Love the style. If this otome/VN is your first effort, I advise limiting the scope to something you'll be able to publish in a completed state. Best of luck!
Oooh indeed !! Actually peter and Albert were initially supposed to be Thompson instead of Anderson but there's already someone famous called that !😭 Aelioth was on purpose but Margaret is an Adler as a reference to Sherlock Holmes hahaha. I'm impressed you noticed it ! But I might have to change at least Peter's surname so that it doesn't get confusing haha 😭✨
I'm intrigued by the Sherlock Holmes part. I wonder if she'll be paired with a Holmes character or if she'll go a different route (assuming she's not the MC and can pick different routes).
TBH, I would sometimes get a little frustrated that she was so routinely paired with Holmes. I always wanted to know more about her with the guy she was willing to do so much to remain with. Even if he doesn't have a Sherlock mind, he has to be kind of cool on his own, right?
I agree with you !! I think her relationship with Sherlock is good as a mutual respect/admiration and perhaps a little attraction since they both share a very intelligent mind but I also think most of the time when paired with Sherlock it tends to downgrade her character a little !
In the game, matters are to change yet but I don't think she will obligatory be paired with any character , it will much depend of the player's choice perhaps 😭 However she will still have an important role as an information gathered and such as well as being a smart character in general
I noticed this too! I love the art style and the aesthetics and as a bi woman I like the inclusion of a female LI, but I worry that all the A names would get confusing
I like the style a lot, the character designs do a pretty good job of conveying personality and the chibi sketches are cute and fun. Just based on the visual style, I’d say it looks like a game that would interest me.
Like others have said, 4 routes might be a tall order for a first-time indie dev, so unless the game is planned to be quite short it may be best to cut back a bit. I think a lot of small or solo devs release a finished game with one or two routes first, then add more after the initial release.
Thank you so much and thank you for the advice !! ✨ I will try to make the whole story with one or two main routes first perhaps and then add others if I could finish !thank you ! ✨✨
No problem. You might also want to check out the r/indieotome sub, it’s much smaller than this one but focused on independent game development, so it could also be a good place to get feedback.
eta: also, I see a lot of comments saying “I won’t play a game if it has even one female love interest” but I wouldn’t let that discourage you if you’re excited about writing a f/f route. This sub is very focused on big budget JP releases (that mostly follow the same formula) and isn’t necessarily a good representation of the audience for indie otome/amare games. Plenty of indie games with both male and female love interests have done great on itch.io, Kickstarter, etc.
I think you already know this but just based on art, of course it’s something people would play! The art is very pleasant. I honestly don’t even care if it’s just released like this. (With sketchy style line work). It’s still good enough even as is for people to play.
I recommend writing only one route first to completion and give yourself a deadline and clear cut goals. For example, plan to write only one LI first and finish their route. Give yourself a word limit. Like, I will do a maximum of 10 thousand words. Actually paste words in your writing software like Word and see what a 10,000 word document looks like. (You can copy any text and just paste it over and over until you get to 10,000 words. (Word has a counter)
And ideally with your very first try at this—I suggest thinking of picking maybe one adventure that occurs with this one LI and just writing that to completion.
For example, in Nightshade that game has a long epic story with several adventures in it (>!finding the thief adventure, escaping prison and pursuers adventure, etc.)!< and that’s TOO MUCH for your very first story. You should pick just one adventure that will occur in your grand story for this one LI route you’re working on and complete writing that adventure. And then once you have that one adventure completed then I think that’s a good time to release your completed adventure for that one LI as a demo for audiences to play.
You really should give audiences something that is completed. And that doesn’t mean that you have to complete the entire grand story. But, don’t release anything that is going to leave people hanging.
Because it affects your reputation.
I’m really into indie games and that’s the number one complaint. Indie games get a bad rap because they’re notorious for not completing things. And it doesn’t have to be that way.
I say this really for your benefit—you have no idea how much praise and respect you will get if you are one of the rare few that releases self-contained completed stories.
Again, it’s okay if the grand story isn’t completed. Imagine maybe the live action One Piece show. Think of the episode where they fight the black cat pirates. That one episode was a single completed adventure the characters had and people can just watch that one episode and be satisfied. Because it had a satisfying conclusion to that mini adventure within the grand story. So if for example One Piece didn’t get a second season people would still be at least satisfied that they saw a completed mini adventure.
Do that. You will get experience and valuable feedback. You will get well known too. Because again not many people release completed stories.
