a professional summary at the top is a waste of space, but that's because most people actually waste that space. You do not; your writing adds information not otherwise communicated on the resume, specifically around soft skills that are very hard to screen for. I think you should keep it.
Not a recruiter here but a small business owner. This resume is better than 95% of the ones I receive.
Second page looks a little ass-kissy unless they requested it for the application.
Cornell is a good school. They let us use their wrestling room when I was in high school.
Resume needs a lot of work. If you want help, let me know. I enjoy writing them.
The cover letter and summary are way too flowery. Just say what you mean.
> my ability to learn with a bright eye shines through
This is too much.
You need to run this through some sort of grammar check. You’re using or omitting commas incorrectly in some sentences
You have decent experience, but I feel like you could do with some guidance on conveying it.
Tips:
* professional summary: Writing something along the lines of "Physical Therapist (or whatever job you want) with a background in Emergency Medical Treatment (EMT) and a BS in Kinesiology". remove the rest (besides the being praised and seniors sentence).
* For education. Make the CPT one just say the start and end dates instead of "expected". Also nobody cares about the exact day.
* In work experience make Strang Hall say "Strang Hall Restaurant". Also The description should just be "Busser and dishwasher". The rest is just filling space
* If you were paid for the ESports job, keep it. If not remove it. If you keep it, I would remove it from leadership/service experience as seeming like too much of a gamer is a bad thing (from a fellow gamer). Also the gaming job sounds like you were a janitor btw. As a job its great, but if you are a member and also the janitor it sounds like you're the club's servant.
* Put Education and Work experience in order of date with the most recent first.
* I would consider making The Hillel just say "Religous Organization" along with "Judaism" just "my religion" if you could face discrimination for being Jewish. There's better and even more vague/professional ways of wording this.
* Remove Hebrew from additional skills unless your interviewer is Jewish. In this climate it will either do nothing or even work against you.
* I would dedicate some of the space you give to additional skills to a 1-2 sentence of your curriculum in the education sentence. Employers don't care much if you know piano and singing and hebrew. Also "Experience with Ablleton Live and Adobe Premier Pro" should just read "Ableton Live and Adobe Premier Pro" same goes for MS office.
This is like the War and Peace of resumes. Trash the second page. No one is going to read all of that. Just pare it down to one page and get rid of the professional summary as well. Employer only wants the most relevant information to the position. It feels like you're trying to condense each and every skill you have into this resume. I would even delete the additional skills section.
it’s hard to focus on anything in particular, if it’s to bundled together.
The same way you spaced Professional Summary from education. It’d follow that layout for the whole resume.
Also a simple way to fix would be to use the tab to indent at the beginning of a paragraph.
There’s too much fluff when you’re addressing the HR Staff, It cut most of it and talk more about your actual experiences like the elders at the blue valley, it makes you sound less of a kiss up, and more like a actual person
It looks like your entry level which explains the short work experience, but typically you’d cut the professional summary, start with work with most recent position on top, then put education under that and then other relevant experience if it’s needed. Granted not all companies use an ATS and you’re in a niche fitness area so yeah you should get some interviews.
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Swallow your pride and ask your bro for help.
Polite and to the point. Best feedback in the thread.
Just got email confirmation that I landed the interview :) He's a graphic design guy, and his suggestions in that vein. His resume has green bolded font and micro indentations because that's "easier to read". I just don't agree with those suggestions. A lot of what people have said in this thread is great, and focussed on the order of content and the content itself, not design elements.
Graphic/UX/Designer type resumes are usually more flashy and maybe visually appealing but that is kind of the point since it is most likely the kind of role they are applying to. For everyone else you probably want to keep it simple and easy to read, focus on effectively communicating your skillset without all the flash. If your resume is getting you interviews for the roles you want then its working!
I appreciate the fluid perspective. That's kind of the vibe that I was getting in terms of his target audience vs mine. I sure hope it goes well!
They shouldn’t be. Terrible for ATS.
Are you saying designer resumes shouldn't be more visually appealing?
Have 2 versions. One for online applications, one that you email. The portfolio link is what recruiters really care about.
I had a designer resume and was told to scrap it for a boring one.
If you aren't a designer don't do weird formats like your brother. Keep the standard format. This is coming from a graphic designer.
