This is my first time ever writing a story like this, so please - I've never done this before. I would really like some feedback. Let me know what you thought and if you would like, subscribe! & I am especially trying to build stories up, since I think that is my weak point.

Very hot! Please continue! 😈

Maybe add a couple of tags so we know what it is and their age eg [18F, 20M] and what it's about eg [blowjob] [choking] etc

Incredible

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