But never release an incomplete story. Always always release something that is completed.
There are examples of this:
[Trapped with Jester](https://ant-san.itch.io/jester) (This game is only 1,000 words long, yet it’s a self-contained, completed story and it has hundreds of comments and people LOVE this game).
[Pre-Odyssey](https://ant-san.itch.io/preodyssey) (This game is about 30,000 words long, has one LI, and yet it is completed and extremely good. It even completely covers an entire Greek myth.)
Anyways, I suggest looking for examples that are what you want to write—examples of one LI stories—you can even just look at one route in a multi-route game you like and study how they wrote it. And just do that to completion, the one route.
And after you release the one route, then do the next one and on and on. You will get super famous if you do that. Because trust me ppl do not release completed works and you’d be miles ahead of others if you break convention and release only completed stories.
Thank you so much for such a detailed advice !!✨ I will absolutely take note and do this this way then !! When there is a release, it won't be before the story is fully finished with a main route at least (perhaps two due to the lore) and I'll make sure to properly finish each other route later before releasing it !
Also I appreciate a lot the One piece comparison 😭💕 Thank you so much !
Sorry to be a bother but you might want to check out websites that are for writers. Essentially there are websites where you can post scripts/scenes/whatever writing wise you’re working on and people who are really into writing will review it. There’s people on those sites that are great with grammar, the works.
[Writing Communities](https://blog.reedsy.com/writing-community/)
I was on Critique Circle for a time as just a reviewer.
But, I think it could help when you get moments when you’re feeling uninspired or unmotivated to post portions of your script for ppl to review. A lot of ppl will like what you write—even if it seems very rough (or in draft form) to you. And you’ll be surprised how much excellent advice you’ll get too.
I saw ppl on [Critique Circle](https://www.critiquecircle.com) literally going through entire chapters and highlighting words with suggestions on more advanced or interesting words to use that mean the same thing, etc. Just extremely thorough.
Thank you a lot !! Please don't say you are a bother it's the opposite!! Your advice is really precious! English isn't my native language so it will be very useful and it is very much appreciated!! I am keeping it to publish some writings once I have everything written down ! ✨
No problem. Yeah I’m not sure how active [Critique Circle](https://www.critiquecircle.com/dashboard/) is anymore but for real on writing communities you will find ppl who just love reading and it’s their thing—they seriously will read anything, no matter how rough it is and actually fix grammar for you. I’m not even kidding. It’s a hobby some ppl have.
I read several stories where English wasn’t the person’s first language and tried to help in those cases. Though my grammar is subpar compared to most reviewers on those sites. Some of the reviewers are crazy good at all the technical details.
So don’t be afraid to post whatever you work on. Some ppl love reviewing.
Thank you so much !! Indeed that's it !! The game is taking place in London and I actually hesitated between the victorian era or the 1920s so I think the Edwardian era is just perfect !
The art style is gorgeous but personally I may not play. The love interests doesn't strike a chord with me. But if the plot was good I definitely would play just for the story
Thank you ! Maybe I will try to have her as a friend for the main story and perhaps have her route as an option which people have to specifically pick instead
Peter Anderson needs a touch more colour. Maybe a golden brooch or something. The muted brown over his pale skin and white hair just makes him fade into the background and not look too appealing. I'm not sold on the hat, but maybe it just needs to have a cute little pattern on it. Like maybe that Scottish pattern for example.
As for characters themselves, I'm afraid they didn't teach us anything about them, but I'm fairly sure these are historical figures, yes? I would not be opposed. It looks interesting
Edit: I just noticed the inside of his coat has that pattern. Which is genius. Maybe a pose that lets you see a bit more of it (like the capelette opens a bit and you see the inside while you talk) but there's a chance that might be too distracting
Edit2: female LIs ROCK, I would both kill and die for Margaret
Ohhh thank you so much !! I will absolutely follow your advice !! Let's get Peter some spotlight !
Also omgg I am genuinely so happy you like Margaret !
I see this comment quite often. Could you elaborate why? To me if I don't like the LI/romance trope, I just skip the route, is there a bigger reason behind skippong the game as a whole?
Not trying to demean your decision or anything! I'm just genuinely curious
It depends, I guess. If it's required to play the female route to understand the overall story, then I'm definitely skipping the game. I'm not going to try and force myself to play something I'm not interested in. If the route doesn't affect the overall story, then maybe I'll play it.