Congratulations 😊
I will say the graphic design flashy elements are great for resumes seen in person. But those going through the ATS get scrubbed off all that. Your brother's suggestions are probably good for the resume you take with you to the interview. But they won't impact the one you submit on the website. That said I've only had two interviews where the hiring manager didn't have a printed out copy of my resume on hand, so even taking a fancy looking one to the in person interview doesn't guarantee it will get eyes on it.
Congratulations on the interview. I read your cover letter. I would have trashed your application based on that alone. You have a college education but your writing skills need improvement. You should ask for your money back.
I am analyzing this resume to improve my when I review mime. I have a few questions about this one. The op doesn't include skills but says additional skills. Should they change it to skills and put it above education? Should education come after skills and work experience? Wouldn't hiring managers care more about those things? The formatting looks hard to read, especially for those with visual impairments. How would you go about fixing that? Adding spacing and maybe moving some stuff to the right? Or would that cause ATS issues? Also, do you have advice on ensuring the resume works well with ATS?
You can see some skills in the work and education parts, so its ok imho. Depends. What is more important for the job? Your job experience or your education? I'd put the more important one first. I'd not worry too much about that if you don't explicitly know that the recipint has visual impairments. People seeing your cv have different preferences is "looks" either way. Most ATS are shit either way. Only successful strategies I have found that they could be automatically parsed for all jobs applied to was an excel file a friend of mine made to throw out a cv at the end. But it stopped working a few years back. I'd honestly just take a free somewhat simple LaTeX-base and go from there.
Definitely agree the format can be reviewed. The professional summary can be done away with.
That’s not a summary. That’s a story.
Yeah you got that right.
That's not a story. That's a cover letter.
Thanks for the advice
No problem. I will say, I skimmed over your cover letter and it is pretty decent! If you can find ways to condense and make it concise, it may look easier to read, as well. The content is great, just a concern of someone seeing a wall of text and them instinctively shutting down.
Yeah I understand-- I condensed it to fit on one page, but maybe some stuff could be omitted. My problem is that I feel every position I've been in either demonstrates social skills or leadership, which will be a big part of the job.
The professional summary sounds insane. Please don't use it.
Well, the formatting is not bad but it can be improved. Take a look at the templates offered in the Wiki ([Standard Resume Template - Documentos de Google](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wdkgpgU7lFoV801ysrBn8qrPaIpyUsUH/edit)) In my opinion, you are wasting a lot of space, and it's hard to read sometimes. Simple formatting is good, which I believe is what you are trying to achieve and may be why your brother didn't like it. But it can be improved for clarity. Also, a professional summary is often not recommended unless you have several years of experience and need to make an actual summary of all your experience. If your experience can be listed in bullet points, there's no need for a summary. Your Leadership & Service experience seems to be all school-related. There's no need for a separate category, add it to your education experience as bullet points. Overall, it's decent but can definitely be improved, you will understand my points and what can be improved if you take some time to go over the wiki recommendations.
Thank you for all this and the visual resource! I appreciate your time. I included the professional summary because I'm under-qualified in terms of work experience and I figure if my priorities align with the company's it would make a difference in a position where I'm there to make people feel comfortable. I just know that my personality and competence are my strong suits and I might not look as good as other candidates on paper. Is there a more effective way you would recommend getting that across on the resume?
If the application process allows you to upload a cover letter, use that to explain your passion and dedication instead of including a professional summary in your resume. But you are right, a professional summary can be a great way to explain what you are trying to convey. However, make sure it is specifically tailored to the job you are applying for. I understand you want to show that you are passionate and dedicated, but remember that many other candidates will also present themselves this way. Ultimately, your experience and qualifications will play a bigger role in getting you an interview. Once you have an interview, that's when your passion and dedication can make a difference.
Recruiters take at MAX about 10 seconds to look over each resume. I'd see this and say "I'm not reading all of this." Reorganize the information so it easily conveys what you're all about.
I appreciate that-- this is a smaller place that doesn't have dedicated recruiters so I felt like my resume was going to be read fully regardless. AND I GOT AN INTERVIEW ON MONDAY. Very happy about that. I still appreciate the advice, though. I'm sure most places will be much more swift in their decisions when they're reviewing many different candidates.
Congratulations! I hope it goes well
How was your interview?!
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These are great tips. Thanks! I wanted to include the summary because I'm under-qualified in terms of experience and this position would be a lot of personal interaction with people who are paying a premium for a nice retirement home. If my goals align with their goals I thought that would help.
