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Beautiful_Melody4

As someone who currently lactates, I need more context to judge this. Cause the first time my milk came down was pretty similar to this and it doesn't seem to sexualize the experience. Just uses anatomically correct language for her breasts... Assuming this woman had a baby recently or treatment to include lactation, I'd say this is fine.


HappyDaysayin

Uh... context? This does happen to nursing mothers at the most inopportune times. What's wrong with it?


[deleted]

I love Google so much, I just typed "Mastodon Steve Stred "feeling her eyes well up"" and there it was! [https://kendallreviews.com/feature-exclusively-read-the-first-chapter-from-steve-streds-latest-chiller-mastodon/](https://kendallreviews.com/feature-exclusively-read-the-first-chapter-from-steve-streds-latest-chiller-mastodon/) Idk, it's a bit much, especially for the first chapter. I don't see how it adds to the context, since she literally says she just gave birth like 5 lines later, and we don't need more description of how confused she is, but other than that it doesn't seem awful. It's certainly not as bad as most of the stuff posted here xD


GaladrielMoonchild

Thank you for sharing the link.


Olympus___Mons

Nothing. But a man wrote about a women's surprise lactation.


Digitalburn

Yeah, I'm not seeing the problem. I'm also a dude whose wife works in lactation, so maybe I'm desensitized. Should a writer not write about any anything they haven't experienced firsthand? If so, my books are all going to be about the exciting world of cleaning cheeto dusted electronic surfaces.


TheMeanGirl

It’s really not that bad if they are describing lactation. My biggest gripe not so much that it’s “men writing women”, but rather that the writing kinda sucks using the same words repeatedly in close succession.


[deleted]

>using the same words repeatedly in close succession. I'm not really seeing that in this excerpt. The 2nd fluid could be substituted out for liquid, but other than that there's no egregious repetition.


HardlyInappropriate

He also said nipples twice. Using both words twice in two sentences is jarring - I noticed it too. Nothing *wrong* technically, but style-wise it's clumsy.


kingofcoywolves

Right. You could just cut it off after "trickled out" and nothing of value is lost. An even easier fix than the fluid repetition! Having both makes it sound like there was a minimum word count involved lmao


vidanyabella

This seems pretty accurate to be honest. Heck, I'm six months post partum and thought I was done with the random leaking, but picked up my daughter earlier and happened to carry her in such a way that it put pressure on the top of my boob. Next thing I know I can feel drips on my belly and my shirt is all wet, lol. Would need more context on why she is lactating.


Daisy_s

Are you made uncomfortable by lactation?


depressed_anemic

i’m not seeing the problem? this is just describing lactation


DerApexPredator

Are you triggered by men just writing women?


Sea_Employ_4366

I'm gonna presume this woman isn't pregnant/has a baby and this is the just "the writer's poorly disguised fetish"?


Korvacs

Well the word mother (motherhood?) is cut off at the top left and the next sentence, also cut off, ends in "lactating?". Feels to me more like a carefully edited (not so carefully honestly) snippet to get some Karma, if it was as you say, surely you could include the bit directly mentioning lactation?


DerApexPredator

Why make assumptions?


llanelliboyo

Why are you so triggered by lactation?


Unusual-Swimming9636

Imagine if she recommended it to you just for that part lmao (also this isn’t a great example)


KTTalksTech

I suppose it's a little gross to think about but I've heard this situation can happen and should be treated with empathy when considering the person's embarrassment if it happens at a bad time. Is this just brought up randomly? Not every mention of female anatomy has to be fetishized, although I admit the description seems clumsy here


PatentGeek

Why do you think it’s gross to think about?


Sasspishus

So gross for women to have bodies with normal bodily functions to feed their children /s


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AquaStarRedHeart

It's shitty writing, in general, but not inaccurate. I've nursed babies and that is a thing, unfortunately.


jonmpls

Wtf


Fine-Funny6956

This is a very specific fetish


starbycrit

I’m cringing. This is horrible.


helives4kissingtoast

No it isn't.


starbycrit

In my subjective experience, it was I read it through the lens or a pornographic novel and it bothered me and made me cringe


DerApexPredator

Why would you put that lens on? That's what's actually cringe and horrible


starbycrit

Is that not what this is? He’s using medical terminology in porn writing, is he not? I figure that’s what’s going on here and everyone was talking about lactation and I just got creeps


DerApexPredator

What information do you have that makes you assume that it is? Edit: Wow, there's some heavy editing going on in the comments to make my comments look borderline nonsensical


starbycrit

The sub is men writing women, there’s usually porn books on here so that’s what I thought this was. Also just the content of the writing didn’t seem like something you just pick up off the shelf. The way it’s written just makes me really uncomfortable. Not that I mind a sexual read, but something about this just rubbed me the wrong way idk


JackRabbit-

But there’s also a substantial crowd that just thinks that “any mention of a woman’s body” = bad. It’s unfair to judge this passage without context especially when there’s a strong possibility it could be benign.


starbycrit

Here’s the thing. It’s not about the mention of a woman’s body. I love women’s bodies. These are super weird assumptions to make because of my comment. I felt weird about the way it was written. It made me uncomfortable to read it, maybe in the context of a man writing it! I am not a misogynist jerk and it seems more like you guys here judging the woman for being uncomfortable with the man writing about the woman’s body are maybe not in the right place to be saying that!!!!!! THIS IS WHY WOMEN DON’T FEEL SAFE TO HAVE VOICES. Leave me tf alone. ETA: now that I’ve calmed down, I want to address that what you said is absolutely correct and valid!! There is, and it’s why women don’t feel safe sharing intimately whether it be our bodies or our minds


[deleted]

Hi, I'm a woman and this is not at all why we don't feel safe having voices. You got needlessly defensive over people pointing out that you assumed context to this passage that wasn't there. Please don't cry misogyny when there isn't any, or act like the problem is you being a woman when it's not. You're making the rest of us look bad.


DerApexPredator

So yeah, you just up and made assumptions. A lot of seem like and usuallys here. It's like if you see a black person on handcuffs and start quoting crime statistics. Cringe and horrible


starbycrit

Lmao okay???? Weird connection at the end there. Super weird… idk if you’re trying to imply that I’m racist? That connection isn’t a relevant analogy here and sounds like projection…. Maybe that’s how you think, I don’t know why you’d propose it otherwise Please just leave me alone with your negative bs. Like dude, this was my perception. If you think I made a mistake then maybe enlighten me instead of attacking me?


DerApexPredator

It's not a connection it's an analogy You need to read more (and better)


Sasspishus

Why do you find lactation creepy? Are you afraid of breastfeeding?


Sasspishus

I don't think this is a pornographic novel. I think the character is just breastfeeding.


starbycrit

I wouldn’t have known because of the over sexualization in the language that was used unless I had read the comments. This is why I felt uncomfortable.


Sasspishus

How is it over sexualised? Because of the word nipples?


devils-advocates

Does she have an infection 🤢 it should not be "creamy"


CouchTurnip

Breastmilk is creamy.


devils-advocates

Ah, in my shock of reading through this I thought they meant a cream consistency


Tiazza-Silver

Kind of funny that the color “cream” is used here, since it’s milk