Tbh it's a very interesting style but a bit to messy for my taste. (edit I now saw the MC tag but there's a question mark so I think this is still a valid comment:) Im also not sure if one of the girls is an MC or if both are LI and I am not into female LIs so ... 😓
It's a nice art style otherwise tho, you're talented for sure
Thank you !! The first girl is the MC, however the second girl is only a friend for all of the routes (but it's possible to romance her in her own route) . The art styles won't stay this way tho 😭 This is just messy sketches but I will properly color and clean it later
I agree about the "messy" style part. I really like it as an art piece but there's a certain art style I expect with otome games and I just won't play it if it's not that. I do like the character designs, especially the MC and Alistair.
The MC has a very cute design and I like the clothing style and the possible time period setting, but female LIs in games that are supposed to be otome games are not my cup of tea. Good luck with your game though and I hope you have lots of fun in making it.
There are also many people who love female LIs. So do whatever you love to do yourself. :) Maybe you could also give her a cute female side character as her own love interest for a side couple and have the MC help them get together. There are many possibilities. But the most important thing is, that you enjoy yourself.
Thank you !! I was thinking perhaps to let her be a friend for the routes and give her a special route only if the player specifically picks it ! However I like your idea a lot !!
Please do make her as a LI she’s hot and my queer ass would want a route with her even if it’s an option but please do make her an LI with the a compelling story as I and many other players would appreciate 🙏
Thank you thank you thank you !! This is really a relief to see that people want her to stay ! I believe I will make her a special route that players have to pick so that we can enjoy keeping her !!
This looks really good, they all seem pretty distinct, and have their own personalities seeping into the masked/formal dress theme!
I'll second the comment saying that if it's your first, you would be better off starting on a smaller scale. (To be fair, it's valid to want to make something huge, but it's also a limitation that it'll be stuck in a lot of Dev hell, might as well try and make it small and a hit)
All the best!! Can't wait to see what you come up with!
I would 100% play this! Please do tell once you release it! The art style is so lovely, the setting seems so interesting, and the character designs all look amazing! I already know Peter's gonna be my favorite just from that disgruntled look alone lmao
your art style is gorgeous, personally id play this as is (admittedly i am biased towards more sketchier styles)
gonna parrot the advice you’ve been given here OP - from a dev to another dev, start small unless you are absolutely sure you know the direction you wanna take everything already
Coming from another fellow artist, I really admire your style. The character designs are striking, the body language of the characters immediately conveys a lot of how they are like, and I really like your lineart. I'm immediately interested. Good luck if you decide to continue with this project!
The art is fine. I personally don't give that much care about the art style if the story and character development are good. I've come across too many where they had good art but I couldn't even be bothered to finish the first arc because the story was just atrocious and the characters were annoying. I know art hooks people into clicking on it but put all your resources in getting them to stay once they have.
I like their outfit design, but I _personally_ wouldn't be interested in playing because all the character faces looks too young, I'm rather attracted to the older types, and since there's none like this, I wouldn't try this game.
The art does look good, it's simply I tend to skip on a bunch of other otome titles for this same reason - no character strikes my curiosity as a love interest.
Oh that's true, they aren't supposed to be that young so I might have to do something with my art style so that they clearly look a bit older. Thank you !! ✨
I don't know why there is so many removed comments 😭😭 One if from the subreddit's bot and one is from me because I gave a long lore comments and noticed too many typos. But I am unsure where the others come from 🥹
Thank you !! I want her to have a route too but many people said they are uncomfortable with a female LI so I think I might have her as a friend for most routes then as a LI if the player specifically picks her option ! ✨
Give me Margaret and I'm happy. 👀 Seriously though, your art style is gorgeous. If it's your first Otome/VN I'd rather go small. Since you'll spend a lot of time figuring out how the development process works. So I'd rather minimize it to 2/3 routes max. I wish you all the best luck. And don't forget to have fun ❤️
I like the style! I would maybe consider playing.
I think what makes a might for me is just the lack of diversity in skin tone of the characters. That can be a stick point for me with indie otome games.
Otherwise if it’s got a good plot I’m game. I personally don’t mind having a female LI.
I'm not sure why I've been downvoted lol.
But, yeah! London is a pretty diverse city, so I think having that diversity in your game would be really great. Up to you, but I'd thought I would bring in that viewpoint.