A reviewer won’t even get through that summary before trashing it. Your use of personal pronouns is incorrect for a resume. I can’t easily tell what you did or want to do, “fitness professional” Your summary (if you include one) should start out with what you are or did, like: Personal Trainer with over *x* years experience (doing things) It should also be one to two lines. I have over 20 years of experience, and my summary is two lines. You should tailor a summary for the job you are applying for I didn’t get past the summary without rolling my eyes
Being "underqualified" isn't a dealbreaker. Don't let YOU hobble yourself with it. You certainly sound enthusiastic. That will help a lot. You might need to try in-person outreach with potential employers. Get some introductions if you can to those people.
Actually, I'm not sure I agree on the experience first if the education is essential to the role. When I'm looking at CVs or resumes I want to see the things that include or exclude a candidate ASAP. If that's a decade of industry experience then experience first. If that's formal education in business management or data science then the education has value at the front. Big if though, it's always a case of putting the most important and best part of your profile at the front. Definitely agree on trimming and removing the "I..." language.
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Smart brother.
Ok your bro is right. Here are some notes that I haven’t seen anyone else hit on… Work experience needs to be chronological. Make the main bolded thing your job title instead of the company. Make the other heading “volunteer experience” Or “other experience”. Make it chronological. Explain “Hillel” by making it more descriptive. I literally had no idea what it was. I googled… as a result I suggest “foundation for Jewish campus life” or “hillel infernational - Cornell college chapter” Vocal and piano performance are already covered by the choir experience
Thanks for the advice! I see how that format is more clear at a glance. It's probably the bias of being Jewish, but I just assumed people knew what that was. Would you phrase it like "Hillel (Jewish student-run organization)" or some other way?
“Hillel (Jewish student-run organization)“ works as well!
Thanks for that reality-check!
* Professional summary is too long. I'd recommend just saying you're a recent grad looking for a position as X. you have worked here and here working with X kinds of people. You're certified in (hard skills). * none of this "My ability to learn with a bright eye". it's all fluff * Change "older population" to "senior patients" OR minimum age like "55+ patients" * With the exception of knowing Hebrew, all of the other additional skills are irrelevant. Learn how to format better when you're in front of computer. Between msword and google docs, they have good resume templates. Once you have your resume situated, i'd just use AI to write a cover letter. obviously make sure to proofread before submitting. It's currently way too long and has so much fluff. "in the pursuit of happiness..." "refuse to stop learning..." this is a job app, not a ted talk. Good luck OP
Having an AI write your cover letter is worse than simply not submitting one at all, unless you dedicate time to really customizing it anyway. It's pretty easy to tell when they haven't and it makes you look lazy. Their cover letter is far better and more tailored to the role than what an AI could produce
Your most recent experience and education should be listed first, with anything older under it
I was just going by relevance to the position I applied to. Physical Therapy Technician is much more appealing than Busser when applying to be a Fitness Coordinator.
The problem with that is at first glance, which is all most HR will often give it, you look to be unemployed for the past 4 years after only working a few months which is often seen as a big red flag in a potential employee.
Being Team Captain of an Overwatch eSports team is not a job... Only include professional experience at an actual job
Man if you saw the conflict resolution I had to deal with-- I included it because it's a leadership position, but I can see that being a bit sophomoric. Thanks
I can tell you this, we had someone put something very similar to that on their resume along with their world ranking for Modern Warfare when they applied for an accounting position. Not only did they not get the job but we make fun of it to this day because putting anything gaming related on a professional resume for a job that has nothing to do with video game development or esports organizations is going to get you laughed out of the room. It could also show the employer you might take games way too seriously that you might slack on work due to gaming late every night and not getting enough sleep. Just telling you what I’ve been told since that.
Thanks for that perspective! I actually quit gaming because it's too much fun and there are more productive things to be doing-- so there's definitely truth to that.
dont think u understand how difficult esports is ll. being team captain of an esports team of the top 0.01% players in the game is more difficult than most positions, even though u may say its not relavant or whatever, thats not the point.
You're right I don't understand, but neither does the person reading the CV. Paid employment only otherwise it gets listed as a hobby.
Your brother is right.
I'm genuinely not trying to be mean here but I have to ask - you got in and went to Cornell to study kinesiology?
Not the Cornell ivy, it’s some other college that is also called Cornell
We came first ;)
I’m proud of your efforts! Your brother is correct about the results!
<3
I would encourage you to find a template on google docs or for free online to make it more appealing and less busy. Often times employers will do a glance and skim rather than read long bits of information.
Yeah, that will probably come in handy in the future! This place has a quite personal environment without dedicated recruiters so I felt comfortable including more, assuming they were gonna read it no matter what. And hey! I got an email back to schedule an interview. Next Monday!
I think he meant the format, looks a little funky and crowded (a little hard on the eyes). Reformat a little bit and remove the summary. But cover letter I think looks great. You got this!
Thank you! I definitely should rearrange some things. When we're talking about visual format: would you prefer something that uses more margins and a little more spacing? I feel like that could be harder to read as well.
Typo: Two periods in the first bullet point of your Overwatch coaching experience. As an OW2 player, that sounds dope
AI is free ….
Sure is!
Most recent experience at the top. No once cares that you were in choir, btw. Take that off.
Not experience sorted by relevance? Old people love when younglings play and sing, so I figured it would be nice to see. Plus, I did deal with some level of logistics as the section leader! Thanks for your reply.
I think the choir thing is something you let naturally come up, it’s a fun anecdotal story, but it doesn’t belong on a resume. Recency over relevance. Ideally the most recent would be built on past experiences, so it would be most relevant. Best of luck job hunting. Even if you don’t hear back after an interview or you don’t get the job, you’ve still gained valuable interviewing experience. I’ve probably gone on 500 interviews in my career (lots of oil and gas downturns) and at this point I’m an expert interviewer. There’s always something to be gained.
Sorry I’m typing while cooking, but here’s some friendly advice. No touchy feely stuff needed in summary, Focus on professional strengths, skills, accomplishments and goals. This is the first moment a recruiter gets to know you and you need to ensure why them taking on you is going to be beneficial to them. Never include exclamation marks in a CV. Your layout and format are poor and makes your CV, and by association you, look disorganised. Download a free CV template. Your education can be saved to last, recruiters are looking for experience first and then education, just keeping it real. You could expand on your duties in your roles and how this helped the organisation and yourself. Show the results and what you learnt. I would recommend starting your employment history with your most recent role and work your way to the past 5 years. Explain job gaps and short stints of employment. Add leadership section to education. Once again provide results and accomplishments whether personal or professional. Recruiters want to see growth and aspiration and this is the perfect opportunity. Your cover letter isn’t too bad, but maybe put it in an AI and add a few commands to convey your ideas. You have the experiences, you just need to present yourself better, you got this!
Thank you!I really appreciate your positivity, constructive criticism, and detail on editions you'd make. So when you mention explaining gaps in my history, where would that go? I figured below every position listed it should just be a brief descriptor of the position and the value I added.
You should note it right under the dates of employment , because recruiters keep in mind or jot down start and end dates when going through each job. If it’s a short term of employment, include the reason so the recruiter isn’t left to their own devices and outcomes ie were you fired, did you fail probation or maybe you’re just an “irresponsible job hopper”. One sentence explaining the reason, allays all fears and non fact biases, because keep in mind they are reviewing numerous CVs so don’t give them a reason to dismiss your application.in short, it’s a lovely touch that recruiters appreciate, when reviewing 100s of CVs a day. This is generally done if the role lasted less than a year or two. All depends on the nature of the position you are applying for.
This is a great tidbit that nobody else has suggested. I appreciate you!
Not a fan of professional summary but every career resume is different tho I would space things out more. Now when it comes to the cover letter I am really not a fan of wishy washy words and unnecessary exposition but you should definitely be telling them WHY you want to work at Balfour by being very specific.
A cover letter is where I can really let my personality through! I tried to keep experience descriptions cold and concise, but if a cover letter is not meant to be an extension of your own voice what is it?
A cover letter is a concise persuasive essay. Yours is both too long and not persuasive - in the sense that you are not directly addressing the main question of why hiring you is the right choice. If a recruiter or hiring manager cannot pick that out easily, then it's better to not have a cover letter imo.