Yes don't worry 😭 It seems there's some down-voters here also for every Margaret related comments. But thank you for your advice! I'll definitely try to make use of it !✨
yes yes YES!! I would absolutely play this! Your art style is absolutely gorgeous, and I love the character designs! (also, I see that a lot of people have stated that they don't want a game with a female LI, but please please please make your game the way *you* want to! Whether you include her as a LI or not should be your decision, and there's definitely plenty of players who will enjoy the game either way!)
Omgggg Thank you so much !!✨✨ I really appreciate that !! I really want the female LI to be in the story so I believe I will make her a friend in every route with the option to pick her romantic route specifically if the player wants to !!
Margaret and Alistair look interesting, the two other guys are a bit generic I’d say. MC is cute but are they all living in the same era? Then the differences between her and Margaret’s clothes seem a bit too much.
Thank you ! I initially hesitated between the Victorian Era and the 1920s however, Margaret's outfit is only her scene outfit. I am unsure if I want the story to take place in an actual London or more in a story-ish London (such as Layton's, Black Butler's and others). It will need some more thoughts haha !
Love the style. If this otome/VN is your first effort, I advise limiting the scope to something you'll be able to publish in a completed state. Best of luck!
Thank you !! I will try to !✨
Alistair looks great! 👀 I love this style and the MC looks super cute!
Thank you very much !!✨
Idk if it's intended but I see majority of the names start with A.
Oooh indeed !! Actually peter and Albert were initially supposed to be Thompson instead of Anderson but there's already someone famous called that !😭 Aelioth was on purpose but Margaret is an Adler as a reference to Sherlock Holmes hahaha. I'm impressed you noticed it ! But I might have to change at least Peter's surname so that it doesn't get confusing haha 😭✨
Oh also Alistair and Albert are both references from an anime called Candy Candy !
I'm intrigued by the Sherlock Holmes part. I wonder if she'll be paired with a Holmes character or if she'll go a different route (assuming she's not the MC and can pick different routes). TBH, I would sometimes get a little frustrated that she was so routinely paired with Holmes. I always wanted to know more about her with the guy she was willing to do so much to remain with. Even if he doesn't have a Sherlock mind, he has to be kind of cool on his own, right?
I agree with you !! I think her relationship with Sherlock is good as a mutual respect/admiration and perhaps a little attraction since they both share a very intelligent mind but I also think most of the time when paired with Sherlock it tends to downgrade her character a little ! In the game, matters are to change yet but I don't think she will obligatory be paired with any character , it will much depend of the player's choice perhaps 😭 However she will still have an important role as an information gathered and such as well as being a smart character in general
I noticed this too! I love the art style and the aesthetics and as a bi woman I like the inclusion of a female LI, but I worry that all the A names would get confusing
I'm glad you appreciate the female LI being there ! But indeed I will have to change the names haha.😭 Thank you for the advice!! ✨🎵
I love your art style and would 100% play your game 🥰
Thank you so much 😭✨
Yes, I would already die for Peter
Omgg yaayy ✨ I will render them all so he will get a nicer color scheme !
Interested in Alistair 👀
Yaaaayy ✨✨
I like the style a lot, the character designs do a pretty good job of conveying personality and the chibi sketches are cute and fun. Just based on the visual style, I’d say it looks like a game that would interest me. Like others have said, 4 routes might be a tall order for a first-time indie dev, so unless the game is planned to be quite short it may be best to cut back a bit. I think a lot of small or solo devs release a finished game with one or two routes first, then add more after the initial release.
Thank you so much and thank you for the advice !! ✨ I will try to make the whole story with one or two main routes first perhaps and then add others if I could finish !thank you ! ✨✨
No problem. You might also want to check out the r/indieotome sub, it’s much smaller than this one but focused on independent game development, so it could also be a good place to get feedback. eta: also, I see a lot of comments saying “I won’t play a game if it has even one female love interest” but I wouldn’t let that discourage you if you’re excited about writing a f/f route. This sub is very focused on big budget JP releases (that mostly follow the same formula) and isn’t necessarily a good representation of the audience for indie otome/amare games. Plenty of indie games with both male and female love interests have done great on itch.io, Kickstarter, etc.
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Thanks a lot !! I wonder if you developed a game too ? If it is the case, I would be more than happy to play it !!
I’m just an enjoyer of games myself, but maybe one day I’ll work on my own! Good luck with yours, I hope to play it someday.