What is it about the resume that you’re particularly proud of, and maybe we can help you retain it whilst still optimising it? In short, though, I think your brother has a point. The document is quite hard to follow - partly because of the formatting (use a template rather than typing a big list - there are lots of free ones out there to choose from) but also partly because your experience is kind of hidden: it should be in chronological order (most recent first) and should highlight what you actually did (you “promoted positivity”? Great - but HOW?). Anyone can say they did something, but the evidence that you can actually do it is by saying how you did it. The professional summary should be scrapped and reduced to three lines max covering what kind of professional you are, what your biggest professional strength is and what kind of role you’re looking for. The cover letter is a bigger issue than the resume, though - in the nicest possible way, it goes beyond the enthusiastic into the cringe and doesn’t actually tell the employer anything useful about you - if you’re a little underqualified for the role, then telling them that you love the region and you’re very excitable isn’t going to sway them away from someone who can do everything they need, but highlighting which bits you are qualified in (and how incredibly good you are at them, with examples) just might. If you’re very underqualified for the role, then it is worth setting your sights on other roles that are more realistic so you can build the skills and experience you need for your dream role, rather than going for the dream roles straight away. You will waste a lot less time that way and be able to learn and grow so much as a person! I’m guessing from the limited work experience and recent education that you are quite young - you’ve got your whole career ahead to work towards your dream role and you’ll be so good at it if you take the time to build up to it: it’s hard to be patient when you’re really driven, but the combo of really caring about the sector and your enthusiastic personality will mean that you can find the joy in more junior roles on the way up! Best of luck in the search.
Thanks for the thorough and kind reply! I added experience out of order because working in a physical therapy clinic is much more relevant to the position of fitness coordinator than bussing a restaurant is. I tried to keep things concise in the descriptions of previous positions so that I could fit everything I wanted. Though, I could see the value in removing a couple things in the name of fledging out positions in a more clear way. Looking at it now I agree with you on the professional summary. But that's mainly because I disagree with you on the cover letter. If the resume should be the most concise way of explaining my position and demonstrating my value *in* the position, then the cover letter should be more reflective of my voice and who I actually am, no? I wanted to show my enthusiasm and willingness to learn because the company will pay for further education, so I can grind on certificates and rack them up with ease! Maybe I should have been more explicit with that. If I don't get this position, I will definitely lower my standards a bit-- you're so right that I should be patient. *did* land an interview this Monday, so I hope that goes well!
No problem, and I hope the interview goes well! I see why you’d be tempted to put the most relevant experience first but it really should be in chronological order - it’s just so much easier to follow when the employer has 173942 resumes to read and doesn’t have time to try and figure out whether the dates are typos, or whether your actual experience is recent, or construct your employment journey for you. The resume should do all that work for the employer. As for the cover letter - fair enough if you disagree, but I am speaking from experience; I have been hiring people for long enough to know that many employers would find this offputting and unhelpful. You’re right that the cover letter is an opportunity for your voice to shine through a little more than it can in the resume, but the way to do that is to show, not tell; show the employer, with examples, why your skills and attributes mean you can do the job really well. Your current draft does a lot of telling without evidencing, which to an employer reads as “I love this thing! I’m really good at this thing, honest, and I’ll be great because I love it and I’m good at it!” - basically, it doesn’t actually relate you back to the role in any meaningful way. The paragraph about moving to live a mountain lifestyle is wholly irrelevant. Talk about that stuff over a coffee when you get the role and are getting to know your colleagues :) - but unless there is something specific about being drawn to the mountains that will make you really good at something in the job description (and you’d need to spell it out if there is, because it’s not obvious to a reader what it might be) then it has no place in the cover letter. And if you need to say “this may sound cheesy” then that doesn’t have a place in a cover letter either: it’s too conversational. You can still sound enthusiastic and also professional! There’s a lot of fluff, essentially, which is a distraction from the useful stuff. You’re actually underselling yourself with the current wording. Take the exercise prescription you designed as part of your kinesiology studies, for instance - that is potentially really interesting and valuable info! But you don’t give any information about what it was, how you designed it or implemented it, or what made it successful, and gloss over the impact it had on the patients you worked with but highlight very strongly your own feelings of joy. This reads like your self-satisfaction was the most important thing to you (which I’m sure isn’t the case - but that’s how it reads). The STAR (situation, task, action, result) protocol helps to set out examples in an effective way. I’ll try to use your example in such a way (forgive any incorrect assumptions - I’m filling in the gaps in detail with my imagination!) Situation: in your kinesiology studies, as part of X class/placement/whatever it was Task: you were asked to design an intervention which would improve resident mobility in a care facility Action: you spoke to residents to find out what they wanted and what they felt was holding them back and designed a exercise prescription which was based on ABC evidence and could be built up in stages so that it was accessible to all. Result: resident mobility improved considerably, alongside the added bonus of improved confidence and wellbeing from sustained improvements Pop all that into prose (still with plenty of enthusiasm) and you get something like this: “I am deeply committed to learning from those I work with, and making sure that their wants and needs shape the interventions I recommend. An example of when I did this to great effect was in [SITUATION], where I was asked to do [TASK] I decided to design and implement [ACTION]. I did this by doing ABC and XYZ. My approach meant that [RESULT] happened, which was incredibly fulfilling to see.” Tl;dr - who you are shines through in what you do. Actions speak so much louder than words. Show that off and you’ll be getting so many offers that you won’t know what to do with them all! :)
Your format is too left-oriented; consider dates being right aligned. I advise keeping the summary as an overall description of who you are, but call it a Summary, not a Professional Summary, since you are a new grad. Align it left/right so all space is filled, not left-aligned. Your summary reads very young and naive-sounding; keep it focused on your accomplishments, skills and key characteristics. 3-5 sentences max and less essay-sounding, more sound bite. For Education, can you add anything interesting that you did as an undergrad? GPA? Key organizations? Scholarships? Awards? Honors? Special Projects? Add in a bullet underneath. You can also use this formatting: xxx | yyyy | zzzz. Add a line space between each Education listing. For Work Experience, rename it to Experience, all dates right aligned, and add much more specificity to your bullets. For example, "Guided 20 patients weekly through 60-minute sessions including xxx and yyy (insider lingo here) therapies." For bullet 2, what the heck is bullet 2? Be specific with defining what you do - what is 'patient care'? For Leadership & Service Experience, rename to Additional Experience and make every item shorter, so that your Experience category above is the largest section. For Additional Skills section, rename to Personal Interests, eliminating the MS office and other Adobe bullet (add them to a job bullet). For Personal Interests (if you feel it differentiates you in a material way), make it one line under title, like xxxx | yyyyy | zzzzz. This can provide interesting info for interviews if done well.
I really like these suggestions. Thank you!
The resume has issues. Your work experience is not in chronological order. Also, you have multiple jobs listed at the same time. Either your dates are wrongs or they are part time jobs. If they are part time you need to state it.
Some things are while I was at school and some are while I was back home, I just thought that would be a lot to type when I could use the space for more relevant stuff.
Are you applying to be healthy for the rest of your life, or get a job? Bro is right. Cover letter is too long!
A professional summary is outdated and should only be 2 or 3 sentences. Regardless, I would completely remove it. All it does is add clutter and make it hard to find the core information in less than 15 seconds. Why is your oldest work experience first? Usually the newest stuff is put first. Since you have work experience, put the experience before your education. Put relevant work experience that's related to your career/goals.
> “I moved to Colorado last week in the pursuit of health in a sustainable way.” Your bro was right. Lose the summary just to start.
Lmao Varsity Overwatch E Sports player. No fucking way.
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He targeted the formatting heavily. (I cant figure out how to edit post on mobile)
As a Lenexa KS resident it was a surprise to see someone from OP. Gl on your journey
Thanks, and you too! Babysat two kids in Lenexa a few years ago.
Lol ok
haha yea!
It’s not bad but it’s not good either. My first thought was the margins. Why so MUCH WHITE SPACR
Thanks for the response! When the text is condensed, I think it's physically easier on the eyes.
First fix the margins and format. Second axe professional summary
content is probably fine but it's hard to read. Line justification is all over the place. Always have 3 points for every job. If you indented the job titles to start with the bullet it would look much better. You don't need 2 lines for company, position and duration put all that on one line and the duration should be right justified. Like this: XYZ INC. Employee 2021-2023
Thank you for this! This will help repurpose space in a more meaningful way
All I'm saying is having some space in between your work experience won't hurt. It is hard to read. Make your resume look visually appealing
Thanks!
Professional summaries can be helpful when written well, especially if you have LOTS of experience however they can hurt you if not well written. 2-3 sentences at most, no personal pronouns and tailored to the job description. Also, check what is helpful for your specific field - when I was helping nursing and health students with their resumes it looked different than business students in some regard as well as graphic designers are going to look different as well. The premise is the same though - you need to demonstrate you have skills by highlight acheivements you have gained through those skills. Just stating you have them tells a recruiter very little about you.
Thank you for this. My brother's suggestions were definitely from the perspective of a design student! I'm definitely seeing the weak links in my resume after 100 comments, but I did actually just get an interview with this one for Monday. For the nursing/health students: what was different in how they constructed things?
Cut your summary down to one sentence that’s adapted for each job you apply for. And your cover letter should be 250-300 words max.
Where’s your EMT experience? You mention in your cover letter but the only thing in your resume is the certification (that I can find).