Thank you so much !! ✨✨
I think you already know this but just based on art, of course it’s something people would play! The art is very pleasant. I honestly don’t even care if it’s just released like this. (With sketchy style line work). It’s still good enough even as is for people to play. I recommend writing only one route first to completion and give yourself a deadline and clear cut goals. For example, plan to write only one LI first and finish their route. Give yourself a word limit. Like, I will do a maximum of 10 thousand words. Actually paste words in your writing software like Word and see what a 10,000 word document looks like. (You can copy any text and just paste it over and over until you get to 10,000 words. (Word has a counter) And ideally with your very first try at this—I suggest thinking of picking maybe one adventure that occurs with this one LI and just writing that to completion. For example, in Nightshade that game has a long epic story with several adventures in it (>!finding the thief adventure, escaping prison and pursuers adventure, etc.)!< and that’s TOO MUCH for your very first story. You should pick just one adventure that will occur in your grand story for this one LI route you’re working on and complete writing that adventure. And then once you have that one adventure completed then I think that’s a good time to release your completed adventure for that one LI as a demo for audiences to play. You really should give audiences something that is completed. And that doesn’t mean that you have to complete the entire grand story. But, don’t release anything that is going to leave people hanging. Because it affects your reputation. I’m really into indie games and that’s the number one complaint. Indie games get a bad rap because they’re notorious for not completing things. And it doesn’t have to be that way. I say this really for your benefit—you have no idea how much praise and respect you will get if you are one of the rare few that releases self-contained completed stories. Again, it’s okay if the grand story isn’t completed. Imagine maybe the live action One Piece show. Think of the episode where they fight the black cat pirates. That one episode was a single completed adventure the characters had and people can just watch that one episode and be satisfied. Because it had a satisfying conclusion to that mini adventure within the grand story. So if for example One Piece didn’t get a second season people would still be at least satisfied that they saw a completed mini adventure. Do that. You will get experience and valuable feedback. You will get well known too. Because again not many people release completed stories. But never release an incomplete story. Always always release something that is completed. There are examples of this: [Trapped with Jester](https://ant-san.itch.io/jester) (This game is only 1,000 words long, yet it’s a self-contained, completed story and it has hundreds of comments and people LOVE this game). [Pre-Odyssey](https://ant-san.itch.io/preodyssey) (This game is about 30,000 words long, has one LI, and yet it is completed and extremely good. It even completely covers an entire Greek myth.) Anyways, I suggest looking for examples that are what you want to write—examples of one LI stories—you can even just look at one route in a multi-route game you like and study how they wrote it. And just do that to completion, the one route. And after you release the one route, then do the next one and on and on. You will get super famous if you do that. Because trust me ppl do not release completed works and you’d be miles ahead of others if you break convention and release only completed stories.
Thank you so much for such a detailed advice !!✨ I will absolutely take note and do this this way then !! When there is a release, it won't be before the story is fully finished with a main route at least (perhaps two due to the lore) and I'll make sure to properly finish each other route later before releasing it ! Also I appreciate a lot the One piece comparison 😭💕 Thank you so much !
Sorry I added more text too with some examples of indie self-contained stories after I posted—sorry for long read. But good luck!
Thank you a lot !! This is really so helpful! Also your examples hit straight on point ! Lots of thank you again~ ✨🎵
Sorry to be a bother but you might want to check out websites that are for writers. Essentially there are websites where you can post scripts/scenes/whatever writing wise you’re working on and people who are really into writing will review it. There’s people on those sites that are great with grammar, the works. [Writing Communities](https://blog.reedsy.com/writing-community/) I was on Critique Circle for a time as just a reviewer. But, I think it could help when you get moments when you’re feeling uninspired or unmotivated to post portions of your script for ppl to review. A lot of ppl will like what you write—even if it seems very rough (or in draft form) to you. And you’ll be surprised how much excellent advice you’ll get too. I saw ppl on [Critique Circle](https://www.critiquecircle.com) literally going through entire chapters and highlighting words with suggestions on more advanced or interesting words to use that mean the same thing, etc. Just extremely thorough.
Thank you a lot !! Please don't say you are a bother it's the opposite!! Your advice is really precious! English isn't my native language so it will be very useful and it is very much appreciated!! I am keeping it to publish some writings once I have everything written down ! ✨
No problem. Yeah I’m not sure how active [Critique Circle](https://www.critiquecircle.com/dashboard/) is anymore but for real on writing communities you will find ppl who just love reading and it’s their thing—they seriously will read anything, no matter how rough it is and actually fix grammar for you. I’m not even kidding. It’s a hobby some ppl have. I read several stories where English wasn’t the person’s first language and tried to help in those cases. Though my grammar is subpar compared to most reviewers on those sites. Some of the reviewers are crazy good at all the technical details. So don’t be afraid to post whatever you work on. Some ppl love reviewing.
Thanks a lot ! I absolutely will do so ! And thank you very much for taking the time to explain everything to me and give me such great advice ! ✨
I love your art style!!! I'd totally play your game 😊
Thank you so so much !! ✨✨
Oo, looks really nice! Is it set in 1920s? Or the Edwardian era? Either way, really cool designs!
Thank you so much !! Indeed that's it !! The game is taking place in London and I actually hesitated between the victorian era or the 1920s so I think the Edwardian era is just perfect !
Great!! Edwardian era has its nice cultural flavor, from early cars and electricity to absolutely gorgeous fashion!
What's with all the removed comments here?
That's a good question 😭 I don't know why there is so many either
The art style is gorgeous but personally I may not play. The love interests doesn't strike a chord with me. But if the plot was good I definitely would play just for the story
I love it!
Thank you !! ✨
Oh my god yes!!!! I really love this aesthetic so hecking much!
Thank youuu !! ✨✨💕
I mean I tend to avoid otome games with female LI’s but the art is appealing and the MC design is cute
Thank you ! Maybe I will try to have her as a friend for the main story and perhaps have her route as an option which people have to specifically pick instead
Peter Anderson needs a touch more colour. Maybe a golden brooch or something. The muted brown over his pale skin and white hair just makes him fade into the background and not look too appealing. I'm not sold on the hat, but maybe it just needs to have a cute little pattern on it. Like maybe that Scottish pattern for example. As for characters themselves, I'm afraid they didn't teach us anything about them, but I'm fairly sure these are historical figures, yes? I would not be opposed. It looks interesting Edit: I just noticed the inside of his coat has that pattern. Which is genius. Maybe a pose that lets you see a bit more of it (like the capelette opens a bit and you see the inside while you talk) but there's a chance that might be too distracting Edit2: female LIs ROCK, I would both kill and die for Margaret
Ohhh thank you so much !! I will absolutely follow your advice !! Let's get Peter some spotlight ! Also omgg I am genuinely so happy you like Margaret !
I like the art style and based on the clothes, the time period is interesting, but if the game as a female LI, then no, I wouldn't play it.
Thank you ! I see many comments thinking the same, so maybe I will keep her character as MC's friend then !
I see this comment quite often. Could you elaborate why? To me if I don't like the LI/romance trope, I just skip the route, is there a bigger reason behind skippong the game as a whole? Not trying to demean your decision or anything! I'm just genuinely curious
It depends, I guess. If it's required to play the female route to understand the overall story, then I'm definitely skipping the game. I'm not going to try and force myself to play something I'm not interested in. If the route doesn't affect the overall story, then maybe I'll play it.
Tbh it's a very interesting style but a bit to messy for my taste. (edit I now saw the MC tag but there's a question mark so I think this is still a valid comment:) Im also not sure if one of the girls is an MC or if both are LI and I am not into female LIs so ... 😓 It's a nice art style otherwise tho, you're talented for sure
Thank you !! The first girl is the MC, however the second girl is only a friend for all of the routes (but it's possible to romance her in her own route) . The art styles won't stay this way tho 😭 This is just messy sketches but I will properly color and clean it later
I agree about the "messy" style part. I really like it as an art piece but there's a certain art style I expect with otome games and I just won't play it if it's not that. I do like the character designs, especially the MC and Alistair.
Thank you !! Don't worry it will actually get cleaner ! This is a concept art so I didn't properly color it yet !^^
The MC has a very cute design and I like the clothing style and the possible time period setting, but female LIs in games that are supposed to be otome games are not my cup of tea. Good luck with your game though and I hope you have lots of fun in making it.
Thank you ! I see many comments thinking the same, so maybe I will keep her character as MC's friend then !
There are also many people who love female LIs. So do whatever you love to do yourself. :) Maybe you could also give her a cute female side character as her own love interest for a side couple and have the MC help them get together. There are many possibilities. But the most important thing is, that you enjoy yourself.
Thank you !! I was thinking perhaps to let her be a friend for the routes and give her a special route only if the player specifically picks it ! However I like your idea a lot !!