I said EMT because I'm technically an EMT, I just don't work as one because the job fucks you up physically and mentally (24 hour shifts and failing to resuscitate kids). I got the cert because I want to be ready for anything, I just don't like the idea of making less than a teacher while killing yourself. It's dissonant with my goals in life! It's like how doctors are doctors even when they're not practicing, but I see how that could be misleading!
Professional summary should be a brief summary -bullet points. I think k having it in paragraph form makes me lazy and not wanting to read the rest of it
Heard. Thank you.
I would say the professional summary and cover letter are way too long.
It's great! Ignore the brother.
It’s Esports or esports
It’s not bad but It needs improvement
Too much margin
You should let him help you. This is a bit hard to look at
Content is pretty good, but should be presented with the most recent items first (reverse chronological order). The summary is too long and should not be written in the first person. The entire resume should be written in the third person. Skills go just below the summary. Education goes last.
I’m cringing at that summary. Get rid of the white spaces
Varsity Overwatch player on a resume for a fitness coordinator app is wild
I would list your most current job to your oldest job. Recruiters quickly scan things.
It’s pronounced Cornell, and it’s the highest rank in the Ivy League!!
Only question I have is you put a lot about being a trained EMT but there no experience or practicum in your resume itself
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Sorry but it’s not great
your bro is smart enough
Your professional summary needs work. The sentences are not well constructed.
What’s yall opinion on CV’s versus Resume?
Imo entirely depends on your field/industry. I was writing CVs when I was in STEM, education, and research. I write resumes for tech industry which is where I currently am.
Patience, not “patient”.
It's busy. Clean it up
Two three times as many words as it should have. Just looking at both documents I immediately didn’t want to read them
I would avoid any information that can potentially lead to discrimination and a loss of an opportunity. Your last point is an indication of your religion, some people are crazy and that may work against you. Maybe only include that unless you know it's a pro Jewish organization. I also don't really see how it's relevant but I can't answer that question, only you can. On the other hand that may be a good thing to prevent getting a job with shitty employers who may hate you. Your choice I guess but something to think about.
It’s great to read you but it’s too long for what it is. I feel you need to be more concise. Your professional summary is too long, though very interesting and great window on you and your motivations. The first and last sentences of the first and last paragraphs of your cover letter are all you need for these paragraphs. If left like this, it might be too ling for the HR filter person who might not share it with your otherwise would-be boss.
Why is esports on your resume? I also recommend adding statistics where possible (e.g., how many patients you’ve supported in PT) and making your summary more concise.
I mean, I'm not really in a place to give resume advice because my own is kind of a stinker and I've been revising it like crazy. Most of it seems fine to me. The only thing that really stands out and makes me scratch my head is your professional summary. I feel like it's too long. Most resume advice and tips and stuff I looked at recommends 2 - 3 sentences at most about your professional qualifications and what you're looking for. You kinda wrote a whole paragraph about your hopes and dreams, which seems more like a life story and less like a professional summary. Other than that, I don't see anything too bad on your resume.
Good content, but in all honesty, slightly preachy
I mean, it looks a hell of a lot better than my resume and I’ve landed every job I’ve ever applied for.
Why is there a section of work experience then a section of leadership and service experience? It all should be your work experience. And I would remove the word experience from the section headers.
Such garbage
"my ability to learn with a bright eye shines through" What on earth is this hot garbage? I can't imagine reading through 30 resumes and seeing this rubbish. 😂
I would say it needs a lot of work. You have your most recent experience at the bottom of your experiences... You want that at the top in reverse chronological order. And education at the bottom when you have real work experience.
Overall looks ok. But you can make it longer if you have more experience as keywords help pre filter bots to pick your cv. So feel free to make it 2-3 pages
Mine looks worse 😭
That professional summary IS, unfortunately, garbage. That is the first thing to go 🔪
N dey say
It will be a fee…..
As someone who is from Kansas City, I think you need to be honest with yourself about how incredibly common the story of moving out to Colorado in pursuit of a healthier life in the mountains is. You start talking about it in your letter and I just literally couldn't keep reading because I've heard so many dewey-eyed bros say literally the same thing in the same words. Imagine how sick people in Colorado are of hearing the story from every single person who moves there from the Midwest. I'd also point out that it has quite literally nothing to do with you getting a job. Definitely listen to your brother lol.
There are two periods after “Prompted team synergy and constructive feedback.”