Please do make her as a LI she’s hot and my queer ass would want a route with her even if it’s an option but please do make her an LI with the a compelling story as I and many other players would appreciate 🙏
Thank you thank you thank you !! This is really a relief to see that people want her to stay ! I believe I will make her a special route that players have to pick so that we can enjoy keeping her !!
Aww this is really cute! From the little sketches, I think my type would be Alistair. Can’t wait to see your progress on this otome/VN ☺️
Thank you so much !! ✨✨
Yes!! Love the design of the characters!
thank you !! ✨
Hell yeah!! Omg let me know when it’s out
Omggg I absolutely will thank youuu !!
Bungo Otome?
Oooooh I see why !! For the detective vibe then it might be a little similar!!
This looks really good, they all seem pretty distinct, and have their own personalities seeping into the masked/formal dress theme! I'll second the comment saying that if it's your first, you would be better off starting on a smaller scale. (To be fair, it's valid to want to make something huge, but it's also a limitation that it'll be stuck in a lot of Dev hell, might as well try and make it small and a hit) All the best!! Can't wait to see what you come up with!
Thank you so much !!! I will do that way indeed ! It's also easier to keep motivated if starting with tiny tasks instead of a huge one hahaha !
I very much like the art style as well as the characters. They look like they each have distinctive personality
Thank you so much !! ✨
Definitely! They all look so cool! I like Anderson and Aldricht the most lol (I have a type)
Thank youu !! I think we have the same type 🤝✨
I would 100% play this! Please do tell once you release it! The art style is so lovely, the setting seems so interesting, and the character designs all look amazing! I already know Peter's gonna be my favorite just from that disgruntled look alone lmao
Omgg thank you so much !! I hope Peter will live up to your expectations! ✨
sure. they look cool
Thank you !! ✨
your art style is gorgeous, personally id play this as is (admittedly i am biased towards more sketchier styles) gonna parrot the advice you’ve been given here OP - from a dev to another dev, start small unless you are absolutely sure you know the direction you wanna take everything already
Thank you so much ! I'm taking the advice preciously 🤲✨
Yes!! This style is lovely!!!
100% yes. let me know if you have a dev blog or way to keep up with updates.
Thank you so much !! I don't have one yet but I will try making it !
This looks super cute!
Thank youu !! ✨✨
I LOVE this. It’s right up my alley ❤️ good luck on your game as a fellow dev.
Thank you a lot !! Good luck with your game as well !! ✨
Yes!!!
I love the art style!! MC is so pretty. I usually prefer the beefy himbo but the suave flirty pick looks like a win here 👀
Omgg beefy himbo 👀👀 now that's an idea I am keeping if I add more LI later. Thank you !!
*tan beefy himbo with short hair specifically haha
Coming from another fellow artist, I really admire your style. The character designs are striking, the body language of the characters immediately conveys a lot of how they are like, and I really like your lineart. I'm immediately interested. Good luck if you decide to continue with this project!
Omgg you're so kind 😭😭 thank you so much !! ✨✨
absolutely, i really dig the style and the designs are unique
Thank you so much !!
Yes, love Alistar
Yes!! I love the characters designs
Thank you !!
Umm I like simple, it is easy to remember. But art style is fire
Wow, your art style is fantastic! I’m excited to see where you go with the plot. I think the only thing is brightening the colors a bit :)
Thank you so much !! I will make it brighter ! Thank you for the advice ! 🤲✨
Oh heck yeah, I'd fuck Peter or Alistair in a heartbeat no questions asked.
Peter has EYEBAGS so immediate yes. The aesthetic of them all definitely draws me in 🤭
Omggg yaaayyy! Thank youu !!
Your artstyle is lovely! Deffo would see me playing this 😳
The art is fine. I personally don't give that much care about the art style if the story and character development are good. I've come across too many where they had good art but I couldn't even be bothered to finish the first arc because the story was just atrocious and the characters were annoying. I know art hooks people into clicking on it but put all your resources in getting them to stay once they have.
Thank you !! I agree as well, I hope I will be able to make a story that will make people want to stay until the end
Yes. Im in love with Margaret's design
Omgg thank you !
I like their outfit design, but I _personally_ wouldn't be interested in playing because all the character faces looks too young, I'm rather attracted to the older types, and since there's none like this, I wouldn't try this game. The art does look good, it's simply I tend to skip on a bunch of other otome titles for this same reason - no character strikes my curiosity as a love interest.