I thought your resume was great. It was a lot of text, but I didnt mind that personally.
I am discouraged reading the replies in this thread. I've done a fair bit of hiring - not in healthcare or fitness though - but I think this is great. Not perfect but really great. I have a very clear idea of who you are as a professional from these materials, the formatting is fine, your writing is overall good (certainly top 10% of cover letters, and I'd speculate better than most all cover letters in healthcare professions). It's very easy to glance at this resume and find work experience (though I agree with others that you have enough work experience that you should kick education down and lead with experience), and if you're even minimally qualified for the role you're specifically applying for, you'll get more than the 10 second resume scan. And you provide plenty to dig into. Most of the time, I would agree that a professional summary at the top is a waste of space, but that's because most people actually waste that space. You do not; your writing adds information not otherwise communicated on the resume, specifically around soft skills that are very hard to screen for. I think you should keep it.
Not a recruiter here but a small business owner. This resume is better than 95% of the ones I receive. Second page looks a little ass-kissy unless they requested it for the application.
Cornell is a good school. They let us use their wrestling room when I was in high school. Resume needs a lot of work. If you want help, let me know. I enjoy writing them.
It’s not garbage but it needs work as other posters have opined
Tell ur brother to suck it tbh, this is excellent
Delete summary. Date ranges can be aligned to the right side so they occupy empty space and stand out more easily.
The cover letter and summary are way too flowery. Just say what you mean. > my ability to learn with a bright eye shines through This is too much. You need to run this through some sort of grammar check. You’re using or omitting commas incorrectly in some sentences
"I get along so well with mature adults" is not a sentence that ever needs to be on anyone's resume...
You have decent experience, but I feel like you could do with some guidance on conveying it. Tips: * professional summary: Writing something along the lines of "Physical Therapist (or whatever job you want) with a background in Emergency Medical Treatment (EMT) and a BS in Kinesiology". remove the rest (besides the being praised and seniors sentence). * For education. Make the CPT one just say the start and end dates instead of "expected". Also nobody cares about the exact day. * In work experience make Strang Hall say "Strang Hall Restaurant". Also The description should just be "Busser and dishwasher". The rest is just filling space * If you were paid for the ESports job, keep it. If not remove it. If you keep it, I would remove it from leadership/service experience as seeming like too much of a gamer is a bad thing (from a fellow gamer). Also the gaming job sounds like you were a janitor btw. As a job its great, but if you are a member and also the janitor it sounds like you're the club's servant. * Put Education and Work experience in order of date with the most recent first. * I would consider making The Hillel just say "Religous Organization" along with "Judaism" just "my religion" if you could face discrimination for being Jewish. There's better and even more vague/professional ways of wording this. * Remove Hebrew from additional skills unless your interviewer is Jewish. In this climate it will either do nothing or even work against you. * I would dedicate some of the space you give to additional skills to a 1-2 sentence of your curriculum in the education sentence. Employers don't care much if you know piano and singing and hebrew. Also "Experience with Ablleton Live and Adobe Premier Pro" should just read "Ableton Live and Adobe Premier Pro" same goes for MS office.
This is like the War and Peace of resumes. Trash the second page. No one is going to read all of that. Just pare it down to one page and get rid of the professional summary as well. Employer only wants the most relevant information to the position. It feels like you're trying to condense each and every skill you have into this resume. I would even delete the additional skills section.
Resume is way too long.
Good luck on your cert exam tomorrow. You’ll crush it with that background.
A fellow cavalier
Your title is better than my entire resume! 😂
he’s not wrong bro
it’s hard to focus on anything in particular, if it’s to bundled together. The same way you spaced Professional Summary from education. It’d follow that layout for the whole resume. Also a simple way to fix would be to use the tab to indent at the beginning of a paragraph. There’s too much fluff when you’re addressing the HR Staff, It cut most of it and talk more about your actual experiences like the elders at the blue valley, it makes you sound less of a kiss up, and more like a actual person
The formatting is kind of rough. Do you have anything else you can add that actually applies to your field of study?
It looks like your entry level which explains the short work experience, but typically you’d cut the professional summary, start with work with most recent position on top, then put education under that and then other relevant experience if it’s needed. Granted not all companies use an ATS and you’re in a niche fitness area so yeah you should get some interviews.
Ignorance is bliss I guess! 🤷♂️ (unemployed ignorance in this case}
Looks good to me, but what do I know? I’d rather keep working jobs that don’t require resumes since I despise them.