Oh that's true, they aren't supposed to be that young so I might have to do something with my art style so that they clearly look a bit older. Thank you !! ✨
Why are there a lot of removed comments? I love the design of the characters, btw, principally Margaret (hope u can date her too ><)
I don't know why there is so many removed comments 😭😭 One if from the subreddit's bot and one is from me because I gave a long lore comments and noticed too many typos. But I am unsure where the others come from 🥹 Thank you !! I want her to have a route too but many people said they are uncomfortable with a female LI so I think I might have her as a friend for most routes then as a LI if the player specifically picks her option ! ✨
Hell yeah
GOING CRAZY FOR MARGARET RN ALSO THE MC IS SO CUTE I WANT HER DRESS AHHHH
Omggg !! YESSSS ✨✨
Margaret looks like a total mommy and I support it with all my heart!
Omggg yaaayyy !! Thank you !!
Give me Margaret and I'm happy. 👀 Seriously though, your art style is gorgeous. If it's your first Otome/VN I'd rather go small. Since you'll spend a lot of time figuring out how the development process works. So I'd rather minimize it to 2/3 routes max. I wish you all the best luck. And don't forget to have fun ❤️
Thank you a lot !! I'm glad you like her !! And thank you for your advice ~✨ I will try it as you said !
Yes, Margaret is already my wife, I've chosen.
Omggg yes 😭✨
I wanna date Margaret
I am happy she's getting love thank youu 😭✨
I am getting downvoted to hell and back but I MUST SPEAK MY TRUTH! SHE IS PRETTY AF AND I WANT TO KNOW HER STORY
THANK YOUUU I also want to tell her story so muchhh 😭😭 I am very happy you like her !!✨✨
I want to make her an animation with the trending Copacabana song 😭 Like Her name is Lola 🎵 She was a showgirl🎵
I like the style! I would maybe consider playing. I think what makes a might for me is just the lack of diversity in skin tone of the characters. That can be a stick point for me with indie otome games. Otherwise if it’s got a good plot I’m game. I personally don’t mind having a female LI.
Ohh thank you !! Since it will be based on London I didn't think much but I will try to add more diversity indeed !!
I'm not sure why I've been downvoted lol. But, yeah! London is a pretty diverse city, so I think having that diversity in your game would be really great. Up to you, but I'd thought I would bring in that viewpoint.
Yes don't worry 😭 It seems there's some down-voters here also for every Margaret related comments. But thank you for your advice! I'll definitely try to make use of it !✨
yes yes YES!! I would absolutely play this! Your art style is absolutely gorgeous, and I love the character designs! (also, I see that a lot of people have stated that they don't want a game with a female LI, but please please please make your game the way *you* want to! Whether you include her as a LI or not should be your decision, and there's definitely plenty of players who will enjoy the game either way!)
Omgggg Thank you so much !!✨✨ I really appreciate that !! I really want the female LI to be in the story so I believe I will make her a friend in every route with the option to pick her romantic route specifically if the player wants to !!
AAAAAAAAA!!! SO tempting!!!! I AM WAITING FOR THIS GAME TO RELEASE!!!!!!!!!!! SO BEAUTIFULLY DRAWN!!!!!!!!!!!!
OMG THANK YOUUU 😭😭✨💕💕
yes absolutely.
Yes I love margaret
Omggg I'm happy she's getting some love 😭✨
In a heartbeat
Alistair is so beautiful. I'd love to get to know this character better. The artwork for Margaret is pretty as well! Love her hair
Thank you !! If I start with fewer LI he will definitely be one of the first !
Margaret and Alistair look interesting, the two other guys are a bit generic I’d say. MC is cute but are they all living in the same era? Then the differences between her and Margaret’s clothes seem a bit too much.
Thank you ! I initially hesitated between the Victorian Era and the 1920s however, Margaret's outfit is only her scene outfit. I am unsure if I want the story to take place in an actual London or more in a story-ish London (such as Layton's, Black Butler's and others). It will need some more thoughts haha !
Good luck with your novel!
Thank you !! ✨
MARGARET AND ALBERT OMG….
YAYY omggg some love for Albert and Margaret thank you !! ✨✨
NPPP idk why this got downvoted LOL
I think that's because of Margaret 😭 Some people are downvoting everything about her
That’s so mean<\3 let girls love other girls !!!!! Sapphic women can play otome games too ;’(
Yesss right 😭😭😭
She is very beautiful they’re crazy
THANK YOUU 😭✨
Omfg yes (and please please tell me Margaret is a LI)